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Wrong Place at the Right Time

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous04/05/07

Given..

...the subject matter of this story, a husband discovering his wife having sex with a younger black man, this tale was told w9ith amazing tenderness and sensitivity. You'll probably attract the usual diatribe from redneck Anonymous in USA, but ignore him. If this is only your third attempt at an erotic story, you're off to a flying start! Write more, please.

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by shango04/05/07

I didn't read the story

But here's a "100" to counter the KKK votes!


Write as much as you like.

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by Bazzz04/05/07

Some great insight

Such a well written short story. It was very erotic. I especially enjoyed your attempt to describe the male charactor's feelings as he watched his wife being ravaged by the big black man. Rage, jealousy and excitement all flow freely through the cuckold and it is almost indescribable. I was surprised that you had the black man show the emotion he did towards the woman. It was a different and positive touch to have the black stud be more than some sex machine out for some white meat. Well done.

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by showguy04/05/07

adaquit!

READ "NAUGHTY HIGH CLASS MOM Pt.2" If you truley like Black/White sex with older hot married women and a young 20 year old black Rapper. Its the hottes of these types!!!! This one cums up short!

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by EspressoBolus04/05/07

does not work

this would be high minded social commentary is not really very effective. The husband is supposed to be an Atlanta cop. Granted their are all kinds in the department, but a white cop with, shall we say, 15 to 20 years in the department, would not be thrilled at any level to see a black man, especially a gator! with his wife. Guess what, he would not be likely to like seeing any man with his wife! His art teacher wife's theoretical compassion is aparently limited to her long time black lover. None left over for the husband and children she mentions in passing.

I am betting that further investigation reveals that the gator stud is involved in other indescetions, and will some be on the front page of the AJC with an unfavorable headline; PE teacher busted on drug and rape charges! for example.

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by KOLKORE04/05/07

“But I still didn't move”

They never do, I mean these stories. There is zero investment in trying to make an illusion of a new story.
Replication is the name of the game. Interracial here means black man fucking white woman when un moving white dumb husband watches. That’s it. Let the repressed haters of both races vent some.
Yet, Physical impossibilities and other funny hyperbole such as:” I was almost violently ill yet at the same time, I was incredibly turned on” are treasures you can find only in this section!
p.s. I would have loved to write something positive but A. I noticed that you were new and hoped for something which will not be repetitious B. since it was repetitious, and on the very motives which I would have liked to see gone (how about real love rather than contempt and interracial hate? For a change) I thought you need to hear the truth.

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by Anonymous04/05/07

Gotta love self-righteous "Writers!"

First, I gave you a 100 simply because of the haters.

Second, don't you love big talking dicks that don't write erotic stuff making comments on what doesn't "work." Poor KOLKORE probably hasn't a hard on in 40 years, the stupid bastard. Oh, I read some of his poetry... very impressive...wonder why he's not published? Could it be that he sucks? Seems the only comments he gets are from other ass kissin' fucked up "poets."

Sorry for the rant but cocksuckers like that piss me off.

Third...rebel retards...if you don't like interracial stuff DON"T FUCKIN" READ IT!!!!!!!!!!

Damn, Sorry you have to read my rantings.

Finally...your story wasn't all that bad. Yeah, I'm not fond of wimps, but not really sure if your "husband" is one. But I enjoyed the purpose of the story...a hard on! Could have developed the fucking section a little more (a second cock would have been interesting).

All the same...haters...SHUT THE FUCK UP! Keep writing, you'll get better.

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by Anonymous04/05/07

Wrong Place To End

Despite making such a good argument for keeping a family complete and together, from a literary viewpoint I believe you left the very best part of the story on the following blank and empty page when the two of you quit writing where you did. The very good depiction of the husbands emotions and the wife's intention to keep her family as a whole unit needed to be continued with a detailed examination of how the husband, now knowing what he does, manages to confront his wife with his knowledge of her infidelity and still keep the family together.

I think you left the ball laying on the ground in the middle of the field where any one of the players in the story could have picked it up and scored. Please, write us (me) a sequel dealing with my concerns in the above paragraph and let us see what happens to that family.

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by Vulcan_in_Ohio04/06/07

Not bad but not believable in any way . . .

