All Comments on 'In My World You're Married Ch. 04'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
Great story

I loved your characters. I hope many more adventures to come for Amy and Lisa. Thank You for a great read!

FiveWolvesFiveWolvesover 10 years ago
Please use an editor

You've got an interesting story here, but the changes from past tense to present tense to past imperfect were dizzying. Your story will be much clearer and more powerful if you find an editor who will help your writing be more consistent.

Randee1958Randee1958over 7 years ago
Steamy

Would've boiled over if you hadn't implied that she was going to take her back door. And leave it at that. Not so satisfying as it could have should have been. Oh well sala vie a generous not earned 5 💥's

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