All Comments on 'A Beautiful Day'

It was an okay story. You were grammatically wonderful and you spelled everything right, which makes you several notches better then the average writer on here.

But I couldn't really believe it. You dove right into the story, with no background, no set-up, no story. Honestly, the best and highest rated stories are the ones that could definately happen. I know it's fantasy, so it doesn't have to be plausable, but it helps. Keep on writing. I'm going to see what else you've done.

Your tits reduced from DD to C between the start and the middle of the story!