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An excellent start
Your story is good..especially for a first one. Keep it coming, I normally don't care for 'romance' stories, but ever now and then one catches my eye. It is good so go girl. Chuck
Love it
Please keep this story coming! I love it and can't wait to see how everything pans out.
Don't keep us waiting!
Don't keep us waiting on the next installment! I love stories like this, just as long as it doesn't have 25 chapters ;) I'm so excited for when they make up.
Execllent Story...
Excellent story,Please continue with the story ....Frank
You need an editor
Your spelling is dreadful and close to being off-putting. Could be a good story though. Please think about using a spell checker and your Thesaurus perhaps.
Good Plot
Good characters & basic plot. Have also read "Awakened" - together they make a very interesting beginning...avidly await the rest of the story.
Need to check spellings though...
Good story
But get some help with your spelling
Unfinished
You have pulished two short stories and already have an annoying habit , you haven`t finished either one!
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