While there are rare women age 45 who have successfully become pregnant, it is just that, quite rare. The idea that a 25 year old intelligent guy would not know better than to suggest to the 45 year old woman that he could knock her up with a bunch of his babies is silly. It is also hard to believe there has been sex 2-3 times/wk between the wife and her young lover and the husband (a detective, someone trained to be suspicious), never noticed anything was wrong in their marriage? Finally, over a two year relationship, it's hard to believe the sudden, surprise conversation (she says it's only sex, and she prefers to stay married and have her relationship with her kids and husband). I would think this discussion would have taken place a lot earlier in their relationship. Finally, it is common for a man who feels sexually threatened to get an erection. But just as a woman being raped sometimes gets lubricated but is not excited to be raped, the erection does not mean the man is really enjoying what is happening to him (cuckolding and humiliation). The authors assume that male readers would think it's exciting to see one's spouse getting a good fuck from someone else? Obviously this is a fantasy for a (small) minority of males but most, even to save face, would not admit this and certainly would not accept a cheating spouse back. Disease? I guess we don't worry about that either. And if the P.E. teacher is now turned off (from being used as a sex object, a human dildo, or whatever) do we really believe the art teacher won't cheat again? Does her detective husband believe that? Let's get real, please (or at least believable).

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by Anonymous04/06/07

Well Done

Hard to believe that so many shitheads like to make racist and ignorant comments, then again, those of you who've left such bullshit statements are probably lacking in every facet of yours lives that commenting on someones prose is all you really have in your lives...boo hoo for you. As for the story, nothing to do with the racial aspect but I think as far as the "relationship" goes between the lover and wife and the husband and wife it left a little to be desired but other than that was able to follow every dip and turn in the story. Well done.

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by gatorhermit04/06/07

Reasonably Well Written Story, But...

First, Connie is really stupid to do what she is doing, as she could very easily lose everything. Especially knowing that her husband is a cop? Get real.Second, I wonder if Connie would be as forgiving if the situation were reversed - what if she stumbled upon him having a sex with a lover (maybe a pretty black girl with a really nice firm set of tits and a very tight pussy) that he had been making love with for two years - would Connie forgive him upon hearing that he would not leave his family for his lover? I don't think so. It would be divorce, child support and alimony time. I think the double standard implicit in this genre of stories is what I dislike the most.Third, it is unrealistic that Erick is going to regard Connie as anything more than a free piece of ass. This story is demeaning to him, as he can do much better and he doesn't have to resort to screwing somebody else's wife.

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by Wet_Works04/06/07

I'm sorry but the wife just doesn't make any sense

She says she loves her husband, children, friends, and life and wouldn't give it up for a big cock but her she is risking all those things she loves for this big cock. I can only assume from her actions that her statement is a lie. If she truely loved all of those things she wouldn't risk losing them over the big cock, she would never have engaged in this affair. The only way she wouldn't be risking losing it all is if she and the husband had some kind of agreement worked out that allowed her to sleep around and its made obvious from his reaction that they do not. So what if she won't leave him and the family for the big cock, he still can't trust her any more. She placed her physical pleasure above the future happiness she might enjoy in her life with her husband and kids, this makes her stupid since she says she loves her life. This is like going to Vegas and putting the deed to you house against $50 that you want to spend right now. If she had fallen out of love with her husband her actions might have made some sense, they would've still been heartless and vile in my eyes but at least she would've had the small justification of finding someone new to love.

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by MrDeep04/09/07

Ignore all the others

This story was fine. It followed the genre magnificently.

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by Anonymous04/11/07

Give them a fucin' break!

What part of "fantasy" don't you idiots get. Damn, criticizing a make-believe "wife" for fucking a black guy while loving her husband and family, and trying to delve into her psychi as to why she'd do it is a tad pathetic, don't you think???? Who the fuck cares if it "makes sense," It's Fantasy! It's supposed to give you a hard-on or make you wet...period! I've read every comment you dumbasses have left. Some of you idiots are fixated on grammar and literary hooks, others on believability, and then you have the "I'm-a-dumbass-cousin-fucking-redneck-who-doesn't-k now-my-ass-from-a-hole-in-the-ground" crowd, who are too afraid they might like interracial sex and be made fun of by their hillbilly dog-cock sucking cousins, bitchin' about interracial sex. It's an interracial sex story, you fucking idiots. Flcouple4yall, keep writing just to piss off the retards that take themselves too serious! Power to the Black Cock and White Cunts that love them!

