All Comments on 'Summer Houseguest Ch. 01'

This storyline has the potential to be a great addition to the materials posted here. Very well written, waiting for more!!

i really hope you write more about these two, and soon!

i can't wait to read more of your stories

Very well written. Nice pacing of story. Since it was so realistic and erotic I found the only flaw to be the emphasis on his 14 inch cock. While I am sure there are anatomical specimens out there with a 14 inch cock, I think this particular story would be even better if his cock was more in a normal range. He is 6'1" after all. It's going to be pretty big anyway for this woman. As written, it is a slight conflict between the pornographic and the erotic. Nice work though!

The beginning has promise, and then it slides off into trite adolescent predictability. Not only does the young man have a 14” cock, he just somehow “knows” how to be a skilled lover while having never been with a woman? Characters are physical perfection possessing no intellectual depth, in other words vapid and two-dimensional.

Well it was a very good and hot story but like one of the others I feel the 14" went overboard a little, anyway for me to actually believe that or even in fiction. But the story was very hot.

Hey Alan, very nice story you have written there.

My hugest turn-on is a young guy with a massive cock...

The bigger, the better...and as it's a fantasy, I can only find these rare specimens in stories, thanks to guys like you...thank you so much!

Please post part 2 soon.

You created a great sexual atmosphere but you could have extended the build-up more; Rachel and Nathan discovering each other, getting to know one another, and the sexual tension developing.

Also, the love scene was unrealistic. An 18-year-old virgin who drives a Mustang and just happens to be an amazing lover? And the 14" cock was too over-the-top. This story would have been even hotter if you had allowed the characters to be more realistic.

Could've been great, but the exclamation points ruined it. All in moderation.

Your stories are very very good. Why did you stop writing?

Overdoing it a bit? And she was happy (as opposed to terrified)? I know it's just a story, but it would have been better keeping it a bit more real.

wonderful story filled with love, tenderness, and expansive sex shared between two needy lovers. young virgin boy with huge penis learns how to experience deep love with someone that teaches him how powerful sex can be at its best.

You continue your style - I know - TIME - when ever you are able - again and again, like your characters, though you maybe do not have the time. Our loss!