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by Bazzz04/05/07

Imaginative

Your imagination and the writing of the sex scenes is great. You have tremendous promise. You will have to work on your plot development though. You jumped all over the place with no real connection between the scenes in the story. Let an editor go over your next story wwith you. If it works out you'll have some extraordinary stories.

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