A fine example of a vignette. You just know she had learnt her lesson before he found out, but now it is more than to late. He's not going to take it lying down and she will pay.
stories that I have read. Yes, it was succinct, but it conveyed a range of emotions so well. In fact, after reading this story, I read your others. You have a gift for writing. Thank you for sharing these gems with us.
Bob
by
Anonymous02/23/07
One of the best ever!
Just a key moment in their lives. Although not "likely" the story feels right. So many stories have been so heavy handed lately (with great applause). I for one loves your simple and powerful tale. I feel this one. energystar
by
02/23/07
A different approach on the genre
While what is written is relatively short, what it says makes a book. Masterfully understated it achieves greater impact than if all aspects of the infidelity were explored in great detail.
Tightly woven - nicely done story.
Regards, Jack
by
Anonymous02/23/07
ill give it a 50
till i see if he does what he needs to do and gets the lights back in his eyes as he i hope burns her and her lover to the point that it may take years to even be able to see with eyes with no light...if her lover is married tell his wife ...go find your own lover and find another bright eyes for yourself...find someway to ge tyour light back even if you have to fuck a thousand women to do it...whoever her lover is needs to be destroyed ..that would be a sure fire way to get some light back in his eyes revenge can spark so much...sexual conquest is another way ...so again i say if it takes a thousand do it ...who says maybe you can even fuck the wife some again..after all when you tell his wife or put it out in the open it will hurt him anyway unless he is nothing to begin with...either way bring it all out ...make her hurt ...who knows maybe hell get his bright eyes back with her after her betrayal who cares
A sad story but one that definitely needs follow-up if the score is to be raised higher. This is an unfinished story. Currently it does not qualify as having an ending. That is a writing "faux pas". Cheers!
I believe the author when he asks for feedback, mentioning the amount of time required for writing the story. It looks like a perfectly polished gem. Nothing to spare nothing per the moment of the end is missing.
One great lesson to other writers-especially new ones. Chew on what you can swallow. You don’t necessarily have to cover people’s half life. A well chosen half an hour could make for a fantastic story!
by
Anonymous02/23/07
Perfect the way it is.
It accomplished what it should have, and like a fine work of art should be left that way. One of the best written short pieces I have read.
Wetapap is one of the best writers on here. He keeps everything to the point with out adding a lot unnecessary details. Such as what he has done with this story. When he does this you can tell that he has put a lot of thought and heart into what he has writen. I always enjoy reading one of his stories and even if this isn't his usual genre, he has still put forth the effort that he always does. How many authors do you know that can have such an impact with so few words? Think about it. Even well known authors usually don't get what they want accross without adding extra details that may or may not detract from a story. With this one Wetapap has once again proven that he has what it takes to write fiction.
Please keep the stories coming wetapap they are always appreciated by your fans. As always an excellent job and kudos to you for this story. Keep it up!!!
The moment of discovery and admission. How much pain can one or two minutes hold? This is a perfect example. What happens from here? It will be extremely painful no matter what, write a sequel if you wish or let us wonder, you are the author. Wetapap I wish you would write more, but if that means less quality don't change a thing. When you write one it's always top shelf and just great.
I liked your story not alot of love in it the husband didnt even ask her what his name was or ask her did she love him will we get her story on the guy and how they met ?what about revenge for the husband ?
Pat
Atlanta,Ga
... impressive. Good story. I'd written a similar plot. Maybe in consequence a little bit harder.
Nucleus
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Anonymous02/23/07
Beautifully written short story.
Very fine short but depressing story. A beautiful job of compressing a multitude of emotions into a short page. As a lover of happy endings, I didn't like the conclusion , but I can't deny the writers talent.
60 year old George
for everyone that has left comments or sent emails. i try to send a personal note to each individual. some i have no way of contacting. i do appreciate the comments and wish to thank everyone who has taken the time to read the story.
by
Anonymous02/23/07
Wow
A very interesting story, involving the simple perspicacity of a longtime husband leading with one slightly strained coincidence to the unveiling of truth. The way the story reads it's clear that he would have discovered the truth eventually - she just wasn't up to hiding, and he was no longer able to avoid wondering why she was no longer happy. The spare storytelling and unrevealed revealed ending of the marriage are masterful. Well done.
by
Anonymous02/23/07
Moving
Hard to find fault with this, no wimp, no real whore, so it's not easy to slam the characters, they seem to have very real feelings. She screwed up, now their world is falling apart, that simple, and very real.
