All Comments on 'Vinny's Cock is Showin''

I really liked it but the ending was very abrupt, and some of the dialogue was kinda corny.

Hmm..well..it was an interesting story to be sure..there was a lot of potential in the concept..but the execution was rather lackluster. The dialogue seemed more appropriate to 13 year olds..rather than 19 year old young men. And even people who use slang often can generally manage to say..you..and your from time to time...the "ya's" really started to get annoying. Keep at it! Just take a little more time to develope your ideas and your characters. I have read other of your stories and enjoyed them..I think sometimes you just seem to rush the process a bit and don't put out your best. Good luck, thanks for sharing!

I loved it. Thought it was totally hot. I even jacked off while reading it! Thanks!

very hot story as i read your story made me so hot that i came down my leg

This story was hot I was hard all the way through it but theres just one thing wrong with it; I need to know, at the start how did Vinny get hard when the girl had her hand on him? if he wanted Matt then surely he should have stayed soft? Can you please e-mail me the answer or leave a comment at the bottom of the page please? My e-mail is: yourfantasy2008@hotmail.co.uk

Thank you.

The premise and plot was great, the descriptions were fantastic, but can we get serious about the dialogue!? It was horribly contrived and completely unrealistic, I think the last time I heard anyone exclaim, "God help us", "Good heavens", and "ecstatically happy" was in a 1950s PSA for the dangers of homosexuality.

you could get more from this if you put your mind to it.i have enjoyed reading this any chance of a follow up.?

Can't help wonder what happens after summer is over? Probably not love, sometime lust takes over, wild how both these guys lusted for each other. Maybe they will fall in love.

both cocks rammed my ass together, while I munch down on the woman's ass As she out her cigarette in my left