by garcher27
great story, builds very well. however, in my opinion, to have the male character say something so lackluster and common as "that was amazing" at the end completely ruins the feeling. i would have preferred that when finally given the permission to talk, he found himself...speechless. almost amazing story. keep up the good work!
that was ok but needed less sex & a bit more of a storyline, where the ending grabs you.