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I like this story
This story is better than nici. The man is not a wimp in your story. The only complaint that I have with the story is that the man was not with his children when they were growing up.
one great story
one of the best i have read ...very similiar to another on here recently ...but this should be read by every wife thinking of fucking around on her husband ....id say she might as well commit suicide and end her farce of a life ....but it sure would be nice if she suffered many years ...she could just live with some guy ...but we all know she would just end up going from one man to another till she didnt have any more who wanted her ...her hubby he could probably have as many women as he wanted ...im glad she got fucked really well in the end ... maybe the idea of cuchholding her hubby doesnt look so good now does it
reminds of a buddy of mine
what makes this a good story is its plausibility. lawyers are very expensive for most people.
A Very Realistic Story
Glad that the kids turned out all right in this story. As has been comment on already, this story came across as much more realistic than a couple of other recent posts.
What a 'HOLIER THAN THOU' shithead.
She's worth 4 of him.
Does anyone believe that he wouldn't fall into bed, and probably has, with any girl dumb enough to let him.
Ditto for the same types who comment their hatred below.
Much better
This is a very believable story. It is sad that some states still don't have the option of fileing an alienation of affection suit against the offending party. That is sometimes the best way to cover legal expenses and provide a fund for the kids college. It also serves as financial revenge without going to jail for the physical version.Very well done!
Not a very pleasant tale
Not very well written. The author makes several grammatical errors which detract from the quality of the prose. The sentence structure is often awkward, making the story difficult to read.
There's not a lot of character development. Nell and Ron are mostly unexceptional and it's a mystery why she thinks it's okay to commit adultery. The author doesn't delve into her reasons why and we have no idea what motivates her. Left to our own devices, we have to guess that Nell is incredibly selfish and foolish. If that's true, then how did their marriage last as long as it did? I can't figure that out and the author didn't think it was important enough to deal with it.
The plot is uncomplicated and plays out with no subtle nor devious maneuvering. There's no narrative drive to the story because the plot and the characters aren't that interesting. The husband's decision to abandon his children to spite the cheating wife strikes me as immature and wrong. They did nothing to deserve this and he makes them suffer because he and his wife cannot act like mature individuals. Blame the wife if you want to but realize that pointing fingers doesn't accomplish anything. The children have been left in someone else's care so he can avoid paying his spouse alimony. From my seat in the nickel bleachers, that's selfish greed, pure and simple. What an awful attitude to have. You deliberately distance yourself from your kids because of money?! That's revolting and shameful yet the author wants us to applaud Ron's actions. Ron's contemptible and worthy of our scorn.
I can't give this story a high mark because of the mediocre authorship. The characters are fantastic and immoral. Here's a twenty-five for your effort and I thank you.
U are the most underated writer in LW stories
You are without a doubt one of the most underrated writers that does the LW categories here at LIT. I have always enjoyed your stories.
The edidg is too short. There should of been more detail about what the wife's parents said and the Kids said...
still a great story .... and another person PROVING How mentally deranged NICI truly is
A Great Story
Agena i thought you have a superb story and i loved how the husband put her and her lover the Dr.john in there place its a shame she didnt see what she had in front of her face maybe she would still be married .
Pat
Atlanta,Ga
A little too derivitive of other stories
and his wife fainting is hard to accept.
Being separated from his kids is a high price to pay!
Regards, Jack
Sadly, the most sociologically accurate
From all the out-shoots of Nici’s provocative original, this story is the most accurate –sociologically speaking. Husbands are still turning A-wall in great numbers. Usually we only hear how horrible they all are from the perspective of the wives. While we can safely assume that there are rotten people among those abandoning men, I am not ready to accept the assumption that there are not many who are decent people, who were driven to act desperately under intolerable circumstances - not of their doing. To the most part we still have an out of date and thoughtless family legal system which continues to assess children’s life by gender typing rather than by parental competence despite the presented criterion of “the best interest of the child”. Many times this inherent inequity drives husbands (especially of lower income) to abandon ship (unless they are willing to accept semi –slavery conditions). A terrible loose - loose solution, where the children are usually the main losers. It pretty much guarantees replications of dysfunctional patterns of family life into the next generation.
This story is interesting in that it presents one of those many untold (being politically incorrect) “exceptions” coming from the husband perspective.
adultrey and whoring by a wife in a marriage
this is unexceptable to a man,now to some of sissyboys who wife you ask before you move it ok.this woman destroyed her marriage and got what was coming to her.the hubby did what had to be none.some laws are abused and the wrong get away,not this whore.she disrespected her family by still fucking the dr.that why he left and any man that a man can see that.good story and keep writing your stories your way.