The assistant Troll
by
Anonymous02/23/07
Excellent, another cheating slut, to be tossed
to the trash heap. Wont they ever learn to think with their hearts and souls for their families, their children, their spouses. She who would seek only her own self gratification seeks the end of all of consequence. Once the intimacy, the trust, the bond is broken nothing can bring it back to where it was. An adulterer is nothing more than a piece of worthless trash to be thrown out with the rest of the trash. You can love what she was but you can never love what she is. No woman is sorry she cheated, she is only sorry she is caught. No woman walks into cheating, it is always intentional and planned. And she can and will do it again in the right circumstances because the character, the personality, the mental disorder that led her there will always be ready to take her back. Never keep the trash, always throw it out.
by
Anonymous02/23/07
But, as someone said,
this was no more than a small vignatte, a tease, an ad, really. the "real story" may not be as interesting.
by
02/23/07
Hi Papa Mine...
I love your work, my only complaint was that this wasn't one of those grab your heart and rip it to pieces stories that you write so damn well. I was hoping when I started it that it would be four or five pages and I'd get the chance for a good cry and a happy ending...sigh. But I still love everything you do.
by
Anonymous02/24/07
Short But Powerful!
This story speaks volumes in such a short space. The wife clearly had placed her life with her husband in this routine box. Instead of addressing her boredom with this life she sought out a lover to "spice up her life." She was probably in love with the dream of an affair but the actual reality led to the change that her husband noticed. Like most cheaters she thought she would not get caught but a simple story exposed her double life. __________________________________________________ ____
Thanks for an outstanding story! I can not wait for your next submittal.
______________________________________ __________________
SleeplessinMD
Wetapap, you write so powerfully with so few words. You captured the moment so well and I as the reader felt a multitude of emotions. I see no need for a sequel since it will only lessen what we the readers pictured in our minds during the few moments the story covered. In my mind I pictured a woman who was seduced into a very short affair, probably leading to only a one-time sexual liaison before she realized what she had done. She now regrets the affair and is remorseful, but does not know how to handle the guilt and thus the lack of “bright eyes”. She could not hide her guilt from her husband; her eyes gave her away. The way the husband put two-and-two together was outstanding. Clearly, the wife already knew that “the affair (the He)” was not worth it as stated at the end of the story. ----- Burying her face in her hands, his wife quietly wept, "No… no he wasn't." -----
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Anonymous02/24/07
Very Good
First reaction was good but too short, was there a suspicion before etc etc, but no you got it right. He was sensible and strong, and she didn't get into that pathetic begging so many female charactors do. Bravo. More.
Wetapeap: It's patently obvious to see that you possess great skill in presenting a story. There was much I liked about how you composed it. The dialog was crisp and credible. The nuances, such as the husband's toying with his coffee cup, added nicely and effectively to make the story seem more real. Even the title was imaginative; a nickname not actually used in the story. (PP) That being said, the story just didn't have a "wow" factor for me. I'm sure that reflects more on me than than on your story. For me the wife's infidelity was telegraphed. Your use of the words "irritated" and "aggravated" in describing successive responses by the wife in discouraging her husband's attempts at conversation were clues that all was not happy in paradise. Once you introduced the newspaper with its accompanying coincidences, your destination was clear. It was then a matter of how pleasant the ride would be. And it was pleasant. I just was not comfortable with the premise. An apparently very happy and successful marriage degenerated to infidelity so very quickly. I realize that comprehensive back stories are not a necessary ingredient in a story's success, and that sometimes a leap of faith is crucial to fully enjoy a story. But I just couldn't buy the premise of her cheating. I really wish I were able. Judging from the tenor of the responses, I missed out on something. However, I didn't miss the opportunity to appreciate and marvel at your considerable ability to write a story.
by
Anonymous02/24/07
Great
How our eyes betray us. They are truly a mirror to our souls.
Short and to the point but speaks volumns. Very good writing. Like watching a good movie. You love it but wish it didn't end.
Highes regards to a fine writer
DG Hear
A very emotional scene and very sad when realization hits them both. I wonder if it was a one time error or did it entail an affair. She seems to act like it was a one time mistake that she is deeply sorry about.
by
Anonymous02/24/07
Needs more.
