All Comments on 'Bree's A Naughty Girl Ch. 01'

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Where do you get off turning a War Hero That comes from the Iraq and you turn it into a piece of shit we have guys that are fighting for us over there and this Tim comes home and finds after 4yrs that his fiance is fucking his asshole father Tim should have shot them both he salso should have turned her out to the streets where she can show everyone she`s a slut then get her hooked on cocaine.

Atlanta,Ga

Disgusting

from someone with an IQ of a turnip. His last magnum opus, Father Uses Huge Asset, went 20 chapters and only deserved a paragraph. If that wasn't enough, we have Father Uses Huge Asset II. Christ, it is the same story. No doubt the author plans another multiple-chapter piece of shit. Spare us.

damn, that was just plain disrespectful.

Don't worry about these ignorant comments. They are made by small dicked, red neck fuckwits who think that writing something like this is treasonus. So much for free speech.

traumatic syndrome over and spills bullets into his family over. Have a little more respect for our service people, I remember friends getting Dear John letters, at least those women had some class, what you depict here is people with no worth whatever. You need to remove this it is sick and speaks stongly of some very mentally ill people. Are you speaking from experience as Timmy writer?

This story dishonors our soldiers not to mention the faithful women who wait for them. You should be ashamed but are probably incapable of it.

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Im only rating it a 0, cause i cant raite it in negative

This was a total piss of shit, I would love to give it a negative but 0 is as low as you can give.

The author is certainly free to express his opinion by writing and you by commenting. Readers are then free to express an opinion on his possible parentage as well as his writing ability and his treatment of a character depicted as having served in our armed forces honorably.

Free speech all around!

I think this "writer" composes text on a 2nd grade level because he never got to 3rd grade. It is, quite simply, so incredibly poorly written, it isn't worth more commentary than that.

Nor the writer or the story is worth a critique, just a O.

Didn't like the characters nor the plot. Didn't bother to finish it.

If there was ever an example of the fact that the "Loving Wives" category is going to hell in a handbasket, this is it.

I feel sorry for Tim's mom.

After 4 years of fighting hell, he comes home to this and just accepts? Hell no! And this is just ch. 1. I hope that this doesn't follow that other monster dick father story that was on here not too long ago because this site just doesn't need it. Nor do the readers.

ZERO ZERO ZERO. Absolutely appalling! THE worst, most unrealistic dialogue. Perhaps another 14yo "writer"?

It there is an award for the worse story ever posted, or the most senseless, or the most inane dialogue ever written, this one will win. Otherwise, hardly worth even commenting on

Zero

The content and characters of this story were so unimaginable that I HOPE THERE IS NOT A CHAPTER 2.

This story belongs in the "non-erotic" section. Reading this is a complete waste of time.

Well UK aside from your aussie friend who we will assume is also into wimpy male humiliation and has no self respect - everyone else thinks you and the story(?) suck bowel extract or something worse.

So forget ch. 2 through 83. Just write them & read them to yourself to get excited then send them to the wimp aussie to get beside itself. How sad

BRAVO to almost everybody who voted and sent comments

Soldiers are professional killers. His fiancee and his father should be lucky. Unreal plot. Better construct another unbelieveable story.

seems to be universal 00 right totally unrealistic sure hope you didnt give up your day job

The dept. of the Iraqi insurgency propaganda? Nah. Just kidding they would have done much better job...

What a mean spirited ugly write!

Your goal must have been to write a story with only 00%comments, and you almost made it. Good job, but save us from chapter 2.

Can someone please help me find the minus vote button as even 0 is way too high a rating for this drivel

I'm seeing a pattern in your writing Okay I don't know if your dick is the size of thumb or what your problem is but STOP WRITTING and yea 0 is to good for this crap

love it, dont stop writing

What's to say that hasn't been said by many,many other people, your stories are truly twisted and sick pieces of crap. You need some professional mental health care seriously, to help you resolve your obvious "Daddy Issues" that you have. This site wasn't designed to help lunatics such as yourself. Do yourself a favor and get this help!

Great story, hot, hot, hot!

And to the naysayers; lighten up.

It's obviously a fantasy, the author needen't have issues

to write like this.

It got me hard!

Keep on humiliating your male subjects, and I'll

continue giving it a 100% as long as it's as hotly written as this.

That would be a short story, if it were written to be halfway believeable. "Timmy" would have shot them both, then been a real hero to his jilted mother.

take your puckass to war and come home write some shit like this.fuck you who wrote this and the whore who birth your sorry ass.find someone else to fuck with beside someone who fighting for your sorry ass.

