A Cautionary Tale

What Fun

Very Enjoable.

boring slow awful emotional -less Bleh

The man guy in this stories is broken down drunken bum with no redeeming values at all. Fiona is a whore Lydia is whore Frank is scum... This was a complete waste of time. I guess the caution in this tale is dont try to base a relationship on Booze. Good thinking there.... dr phil....

Took a few seconds after reading the end...

...to connect the dots.

Dots Smots...

What's this about dots? I had to think about it and then read it again before the shining light at the end of the tunnel smacked me in the face. Dots? Hell, the crafty bastard that wrote this painted a perfect map and I didn't see it. I'm taking two aspirins and not calling anybody in the morning. I can't believe how easily I was drawn in and then got slapped square in my reality. Thank you, Author, for a well-crafted tale but be warned; I'm a gonna slip some "aluminum" clay targets in the machine the next time you're on the course. "Loss...Loss...Loss"

trying too hard

what is the point? the story goes nowhere, the guy is unbelievably stupid to be believed as someone "succesful". he is a drunk and is as good as dead. just one unhappy dead person.

You know Wanderer, at first I missed the point too

It to took me a bit to get the ending. At first I was with Harry, it made no sense to me.

But then I saw the two reviewers below me that suggested I missed something. So I went back and looked again. And darned if I didn't.

Harry if you see this, here's what your missing. With out giving it away, look at it from the guy's point of view:
-All of this took place from Saturday to Monday morning.
-The party where he was supposed to be during the opening sequence was a Saturday night
- His friends, who he just met during this trip, mysteriously knew where he lived, where he needed to be, flew him to his home country (generally) to an out of the way airport, and all in time for him to make it to his party while they were all drunk.
-Then at the end of the story, all of them are all back together, after they all came to his house (that was out of the way) to get him to take him back out flying with them.
-And when he came to what day was it and where was he?

Its more of a reason not to drink than a cause of what happened to him

-Risq

Good,very good

Wanderer,

I do hope you continue to write. You have a marvelous sense of humor and a very fertile mind.

This was a great peice of work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I just loved it!!!!!!!!!
When I was young I had some of those days!
Thank you for the fun.

PT

So this is what an alcoholic haze looks like from

the inside out! One of the Wanderer's stranger offerings but, then again, what do you expect when the narrator is three kites to the wind? LOL.

Great job, enjoyable story that made me laugh more than once. Thanks, Wanderer, for another superb story.

Another

good one Dave,keep them coming.Hope you are feeling better.

stupid fiance AND husband!

given that this man is a total moron, and given two equally promiscuous women, Fiona wins hands down!..... she already produce two fine, healthy children.... someone as stupid as this man, he'd be luck to raise another man's offspring!

WEIRD!!!!

As I read this strange tale I thought "weird – weird – WEIRD!" Then you say SATURDAY and bring us 'cold turkey' out of the 'drunken haze' you had put us in with your clever plot and skilful writing! Yes Wanderer, this was really one of your best. The negative comments show just how skilful you are since many (including you Harryin VA) totally missed the point. I only saw the light after rereading and careful rethinking! Again well done! Pete.

Great story

Great humour! He must have some feeling about Frank being a ladies man and not worrying about whose. He still suspects him with Fiona and doesn't really trust Frank, not with his girlfriend. Will he still go through with his plans?

Like an illusionist!

You warn us in advance that there is going to be something there to pay special attention to, and yet only towards the end I was beginning to get it. Finally, I could breathe again.
And BTW, maybe you could branch out some more into the style of Fantastic Realism?
It seems to comes so naturally for you.

Humorous but still stupid

As a big fan of yours, I was disappointed with this story. I think you traded the normal high quality of your writing for the novelty of your trick ending. I prefer your normal great story without the tricky ending.
Drunken sots stumbling around in a bad dream are just not worth following to your ending,
the Ct. Yankee

Bullshit

Piss-poor trash. Don't waste your time. If you do waste your time, don't overrate it because of the poster. This crap was posted by a writer, not by an author. Any fool can write.

rollicking ride

Much more fun than my last lesson from demon rum. I still have the occasional beer, but I'm way to old too have as much fun as this guy had.

Sometimes drinking is not so much fun ...

except when it is!

The mind is a terrible thing - bet he has nightmares about this nightmare.

Fun story.

Regards, Jack

You were drunk when you wrote this right?

Normally your stuff is pretty good, but can't say the same for this one.

Memories

Sometimes going on a bender has positive results!
Duke! Midwest!

didnt get it first time

i thought the story was wierd and wasnt up to the wanderers standard, after reading comments, i went back an reread the story. i finally caught on to what was going on. then it all made sense.

Love it!

I don't care what any one says. I LOVED IT! Laughed my ass off the entire read. I spent a week just like it one day.

Funny Ramblings... still much more coherant than..

... james Joyce. Must be all the alcohol the micks consume.

A boring, stupid British piece highlighting drunken Englishmen.

There was no caution displayed anywhere in this supposedly funny piece. LW stories are overloaded with drunks and drinking as a positive or negative excuse for any number of domestic tragedies. I for one have read enough of the drunken antics of our overseas cousins.

It was a DREAM. For goodness sake, lighten UP. NONE of it happened!

"life is just a dream".

Cute actually

I was slow as well. I have a spouse that lives in this world at times. It's very real for her at the time too.

Thanks***

For sharing a crazy story!!

Yep The old Dallas - it was all a dream ploy

LOL it can work sometimes - good luck dude heh

Damn

Great dream tale. I'm waiting for ch.2 when he wakes up.

Enjoyed it

a fun read. 😃

1/5

fucking boring.

Drank & Dreamed & Dreamed He Was Drunk . LOL.

Nice. Intelligent H&S. Why N.E. ?
Just a dream or a premonition? Poor guy.That would surely cure him of any hangover. lol.
No caution needed , its 5 stars all the way.

My.......

It doesn't have to be a dream....could be that it was the Saturday after all that crap fell on him. That's what happens when you get drunk over and over, you lose track of time. I don't know that makes this story better or not, either way works for me.

A pleasure

Still a fun read, even the third time.

What?

For every answer I must have 99 unanswered questions. Extremely poorly written. How can you write one amazingly brilliant story...then follow it up with something that would get failing grades for an elementary school student. This isn't just bad; this is god awful. Sounds like it was written by a drunk.

Nancy, Nancy, Nancy

Your comments have been spot on before, but I think you never got the plot here.

The main character WAS drunk... for 95% of the story LOL

So of course it sounds like it was written by a drunk.

Very funny story in fact. That poor bloke !

You would think he could find one girl that wasn't a whore

maybe Sharon?

Pretty damn funny!

A wonder what the drunken louts are up to now and if the business ever got off the ground?

TALK ABOUT NOT HAVING YOUR SHIT TOGETHER

that bloke did not even have it on the same continent, TK U MLJ LV NV