Good story,could really use flushing out.Why,how long,is devorice the only solution,ect. Hope you do more,Thanks
Because of the quality of the writing, I wish there more. But that might detract from the emotional emphasis here and wind up as mere sawdust filler. Well done. Thanks for writing. Phil
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Anonymous02/25/07
A Lesson
But first Author - Very Impressive!!! ------.
To those who want more words, fill only tarnishes as it serves no purpose except to degrade what is around it. The next time you are on chapter 7 which should have been page 3 of chapter uno think about it.----------.
Not every story should be this terse but many should be so real, so powerful and emotional.-----------.
You are appreciated Author. More Please.-----------.
With Very High Regard
by
Anonymous02/25/07
Finis!
As much as I'd love to learn what happens with this couple, this story is complete, Finis'!
As far as I'm concerned this marriage is so over. The comment " was he worth it?" speaks volumes. He sees no more bright eyes just dull loveless eyes that spell the end of a dead marriage. A very good read. Keep them coming . With very high regards Luis
Compelling in how it brings the husband to gripes with the dark side in such a way. Compelling how the wife knows that her husband now is certain of something terribly wrong. The front page news about the doctor brings it all to focus, all over the 'eyes'.
A nice start to a story, but I am sure you meant it to be just that. I find it more a thought of a story line then a completed work.
A little intriguing for a story to follow.
PT
No more needs to be said. All that you could do from here is try to make either a happy ending or an ending sadder than what you already have. I think this story sums up the moment that the affiar is disocvered. Both parties are suffering but there is nothing that can relieve the pain. The guilty party cannot take back what has been done and the injured party may never reach an understanding of the why of it. It hurts and there is nothing to be done for that. For the two people in this story we don't need to know more.
It would be hypocritical of me if I did not admit that I am curious about what could have happened next to this couple. *************************************
Having said that, IMO the story does stand on its own. There is no predetermined content unit which needed to be covered. If you think of it there is an element of arbitrariness in both the beginning and the end of any story. Background always helps understand better the characters their relations etc. post script satisfies (yet again) our curiosity as to what happened afterwards to each of the characters. These are all the signs of a good work – it raises our curiosity. **************************************
But do we want to have a good story being dragged down into a cliched formulaic story? The question where to stop entirely depends on – for lack of a better word - the whim of the author. It’s not like he wants to torture us with a short story (You’d better not…). He probably either did not feel that he had something interesting to say at this time, AKA: inspiration), or was too tired whatever the reason –it has to be something that is not pressured but genuinely motivated by the author. What I fear is: a mediocre sequel due to readers’ pressure. ********************************************
Coun ter some comments: IMO, the story did have the “WOW” factor. I translate “WOW” to magic or fascination (not a frequent rating). It’s when a writer captures in his/her writing a moment which seems to jump out of the page, you almost forget that it’s a story situation. For me the truth revealing eye contact was a “wow” moment.
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Anonymous03/02/07
Great
you sure do know how to write. its short but its very well done and got its message out. kudos.
i owe you a personal apology. one of the comments posted on my story 'bright eyes' contained not only a compliment to the story, but also an offensive personal insult against you. even though i am a strong advocate of free speech, i've never believed it to be a shield to justify derogatory verbal abuse against an individual. i can only say i'm sorry for not removing it sooner. you have my word, any such comment posted to my stories will be removed immediately. Wetapap -----
who this was sent to is not public information unless that individual wishes to make it so. for the readers who did read the comment before it was deleted, i apologize to them also. there is no way i will allow the comment section in my stories to be used as a forum to vent personal insults or attacks.
English
Succinct
A fine example of a vignette. You just know she had learnt her lesson before he found out, but now it is more than to late. He's not going to take it lying down and she will pay.
One of the best...
stories that I have read. Yes, it was succinct, but it conveyed a range of emotions so well. In fact, after reading this story, I read your others. You have a gift for writing. Thank you for sharing these gems with us.
Bob
One of the best ever!
Just a key moment in their lives. Although not "likely" the story feels right. So many stories have been so heavy handed lately (with great applause). I for one loves your simple and powerful tale. I feel this one. energystar
A different approach on the genre
While what is written is relatively short, what it says makes a book. Masterfully understated it achieves greater impact than if all aspects of the infidelity were explored in great detail.