Thanks, Don-Donna
I have to thank the reader don-donna, who with her comment here and along with similar comments over time by others in the same venue, are helping me along, in moving from my feminist to the post feminist stage. I used to Idolize a bit all feminist sounding argument, being on the side of every unequally treated group (hence the feminist stage).
Recognizing that there are admirable as well as say not so admirable people and arguments on both sides of the gender line takes me a long way in the direction of post feminism.
What made the cheating dumb cruel and short sighted so called “wife” worthy the praise of the reader “don donna”? Does the reader don donna believe in cheating and condones this behavior as part of marriage as it could be concluded from her glowing praise to the cheating wife’s character?
And what if not 'HOLIER THAN THOU' approach is reflected in her own whole sale rude condemnation of other readers (no details and explanations provided of course)? Top it of with gutter language, and you can’t get lower than that.
As I said, thank you for moving me along to the post feminist stage.
Oh well..
Reasonable effort, but the concept and the wife's attitude are so close to nici's 'Something to Tal About" that credit or a reference to that story seemns essential.
Don-Donna2....
Other than the fact that this is so much like the story by "nici" it was an alright story. I'm not sure if I would've done what the man did, but he did right in my book.
Now onto what I wanted to say to Don-Donna. Not all guys will fall inyo bed with every woman that throws themselves at them. I for one don't, and yes I have had plenty of oprotunity to do so. It's all a matter of what the guy believes is right. Cheating in anyway is wrong. Doesn't matter why, how, or who. Thats not to say that having an open marriage or sharing or something else is wrong. That is up to the people in the marriage, but it has to be agrred upon by both people in the marriage. If it isn't then it's cheating.
Poor Effort
Not particularly well written with far too many punctuation and grammatical errors that derail a smooth read. In spite of the writer's stated goal of something different, it actually seemed to be nothing out of the ordinary at all. I can think of a hundred cheating wife stories out here where the betrayed husband takes off the next morning and never comes back. Also, the thing the writer hoped was unique (the suggestion the cheating wife couldn't afford to divorce the husband) is preposterous. She could have initiated it in the first few days after he disappeared before she lost "everything." In other words, the story wasn't thought out very well.
Ron123XYZ@foreveranonymous.naturally
A very well written story that I enjoyed immensely
A comment or two if I may. Women are never sorry they cheat, they are only sorry they get caught. They intentionally cheat, they dont let it happen, it is thought thru and accepted. The first time they may be nervous but after that it just gets easier and easier. They can never understand why the husband doesnt accept it and forgive them and get on with supporting them, it is all about them and their self esteem, ego, and self gratification. Most women who cheat have personality disorders or some type of mental problem and think they are prefectly normal. Woman who cheat for employment, with bosses or employers, or with someone who pays or supports them are simply whores/prostitutes selling themselves for sex. A real cheater as this one never changes, she cheated once she will again, the author was right. It is just a matter of time until opportunity and a rational excuse join together. This guy did a very wise thing it is actually very easy for someone in his profession to work without papers. Its about time for women to stop thinking men only think with their penis and realize an awful lot of women only think with thier vaginas and how much sperm they can take. Very few of them ever consider the diseases they may bring in to the family, how they are ruining their lives, thier husbands lives, their families, and thier childrens lives. Yes some states have what are very outdated divorce laws. Many men are better equipped and more of a role model for children than the wives who are sluts and not at all acceptable role models for children. I am not an editor nor a grammar and usage critic. Loved the story and the revenge great writing!
Nah
I don't have to add much because what I find at fault on this story has been said before: not well written, grammar and punctuation, not giving credit to nici for the original idea, unlikable, immoral characters (both) and lack of credibility. It grates me that basically, this hero passed the buck to his old parents to raise his kids and he's patting himself on the back for how good they turned out. Children are quite forgiving and they probably would have re-established a relationship with their mother. You can get a divorce without hiring a lawyer, there is documentation for that in court, apart that any legal aid attorney could have represented her and the court would have enforced a support decree, including alimony so that she could have been able to keep her kids. He abandoned her, the law would have been on her side (infidelity or not) after he left, especially because it would have been her who was filing for a divorce...and since he wouldn't have been there to say yes or no, it would have been a given. Not only did this writer copied a story, he didn't even take the time to make an intelligent copy.
haha! good little one
I sort of liked it; it's a stupid little twisted story. Not fully developed enough to worth "100" rating; but I liked it better than the other short "story" which beat this one to the "top" of our famous Lit. ranking! I gave that a "50" only because that's NOT as "creative" as this one. In fact, I liked the twist a lot! This should really be written in a more fully thoughtout manner. I like to see how Nell fainted and how she "recovered"!
