by jamesintexas
Quite a decent first effort, and the fact that you kept the action tightly confined to the existing relationships (rather than some hardcore swapmeet) made it feel more realistic.
My main criticism is that it all sparked off rather quickly, that no one was even slightly hesitant about getting naked, down 'n' dirty in front of each other. Maybe if you'd given it a little context (say, if they'd got a little exhibitionist in the past, maybe when sharing a weekend cabin together, that kind of thing, or if the girls had decided between themselves to turn the heat up), it wouldn't have seemed quite so abrupt.
Still, I look forward very much to seeing your next contribution.
Quite a decent first effort, and the fact that you kept the action tightly confined to the existing relationships (rather than some hardcore swapmeet) made it feel more realistic. My only criticism is that it all sparked off rather quickly, that no one was even slightly hesitant about getting naked, down 'n' dirty in front of each other. Maybe if you'd given it a little context (say, if they'd got a little exhibitionist in the past, maybe when sharing a weekend cabin together, that kind of thing, or if the girls had decided between themselves to turn the heat up), it wouldn't have seemed quite so abrupt. Still, I look forward very much to seeing your next contribution.
Superb first effort on Literotica. Naughty, not raunchy. I'd love to see you write more on this kind of theme: couples pushing their boundaries to daring (but not ridiculous/unrealistic) lengths. I really think there's a HUGE audience for stories that show scenarios of how real people (like themselves) would take things further if they had a little more guts, a willing partner, and the right setting.