Tightly woven - nicely done story.
Regards, Jack
ill give it a 50
till i see if he does what he needs to do and gets the lights back in his eyes as he i hope burns her and her lover to the point that it may take years to even be able to see with eyes with no light...if her lover is married tell his wife ...go find your own lover and find another bright eyes for yourself...find someway to ge tyour light back even if you have to fuck a thousand women to do it...whoever her lover is needs to be destroyed ..that would be a sure fire way to get some light back in his eyes revenge can spark so much...sexual conquest is another way ...so again i say if it takes a thousand do it ...who says maybe you can even fuck the wife some again..after all when you tell his wife or put it out in the open it will hurt him anyway unless he is nothing to begin with...either way bring it all out ...make her hurt ...who knows maybe hell get his bright eyes back with her after her betrayal who cares
A sad tale!
A sad story but one that definitely needs follow-up if the score is to be raised higher. This is an unfinished story. Currently it does not qualify as having an ending. That is a writing "faux pas". Cheers!
Short and very very sad
Excellent writing - every word counts. I don't think a part 2 is needed... the last paragraph of the story tells it all.
A gem
I believe the author when he asks for feedback, mentioning the amount of time required for writing the story. It looks like a perfectly polished gem. Nothing to spare nothing per the moment of the end is missing.
One great lesson to other writers-especially new ones. Chew on what you can swallow. You don’t necessarily have to cover people’s half life. A well chosen half an hour could make for a fantastic story!
Perfect the way it is.
It accomplished what it should have, and like a fine work of art should be left that way. One of the best written short pieces I have read.
Very nicely done
Great story-telling, wetapap. Thank you.
well done
it captures all the emotions a person go through an ending. very well written. Kudos
Forlorn
Incredible glimpse into the moment of despair. The pain of both characters is experienced by the reader.
Great!!!
Wetapap is one of the best writers on here. He keeps everything to the point with out adding a lot unnecessary details. Such as what he has done with this story. When he does this you can tell that he has put a lot of thought and heart into what he has writen. I always enjoy reading one of his stories and even if this isn't his usual genre, he has still put forth the effort that he always does. How many authors do you know that can have such an impact with so few words? Think about it. Even well known authors usually don't get what they want accross without adding extra details that may or may not detract from a story. With this one Wetapap has once again proven that he has what it takes to write fiction.
Please keep the stories coming wetapap they are always appreciated by your fans. As always an excellent job and kudos to you for this story. Keep it up!!!
wow FABULOUS ... really good... Just BULLY!
the only bad thing about this story is that it ended. I would like to see more of it... any chance of a rpre-quel or sequel?
A defining moment
The moment of discovery and admission. How much pain can one or two minutes hold? This is a perfect example. What happens from here? It will be extremely painful no matter what, write a sequel if you wish or let us wonder, you are the author. Wetapap I wish you would write more, but if that means less quality don't change a thing. When you write one it's always top shelf and just great.
short & (bitter) sweet
Wetapap, very nice story. You left a lot for us to speculate on, but the sadness and anger are front & center.
A Very Sad Story
I liked your story not alot of love in it the husband didnt even ask her what his name was or ask her did she love him will we get her story on the guy and how they met ?what about revenge for the husband ?
Pat
Atlanta,Ga
short but
... impressive. Good story. I'd written a similar plot. Maybe in consequence a little bit harder.
Nucleus
Beautifully written short story.
Very fine short but depressing story. A beautiful job of compressing a multitude of emotions into a short page. As a lover of happy endings, I didn't like the conclusion , but I can't deny the writers talent.
60 year old George
A Thank You Note
for everyone that has left comments or sent emails. i try to send a personal note to each individual. some i have no way of contacting. i do appreciate the comments and wish to thank everyone who has taken the time to read the story.
Wow
A very interesting story, involving the simple perspicacity of a longtime husband leading with one slightly strained coincidence to the unveiling of truth. The way the story reads it's clear that he would have discovered the truth eventually - she just wasn't up to hiding, and he was no longer able to avoid wondering why she was no longer happy. The spare storytelling and unrevealed revealed ending of the marriage are masterful. Well done.
Moving
Hard to find fault with this, no wimp, no real whore, so it's not easy to slam the characters, they seem to have very real feelings. She screwed up, now their world is falling apart, that simple, and very real.
