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Occasionally, I see a great line in a poem and I wish I would have thought of it first. "this rebellious rabble of nerves in denial"
Good poem, Tess
Straightforward, as I think it should be. I especially like the word "unnerved" in S1, which foreshadows S2.
I would maybe take out the word "because" in the last S and split the strophe at that point:
I live on memory
deliberately
not looking forward.
I don't like the view.
but that's just an idea.
Excellent...
Excellent poem! Deserves to be published in a journal of poetry dedicated to...well, good poetry!
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Excellent. Not filled by maudlin sentimentalities lesser writers would use.
Nice
I understand the sentiment here.
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