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moving
....such as moving from winter to spring (grin) nice write, I like nature poems (~_~)
nice
a very nice write as spring is now here
You could make this better
Many people believe that deep seeded is the correct phrase, which is a common mistake. The phrase you want to use is deep-seated.
"The expression has nothing to do with a feeling being planted deep within one, but instead refers to its being seated firmly within one’s breast."
I'm pointing this out because you use deep seeded as your title, and even in your poem in all CAPs.
You write: "takeing it's dive." You may want to try this: taking its dive.
Even though this line is nonsensical "and the dogs
all were necking" it might actually sound better if you wrote: and the dogs were all necking.
"re-appearing" is just reappearing. It's not a hyphenated word.
correct ellipses ...
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