Your stories tend to have a recurring theme... Idea of the theme isn't bad, and can be very good if the story is well written. This isn't. Spelling and grammatical errors, problems with the timeline etc..etc. Also, the idea of writing a story like this about a soldier coming home from Iraq, is in horrible taste by any account, fantasy or not.

Whoever you are, you are a sorry and sad person to write such crap like this. The people that fight for our freedom are brave and you make a mockery of them like this! you're sick, but you probably already knew that. Go get treatment.

More of these, so many taboos, I love that you are humiliating someone from the military!

one of the best storys i´ve ever read.. please continue writing!

I think your sex change to a man was a failure should have stayed a women

One of the asylum graduates whom have been released too early !

This is well beyond anything. And this cretin thinks it can write ??

Note: I am positive that the first anon comment come from this shithead. Nobody else could be this stupid !!

Run, don't walk, back to whatever hole you crawled out of and you can be sure I will never, ever read any thing else you may write.

Wow, what kind of sick mind comes up with this crap? This is the worst story I've ever read on Literotica!!

I've seen humiliation stories but that is dark and terrible by the end I was hoping he kills them, it's such a terrible story idk who could get off on that much trash and disrespect

Perhaps ACDC123 skills would be best suited for writing parking tickets.

Sorry but little sissy boys like this are not accepted in the military so this is not even closed to being viable as a fantasy.

Sluts should not writte from mans point of view, just doesn't work.

. . . To every single one of your asshole stories!

Please stop writing !!!! You know that the story of your daddy issues was already done over 2400 years ago in "Œdipus Tyrannus" by Sophocles; who did it one hell of a lot better than you, motherfucker! (Normally, "motherfucker" is just a pejorative term of derision, but in your case, I suspect it is actually an accurate description of what you are!)

Written at a second grade level as some prior commenter noted, absolutely no suspense, lousy sex scenes; just a boring story on a loathsome subject.

Please do the world a favor and don't breed!

You really need long term help! I'd recommend several years of B.F. Skinner-type treatment with you strapped to electrodes shocking you everytime you got these kinds of thoughts. Like the protagonist in Stanley Kubrick's film of "A Clockwork Orange". Or the original version of a frontal lobotomy--an ice-pick through your eye socket straightinto your brain, and then twirling the ice-pick around for a bit!!

Based on the terminology, spelling and descriptions, it appears you are british (or from one of the former or present subject states). "Favourite", "arse", "door handle" (American--"door knob"), use of "lads" to describe fellow soldiers (over 34 years, the US Army sent me to 49 states and 10 countries with thousands of G.I.s and nver once did I hear or read of them referred to as "lads"). So just another british frou-frou!!

You need therapy , and urgently----!

You actually had the balls to....wait...no balls...YOUR A FUCKING PUSSY!

PLEASE....PUT A GUN TO YOUR HEAD!!!!

Tim couldn't be both a survivor of an extended tour there and be the wimp you portray. Why do you demean the military? You should be taught a few lessons by the men who serve. Scumbag! Someone needs to write a sequel where Tim comes home again, beats his asshole father, frees his downtrodden mother and ships Bree off to a third world whore house where she belongs.

A bayonet up Tom's ass, and a grenade in Bree's nasty snatch would help Tim get back his mojo. You are a sick bastard.

Wow, the comments for this one are insane. People just seem to take fiction too seriously all the time. This is a stroke story and they're acting like it's article in the London Times.

I agree that anyone who has joined the military and has served with honor and courage does not deserve to be cuckolded and humiliated by their own Father. IN REAL LIFE. In a made-up erotic story I'm not that bothered.

In fact if such a situation were to occur in real life and a soldier came home from deployment to find his fiancee and his father fucking, and he killed them. Well, jury nullification is a thing you know, I'd have no trouble finding such a soldier not guilty.

Having said that this was a great story and I found it very erotic, it did take some suspension of disbelief. I mean, both the Tom and Tim were military men, and for Tom to dishonor his own service so is criminally depraved. A decorated veteran of high rank conducting himself in so unbecoming a manner would be disgrace.

Wow, I think I have to take my own advice and calm the fuck down, it's not a true story. Anyway keep up the good work. I gave you four stars for this the only reason it wasn't five is Bree seems to have too much control over Tom. And because my own issues with the military mean I try to follow my own advice but I'm only human.

Love Tom and Bree, please continue this epic love story and destroy Timmy!

ENCORE UNE JE ME DEMANDE CE QUE FONT CERTAINES PERSONNES SUR CE SÎTE SÎL N'AIME PAS LES HÏTOÎRES DE CORNÛS !? PEUT ÉTRE DES FRÛSTRÉS COCÛS EUX MÉME !!!!!?

Fuck Tom is a action man haha

Truly awful.

what a shitty dad and whore girl friend.