This is fuckin' good, now that I think about! I'm gonna change the rating to "100"!
Short, simple and effective story!
We enjoy this author's work and efforts. Unfortunately, only the self-proclaimed "master" of bullshit [the idiot otherwise known as Alvaron53] can find plot and grammer issues with the story. However, the rest of the authors can find reason for hope because the idiot allowed this author a 25 for effort. LOL
Middle of the road
Agena: Firstly, thank you for your submission. As others have pointed out, a nod to 'Nici's' story as the basis for yours would have been appropriate and deserving. (PP) I thought the story was flat. Oh, I appreciated that the husband achieved some measure of satisfaction in that the wife experienced some just desserts. But this story is starting to be done to death. The manner in which he discovers his wife's infidelity, going home early because of illness, has become trite. The confrontation between husband and wife didn't seem real. Even though he felt ill, I would have expected more from him at that moment. Their dialog throughout seemed brittle to me. Overall, it just seemed that you were "lip syncing" someone else's story. However, I did take solace in your not having the wife display a thought process as bizarre as the model on which she was based. (PP) 'Agena,' no offense intended, I just don't think that taking 'Nici's' story and putting a popular spin on it is much of a challenge. What I would like to read is someone writing a story in which the curious logic 'Nici's' female protagonist is actually palatable, or at least possesses some merit. To me THAT would be a real challenge. It may be that it's an enigma that can't be resolved. To accomplish that, someone would not only exhibit a powerful imagination, but would expose him or her self as a master of persuasion.
Fan-fucking-tastic!
Grammatical errors didn't hinder my comprehension of the story. Run your stories by a Volunteer Editor here at this site to polish-up before posting if you want, Agena. Agena is not a plagiarist. I don't see why nici should be necessarily credited for the concept. Take for example "My Attitude Adjustment" by Harddaysknight and "Unexpected Discoveries Ch. 01" by The Wanderer: those stories share a striking similarity to one another and neither of the authors credits the other for inspiration. If you look at the submission dates, HDK's story was posted before The Wanderer's, but nothing was ever said. Read lots of "LW" stories here and you'll find several with similarly selfish wives pre-dating "Something We Have to Talk About". I see the similarities between "Something We Have to Talk About" and "A Little Fling", but let's not go overboard, people.
Definitely one of the finer stories
Unlike authors who look at human emotions and ethics just as distant academics (like Alvaron and Nici and capecod), this author does a great job at portraying real life scenarios. It is a sad story but an uplifting and inspiring one which still is quite erotic.
Glad to see there are authors who are not so dense and clueless like Alvaron, Nici, and their kind, that the concept of good and bad, right and wrong, is oblivious to them.
Compared to Agena in this story, Nici and Alvaron and capecodmercury look like juvenile wannabe third class amateur porn-directors.
Well Done
The opening paragraphs were too long and ‘to’ was misused for ‘too’ repeatedly.
These mistakes had me squirming, then I recalled my own mistakes and yours did not seem so bad. In the end, I enjoyed this story even more than “She Needed the Pain”, and I REALLY liked that one!
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Actually, the strength of your story overcame all of my misgivings. This was one original piece of work. While you posed a dilemma similar to some other recent stories, you then resolved the problem in the most realistic fashion possible.
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Too often characters in these tales play by what we all consider to be THE RULES. Authors can deviate from the rules but generally that means either violence or the threat of violence is substituted for true grit. This husband is a blue collar Average Joe. He knows how the system really works. This man is a realist. He disappears with impunity, but he does so after making sure his children will be safe and nurtured.
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The husband made me remember a quote I read from the tycoon and robber baron Cornelius Vanderbilt. Vanderbilt was in a dispute with a business rival. Frustrated with events he wrote his rival a letter saying “You have undertaken to cheat me. I won’t sue you, for the law is too slow. I’ll ruin you.” The ruination of the wife was executed in the least costly manner possible (even though the price for his family was high).
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Thanks for a great read.
