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by Anonymous

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by WickedEve03/16/07

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A bit gerund crazy. ;) How about flow in the first line and twist in the fourth?

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by Anonymous03/16/07

I like this :)

Thanks for sharing! :)

-Curiouswife

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by My Erotic Trail03/17/07

classic blue

I always thought of the ticking of the clock was the word 'snap' said every second... to awaken us every moment yet; we tend to ignore the ticking after awhile

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by 03/19/07

Someone said, "Classic blue"

It is. You always manage to slip some reference to water. I like this poem very much. Thank you.

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by LeBroz04/20/07

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Potent thoughts of memory as an old love lives on; having the real love would be so much better.

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by Bill Dada06/02/07

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Loved
'for they had danced the consequences
of love.'

Very nice.

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