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Crocodile Tears

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by vampiredust03/28/07

Good

but could be tightened further. The feeling has been done well but you need to avoid stale language and cliches. The title is cliched, for example.

I liked the lines:

"Leaving a trail,
of slug-like silver"

More of that is needed in the poem.

Still, a good start

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by LeBroz03/28/07

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This poem was mentioned in Wednesday's New Poems Reviews.


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by WickedEve03/28/07

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Hi. I read your poem and I have to agree with vampiredust. Keep writing. You're doing a good job. :)

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