The assistant Troll
Excellent, another cheating slut, to be tossed
to the trash heap. Wont they ever learn to think with their hearts and souls for their families, their children, their spouses. She who would seek only her own self gratification seeks the end of all of consequence. Once the intimacy, the trust, the bond is broken nothing can bring it back to where it was. An adulterer is nothing more than a piece of worthless trash to be thrown out with the rest of the trash. You can love what she was but you can never love what she is. No woman is sorry she cheated, she is only sorry she is caught. No woman walks into cheating, it is always intentional and planned. And she can and will do it again in the right circumstances because the character, the personality, the mental disorder that led her there will always be ready to take her back. Never keep the trash, always throw it out.
But, as someone said,
this was no more than a small vignatte, a tease, an ad, really. the "real story" may not be as interesting.
Hi Papa Mine...
I love your work, my only complaint was that this wasn't one of those grab your heart and rip it to pieces stories that you write so damn well. I was hoping when I started it that it would be four or five pages and I'd get the chance for a good cry and a happy ending...sigh. But I still love everything you do.
Short But Powerful!
This story speaks volumes in such a short space. The wife clearly had placed her life with her husband in this routine box. Instead of addressing her boredom with this life she sought out a lover to "spice up her life." She was probably in love with the dream of an affair but the actual reality led to the change that her husband noticed. Like most cheaters she thought she would not get caught but a simple story exposed her double life. __________________________________________________ ____
Thanks for an outstanding story! I can not wait for your next submittal.
______________________________________ __________________
SleeplessinMD
Powerful
Wetapap, you write so powerfully with so few words. You captured the moment so well and I as the reader felt a multitude of emotions. I see no need for a sequel since it will only lessen what we the readers pictured in our minds during the few moments the story covered. In my mind I pictured a woman who was seduced into a very short affair, probably leading to only a one-time sexual liaison before she realized what she had done. She now regrets the affair and is remorseful, but does not know how to handle the guilt and thus the lack of “bright eyes”. She could not hide her guilt from her husband; her eyes gave her away. The way the husband put two-and-two together was outstanding. Clearly, the wife already knew that “the affair (the He)” was not worth it as stated at the end of the story. ----- Burying her face in her hands, his wife quietly wept, "No… no he wasn't." -----
Very Good
First reaction was good but too short, was there a suspicion before etc etc, but no you got it right. He was sensible and strong, and she didn't get into that pathetic begging so many female charactors do. Bravo. More.
A" Near Miss" For Me
Wetapeap: It's patently obvious to see that you possess great skill in presenting a story. There was much I liked about how you composed it. The dialog was crisp and credible. The nuances, such as the husband's toying with his coffee cup, added nicely and effectively to make the story seem more real. Even the title was imaginative; a nickname not actually used in the story. (PP) That being said, the story just didn't have a "wow" factor for me. I'm sure that reflects more on me than than on your story. For me the wife's infidelity was telegraphed. Your use of the words "irritated" and "aggravated" in describing successive responses by the wife in discouraging her husband's attempts at conversation were clues that all was not happy in paradise. Once you introduced the newspaper with its accompanying coincidences, your destination was clear. It was then a matter of how pleasant the ride would be. And it was pleasant. I just was not comfortable with the premise. An apparently very happy and successful marriage degenerated to infidelity so very quickly. I realize that comprehensive back stories are not a necessary ingredient in a story's success, and that sometimes a leap of faith is crucial to fully enjoy a story. But I just couldn't buy the premise of her cheating. I really wish I were able. Judging from the tenor of the responses, I missed out on something. However, I didn't miss the opportunity to appreciate and marvel at your considerable ability to write a story.
Great
How our eyes betray us. They are truly a mirror to our souls.
Boyd
Incomplete & Inconclusive
You'll get the other 25 or 50 when it's finished.
A few powerful words
An outstanding piece of writing.
Very well written
Short and to the point but speaks volumns. Very good writing. Like watching a good movie. You love it but wish it didn't end.
Highes regards to a fine writer
DG Hear
Act 1, Scene 1
A very emotional scene and very sad when realization hits them both. I wonder if it was a one time error or did it entail an affair. She seems to act like it was a one time mistake that she is deeply sorry about.
Needs more.
