by Mac_G
I liked this story, the passion in the story is subtle and flows with it, it has that feelings extending beyond lust, and it has a sort of gentleness to it, plus there's really nothing crass about it. And at the end you can't help but have a little smirk on your face after reading the last lines.
Simply the best. Please continue with this and other incest story lines.
You have taken a taboo subject and turned it around to see the softer side of sibling love. I love how you were able to use the "what if" to keep them both innocent if you will. Great job! I look forward to your next story!
This is the best short erotic story I've ever read...I was able to completely places myself in his place, and it became the most vivid fantasy I've had in years....wowww....thanks!
It deserves to do well. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Janiexx
what a great story. I thought it was hot as hell. I would like to read more of your work. Thanks
You start off by giving us the impression that they are doing this for the first time and that they are somewhat innocent yet he didn't seem to have too much trouble sinking his dick all the way in .I guess she was no cherry?
very nice story, but when my brother had me it wasnt that easy for him to enter me , and I had the sheets to wash in the morning!
You seem to handle the tender themes of young love and sexuality quite well.
no back ground to tell if this was the first time or not and what thier relationship was like before and no follow up to tell if it happened again or if the parents found out of course you also never said how old they are or if they were home or away this should have been part two of a three or four part story
Short but very sweet, no frills, no waste. The way the conversation is structured is a sample of very creative writing. I wish I could write so well! Thank you.
Jim
short - yet quite nicely done - no comments?!
...and I read for entertainment. Longer would have been better but it was a sweet story.
Very nice gentle loving story. More details/longer act would, I think, have interfered with those traits. I had no trouble ENJOYING it fully.
viking3
Nice story. No overblown body part measurements. In fact, no size references at all. Leaving it to the reader's imagination. Very nice touch. Would like to read more written in this style.
After submitting a negative review of the story about the family who plays together, I went back and read this one. Much better. I enjoyed it. Thanks, Rick
I love this author's understated style while what he's describing is one of the most exciting forms of fucking, sisterfucking. The brother is introducing his big stiff prick to his sister's adorable little coochie, and he finally unloads his brotherly balls up his sis's cute little twat. I think that is so cool. In his sister's twat is where a brother's creamy semen belongs.
This anecdote is thrilling because it does not have to give all of the detail. It is sexy, lustful and romantic all at the same time.
As good as it is and as short as it is, I wish there were more.
Good job.