did I say wow? wowsers even. Nice light frothy concoction more reminiscent of hot whipped cocoa by the fireplace than enjoying the sunshine, but I digress. You used your powers well. I could feel the heat, and the smiles.
Short but sweet. Nice! Good luck in the contest...
Too short...........
Beautifully constructed. Loved the hints of 'noire' too.
in a sensual setting. Wonderful imagery and the sex was hawt! Fine work Cerise. Good luck in the contest.
this is the first piece of your work that I've read, I look forward to reading more
Thoroughly enjoyable little story. I'll have to seek out more of your stuff.
You have a way with imagery! :) Selena
Have to agree with the comments about your imagery - and the heat ;) Well done, and good luck!
I really enjoyed this one. A nice blend of humour and heat. It's a great story.
A good way to convert people into loving nature! Good luck in the contest.
Takes me back to picnics more than 50 years ago – such happy memories! Well done, Pete.
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Wow
did I say wow?
wowsers even.
Nice light frothy concoction more reminiscent of hot whipped cocoa by the fireplace than enjoying the sunshine, but I digress.
You used your powers well. I could feel the heat, and the smiles.
Well written
Short but sweet. Nice! Good luck in the contest...
A very short story
Too short...........
Beautiful
Beautifully constructed. Loved the hints of 'noire' too.
Alfresco coupling...
in a sensual setting. Wonderful imagery and the sex was hawt! Fine work Cerise. Good luck in the contest.
good
this is the first piece of your work that I've read, I look forward to reading more
Short and sweet
Thoroughly enjoyable little story. I'll have to seek out more of your stuff.
Beautiful imagery!
You have a way with imagery! :)
Selena
Hot and vivid
Have to agree with the comments about your imagery - and the heat ;) Well done, and good luck!
short but very sweet
I really enjoyed this one. A nice blend of humour and heat. It's a great story.
Short and sweet
A good way to convert people into loving nature! Good luck in the contest.
Brings back happy memories!!!
Takes me back to picnics more than 50 years ago – such happy memories! Well done, Pete.
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