Your stories are too short, the details are too skimpy. You need to flesh out these characters and plot and REALLY write a story. You're wasting your talent if you don't.
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Anonymous04/05/07
Au Contrare
I totally disagree with the advice the previous commenter has given here. The strength of this writer, as others have posted as well, is in his brevity--his ability to create whole worlds and scenarios in a leanness of expression and sharpness of description (not to mention the wide variety he provides us) and to be blazing hot in the process. This writer shows us the difference between a polished, professional storyteller and the amateur. He shouldn't change a thing in his delivery of a story. Hot, hot, hot.
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Anonymous04/05/07
I agree ...
This should / could have been pared down ... more meat, less fat.
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Anonymous04/06/07
Not an editor
I am not an editor nor a literary critic. I just know what I like to read. I have bookmarked your work and read them when I get a chance. If as now I see a new one, I'm on it.
English
Hot!
Your stories are too short, the details are too skimpy. You need to flesh out these characters and plot and REALLY write a story. You're wasting your talent if you don't.
Au Contrare
I totally disagree with the advice the previous commenter has given here. The strength of this writer, as others have posted as well, is in his brevity--his ability to create whole worlds and scenarios in a leanness of expression and sharpness of description (not to mention the wide variety he provides us) and to be blazing hot in the process. This writer shows us the difference between a polished, professional storyteller and the amateur. He shouldn't change a thing in his delivery of a story. Hot, hot, hot.
I agree ...
This should / could have been pared down ... more meat, less fat.
Not an editor
I am not an editor nor a literary critic. I just know what I like to read. I have bookmarked your work and read them when I get a chance. If as now I see a new one, I'm on it.
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