These dark recesses of your mind may make me tremble, but I think that in the dark recesses of my mind, there is no where that I would rather be, as a blanket of warmth envelops me whenever we are together and I give myself to you over and over.
A hot little bit as a Domme stretches her mind and muscles and imposes her will in wanton manner.
there is said to be a dark side somewhere deep inside... but normally it is controlled and never finds the light of day... But then, there are some where it breaks free.. You captured it well inside your poem.
in today's New Poem Reviews. I think if you expanded on what you are saying, be more descriptive,this could be much more powerful. Thanks for sharing.
The poem is so beautiful and honest, even if starkly so...very very well written indeed...!
I felt awed when I read it...i think you'll understand why...!
. . . what we find inside of us when we stumble into unexplored territory.
A good editor would have tightened this up -- but nobody would touch your final line, your final phrase, your three final words.
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