Bravo
Let the punishment fit the crime. Not an uncommon solution to the problem. Unfortunately, the children are the ones that suffer.
Boyd
Excellent
Well Said! A work of art.
The Grass Is Greener on the other side
of the fence, sometimes. I am grateful that you did not write the husband as a whimp who let his wifey walk on him and he did nothing. In cases of divorce or separation where there are children, it is always the children who suffer the most. The have to live with two or more parents and the rumors that abound around them are very hurtful. Children can say and be very hurtful not knowing that they are little brats.
As for the wifey, I hope she fainted and never regained consciousness. One should never throw rocks at glass houses and she did and now she is having to pay for the glass. Actually, I love his statement in the market, rather fitting.
Wow!
Guess he really beat the mother of his children into the ground. It's a good story, it just seems a bit much.
Total junk
Oh brother...this really sucked!
What a jerk! Another wimpy headcase!
Whats wrong with you???? Don't you know you are supposed to be cuckhold in marriage!
Excellent story!
If you've never went through something similar then you don't know. Some folks think that he was an asshole, but really think about it from his point of view. He had the courage to go through with it.
Empty
All the characters in this story seemed like cardboard cutouts. There was little life to the story. No narrative drive, as Alvaron53 would say. I was left empty, as if I hadn’t just spent time reading a story. While Kolkore’s comment about husbands going AWOL to avoid the system is true, it doesn’t make for a very uplifting story with likeable characters. Plainly, the LWN’s were happy with the ending as you wrote it for them. I know you can do better and I encourage you to do so. Thanks for writing. Phil
A sightly different slant on the same old thing
I have to give you some credit in that your revenge tactic was different than the ol' divorce the big whore and keep all the money as she has no rights as a human because she is a woman. You are right that many men head down to Florida to elude their wives although he would have been tracked down when he started to work again. Also there were still too many unrealistic things such as the wife just abandoning the children and a divorce costing too much money. The uncontested ones can be done dirt cheap.
This is a little genius of a stroke!
"I'm not going to divorce you."..... She immediately smiled. "Then how are you going to avoid being cuckolded?"
.... "Well, I might be being cuckolded but I don't think it will be with John. I called his wife today and told her what was going on. I don't think you're going to have a job tomorrow." ......"Oh shit! You didn't?" she gasped out.
....."I've also quit my job and am now unemployed.".......
...Her eyes almost bugged out of her head. "Are you crazy? What are we going to live on?".....
...."I think you should be asking yourself that question? What are YOU going to live on?"..... "What do you mean?"....
... "I'm leaving you. I'm not divorcing you. If you want a divorce you can get one and pay for it yourself. You can use abandonment as the cause."....
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I'm leaving you but I'm not divorcing you. And, oh, by the way, I've quit my job, too, so I will not be able to do alimony, sorry, dear.
But I've spoken to my parents and they will help look after our kids, because obviously neither you nor I would be able to. I want to and could, but since you will also wanna play a dumb big kid who is able to fuck strangers as she wants, but with me paying her to fuck around, I came up with the best solutions, at least for a few years anyway.
THIS IS MENTAL GAME!, it's pure mental game and it is absolute "original" (at least in Literotica land here, where almost every woman cheats and almost every men begs her not to cheat!).... With very cold but dumb women, you must play this kind of head game; beat them at their own game.
THIS IS A STROKE of a genius for this Literotica Loving Wives genre!.......
The man is absolutely right: ...... NO COURT is gonna force him to work. Nor put him in jail for being homeless! Whatever little he earns MAY BE diverted to his children, but NOT to the stupid woman, who is after all an able body woman who had just smashed her family to pieces.......
Though running away, the man did NOT truly abandon his kids; they know what he's doing and more importantly his PARENTS and even the IN-LAWS agreed with him, and agreed to support his children!.......
Make the stupid doctor lose his job; make him being divorced and taken to the cleaner; make the stupid woman lose her safety net; make the whole fuck-fest of the two lovers terribly sour. This is because he NO LONGER wants to love this cold and dumb woman and holds no torch for her, now or in future years.
.....This is PURE REVENGE! ......
Again, a stroke of "genius" for this genre!
Quite good, but the kids..?
Good concept, and well written. I can't see a responsible guy leaving his kids for 7 years, really. But other than that, it's a good story.
He Missed!
