By The Pool Ch. 04

By the Pool

I couldnt give this series enough points - keep it up - I am sure that eventually he must fuck his Mom - then he can have anyone of the 3 ladies at any time - or all together - he is young enough to handle them all for a while yet -

Reality Alert.....

OK, first off, let me say that I know Lit is an ‘Erotic Tale’ site. But, there really needs to be a storyline woven into the ‘humping & thumping’. Your “By The Pool” series just keeps circling the same old premise; He’s repeatedly excited / embarrassed, Mrs. C. keeps using his oversized genitals like some live ‘Show & Tell’, Mommy just keeps encouraging all the activities under the guise of ‘It’s All For My Boy’ mantle, etc. No where, in all four parts of this tale, does any kind of relationship start to form and that’s just silly. Your characters are like cartoon figures; two dimensional, unrealistic responses and just about as believable as ‘The Coyote & Roadrunner’. If you’d like a peek at a real Erotic tale; see the ‘Summer Camp’ series. Best of luck to you. BTW: Your editor is quite good.

Damn Your Editor is Slow.

"Please enjoy part 5 is written and is going to the editor so look for it soon."

Great Series.

I loved the series so far. Dont worry about all the nay-sayers. this is a well thought out story and I cant wait for more.

Reality Alert #2

Pay no attention to the alert from Anon. This is the real thing. You've got a red hot series going here and I'm waiting impatiently, cock in hand, for Ch .o5 to bring it up to speed. Hurry up man!!!

unsatisfied

I don't know where you get off stringing your readers along. This last chapter of your truly epic tale should have been in the "Lesbian" section of Literotica. Wow, after all your verbiage, you'll finally get to the son sticking his dick in his mother's twat in your next chapter! Who cares? There are at least a thousand better incest stories on this site than your offerings. Give it up. You will doubtless delete this post, but that makes no difference in your lack of writing ability or real imagination.

Part 5

What happened to part 5? I would really like to read it.

looks like this writer has left the building

Please make longer

Somehow I don't think chapter 5 ever made it to the editor seeing as this series is almost 6 years old. Still hot, though.

3 stars for 4.5 star story dum pc hope to see more soon thanks