by AlexandraBourne
I liked how you started the story but need more of the story to find out who they (the men who took her and what they want with her and where they are taking her). So a little mre detail would be appreciated. Thanks!
but I agree with the other commentor that it needs more back story to fill in the gaps of who she is and where she came from, plus the political bearings of the royal family and her part in it. I'm interested in reading more.
Sounds like a really good story!!! Looking forward to reading more. I just hope it`s not too rough. Thanks
I like the concept of your story but you need to try and make the chapters longer and you need to give the readers a bit of background knowledge on the characters and setting etc. Other than that you have made a good start and i hope you continue.