Good story,could really use flushing out.Why,how long,is devorice the only solution,ect. Hope you do more,Thanks
Powerful
Because of the quality of the writing, I wish there more. But that might detract from the emotional emphasis here and wind up as mere sawdust filler. Well done. Thanks for writing. Phil
A Lesson
But first Author - Very Impressive!!! ------.
To those who want more words, fill only tarnishes as it serves no purpose except to degrade what is around it. The next time you are on chapter 7 which should have been page 3 of chapter uno think about it.----------.
Not every story should be this terse but many should be so real, so powerful and emotional.-----------.
You are appreciated Author. More Please.-----------.
With Very High Regard
Finis!
As much as I'd love to learn what happens with this couple, this story is complete, Finis'!
Ay-Wun
complete
As far as I'm concerned this marriage is so over. The comment " was he worth it?" speaks volumes. He sees no more bright eyes just dull loveless eyes that spell the end of a dead marriage. A very good read. Keep them coming . With very high regards Luis
I found this to be a great story.
Compelling in how it brings the husband to gripes with the dark side in such a way. Compelling how the wife knows that her husband now is certain of something terribly wrong. The front page news about the doctor brings it all to focus, all over the 'eyes'.
Well done.
Very Nicely done
I specifically enjoyed how you wove two possible outcomes into the short storyline for me to consider.
Both reveled their love for each other, She showed her remorse and fear over "His Pain." Possible recon
Then at the end with his sudden withdrawl and quick exit Possible crash and burn.
It's made me think about both endings and the realism of both happening.
Very good job.
Papabear49
Good Story
Well written. I really want to know what happens next.
Just a short thought not a story
A nice start to a story, but I am sure you meant it to be just that. I find it more a thought of a story line then a completed work.
A little intriguing for a story to follow.
PT
This is a great story.
No more needs to be said. All that you could do from here is try to make either a happy ending or an ending sadder than what you already have. I think this story sums up the moment that the affiar is disocvered. Both parties are suffering but there is nothing that can relieve the pain. The guilty party cannot take back what has been done and the injured party may never reach an understanding of the why of it. It hurts and there is nothing to be done for that. For the two people in this story we don't need to know more.
P.S to fellow readers
It would be hypocritical of me if I did not admit that I am curious about what could have happened next to this couple. *************************************
Having said that, IMO the story does stand on its own. There is no predetermined content unit which needed to be covered. If you think of it there is an element of arbitrariness in both the beginning and the end of any story. Background always helps understand better the characters their relations etc. post script satisfies (yet again) our curiosity as to what happened afterwards to each of the characters. These are all the signs of a good work – it raises our curiosity. **************************************
But do we want to have a good story being dragged down into a cliched formulaic story? The question where to stop entirely depends on – for lack of a better word - the whim of the author. It’s not like he wants to torture us with a short story (You’d better not…). He probably either did not feel that he had something interesting to say at this time, AKA: inspiration), or was too tired whatever the reason –it has to be something that is not pressured but genuinely motivated by the author. What I fear is: a mediocre sequel due to readers’ pressure. ********************************************
Coun ter some comments: IMO, the story did have the “WOW” factor. I translate “WOW” to magic or fascination (not a frequent rating). It’s when a writer captures in his/her writing a moment which seems to jump out of the page, you almost forget that it’s a story situation. For me the truth revealing eye contact was a “wow” moment.
Great
you sure do know how to write. its short but its very well done and got its message out. kudos.
Is the story finished?
If not could you please finish it for us. It is realy very good.
Great Short Story.
Would love to see a follow up, at least more of your stories. This site at times really needs good writers, Thanks for your storie.
reminds of a song
"a certain sadness" i think is the title. thanks for the story.
a long overdue action and personal appolgy
i owe you a personal apology. one of the comments posted on my story 'bright eyes' contained not only a compliment to the story, but also an offensive personal insult against you. even though i am a strong advocate of free speech, i've never believed it to be a shield to justify derogatory verbal abuse against an individual. i can only say i'm sorry for not removing it sooner. you have my word, any such comment posted to my stories will be removed immediately. Wetapap -----
who this was sent to is not public information unless that individual wishes to make it so. for the readers who did read the comment before it was deleted, i apologize to them also. there is no way i will allow the comment section in my stories to be used as a forum to vent personal insults or attacks.
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