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by realblackmale08/27/07

This make me want to go back to school

This was a very well written piece, I liked the way it started and loved the way it ended, one dosen't have to give up on life!

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by Anonymous03/21/09

so she is not a slut?

its gone on for a term of 2 years, but she loves her husband/family? she feels that she can do this with immunity, and have it all. its worked for 2 years or so. he's ok with that, no consequences for her? now that he knows, he can acept it a 'just sex'? how many others? at least he knows the kids aren't erik's. its all ok since she loves him?

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by Anonymous11/10/09

she's a slut he's a pussy

the story was well written, but face it the wife's a slut, after cheating on her husband for 2 years how can she be considered anything else? The husband's a pussy, if he's willing to accept that she's been cheating on him and is willing to accept this then what else can he be considered to be? This isn't about black/white couples or open marriages, its about cheating slut wives. He was never given the opportunity to have an open marriage, he apparently would have accepted an open marriage but wasn't given the opportunity. He could have been getting pussy on the side for 2 years but by cheating she didn't allow him that opportunity. That makes her a cheating slut and him a pussy for not divorcing or confronting her

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by Anonymous11/11/09

W.T.F

This woman has been fucking the same person for 2 fucking years? 2 or 3 times a week? then she just dismisses him as a good fuck? I'm sorry but that is pathetic. She is a whore and is getting fucked as much as she wants her little dicked cop husband is nothing more than a meal ticket. She doesn't love her husband, why should she? she is fucking someone else a regular basis. And fcuk knows how many more fuckers she is doing. I am so glad this couple have stopped writing on this site.

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by Anonymous01/01/10

but she doesn't love the guy?

she'll cheat with the guy, black, as it turns out, but won't leave the husband and family? a record is betrayal over 2 years with that person, and there have been others? its ok with him? odd thought process me thinks. Maybe he should have scared them (any available weapon), told wife not to come home, and some notice to erick's spouse, if any, and seprated themselves financially and otherwise.

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by Anonymous01/16/10

Please stop posting

GIVE IT UP! It has nothing to do with race, your STORY SUCKS! It is a poorly thought out, badly written waste of time. You have created a personality in this wife that could not even pass a basic pysch profile, but it is obvious that as an author you are too ignorant to understand this. you thought this was even close to relistic, IT ISN'T. If you don't get this, then I certainly feel sorry for your own life efforts.

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by Segami01/11/11

Good story

Especially liked how the wife found that she loved more than lust, which is more than most people on Lit. can say. There was just a few problems. First was that they were doing this for two years, TWO Years!, and nothing happened? No one found out on accident, husband didn't feel the difference, didn't take it to the next level, no slip ups? Too improbable. Second is also about the length of the "affair", two years and no feelings? It also seemed like by now the coach would get tired of her after 2 years of 2-3 times a week. It didn't seem like they spiced it up or anything, just sex at school each time(unless I'm mistaken and this part was just left out of the story. If that was the case, though, why was there no further relationship?). And finally, the timing seemed very, I dunno, convenient? Of all the days of the years of his life, Mr. Detective happened to whimsically choose the day that Mr. Coach would try to win his Rose-bowl trophy? Really far-fetched.
All in all, good story and great ending. (Though this should be labeled as "Loving Wives" instead of "Interracial Love".)

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by Overthefalls06/04/13

Pretty gutless reaction

For a cuckold being told by his cheating wife that she liked black cock. His real reaction would have been to step out and tell her that they were getting divorced. Cops have things like egos, pride and self respect. None of those things would allow him to live with a cheating slut wife.

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by oldguyfl03/31/14

Good Story

My wife works in the school system and is 64. She does not look her age and has great tits. I would be very happy if she found someone to fuck and black is fine with me.

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by shadowduster11/09/14

What a bitch

Her husband should have walked in afer the black with the BIG 6" cock left.
Told his wife not to bother comming home, to bad he did not have a cell phone so he could of sent photos off to the schoolboard, to get them both fired.
Where did the lie about blacks having large cocks? Look it up they have on average smaller cocks than white men.

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