He missed doing the very first thing he should have, legally! Sue the ass off that doctor for 'Alienation of affection'! Perhaps he couldn't touch the money, but his kids could be well taken care of, if he made that as a settlement stipulation. The one weakness in the story was believing any woman could be so stupid as to believe a husband, not known as a wimp, would accept that.
Ay-Wun
Authors Comments
As you can tell the responses to this story are diverse and many are emotionally written. The purpose of this story was to show there were other options for the husband in Nici's story Something We Have to Talk About. His option in Nici's story forced him to ruin his life for his children but created a worse scenario for them. Maybe in real life the option for him I presented would have been more difficult to implement than I presented but I felt it had to be described. I'm sorry I didn't use an editor to correct some of my grammatical errors and make comments on the plot but I'm usually am in a hurry and don't take the time to do it right. Anyway, for those that liked it, thanks and for those that didn't, sorry about that.
I think the revenge was brilliant
Nice little story there. Wow! You really made your Nell a real first class selfish bitch! You made me really hate her.
Thanks for the nice plot.
Revenge was perfect -ignore idiots like Alvaraon53
Great story with a "perfect revenge" twist. Please ignore the "fantasy" writers like the "Idiot Alvaron53" & his faithful buddy- TiggerToo. Their sense of reality, is gone due to their extended time as "master" story tellers. However, credit is given to TiggerToo for his [2] submissions. Unfortunately, his fantasy mentor "the Idiot Alvaron53" hopes that someone will believe that he is an accomplished author. LOL We appreciate your hard work and efforts, Agena!
great story
Well written and a believable plot. Nice to see a cheater get her just deserts.
Good Story
This happens all over the country every day. Not always for the right reasons, but to many familes are left in this situation with no one really taking care of the kids. Watch the news tonight and see the results. Thanks
about right
ppl think that divorce is cheap. to most ppl its a luxury. of course, those who are working poor dont have the time to write 'erotic' stories, especially if they have another job to go to.
Divorce isn't always the answer...
This story shows that. There is a great joke that askes, "Do you know why a divorce is so expensive? Because it's worth it." Sometimes there is an another answer.
Nicely done.
if you are a working poor....
...this is quite normal. most of the time, the kids do suffer because of it. just facts of (poor man's) life.
I thought it bought out the emotions quite well.
There are no winners in something like this ... only losers.
I had to laugh at the line: "I drove all night long until I was so tired I couldn't drive anymore." Thursday I drove from Green River, UT to Davis, CA,stopping only for gas. No fun!
Good effort.
regards, Jack
No heroes in this one... from Chris in Phoenix
Ignorant irresponsible trailer trash with ignorant low life irresponsible reactions. Happens every day I guess but not very satisfying to read. Legal pronouncements without getting the facts straight. Divorcing abandonded spouses is quite easy in the states which I am familiar. Price no problem: Cost of filing and cost "publishing" the service. The husband stays away from kids for 7 years? Boy! He sure showed her!!!! (LWI - laughing with irony) irchristo@yahoo.com
This is one of the most interesting cheating-with-
-consequence-stories I've ever read. It certainly was not very poslished, grammatically or story-plot wise. And yet its hilarity, its originality, its forcefulness came through loud and clear!
I would have wanted the husband to have said something to the effet of, "Although I may not be able to win in a legal way, now that I have lost all hope for our marriage and I have no love for you, I will dedicate my life to making sure you live a life that is so miserable, you will rue to day you're born, the day you met me, the day you told me I MUST submit to you heinousness," etc. ----- after he confirmed with a lawyer about Nell's gleeful smile about him being taken to the cleaners if he should divorce her....
But it turned out that that's exactly what happened, even if not well articulated!
The fainting of Nell at the grocery story was something to behold!
Hehehehehehehehe
Sluts never seem to learn. Glad you aren't one of thise cry baby husbands whose feet always seem to be stuck in place while he pukes his guts out on finding his wife fucking another.
Very Wicked
This story is one of the best stories I have read here. Good beginning, realistic plot, wicked revenge & a wonderful ending. Please write some more.
:) almost ok
Your story was very sad, and the anguish that guy must have every day of his life not seeing his kids grow up.. All for the sake of revenge on his ice cold sluttish wife.. I would do her too but I wouldn't allow for losing my kids, even if it would have meant having to 'share' them with her.. After all the kids are your legacy, what kind of father would give that away? As for the wife though she deserved whatever she got, with the exception of loosing her kids, that as she had been a good mother even if a lying and cheating whore to her husband.. cheers Yoron
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