All Comments on 'The Right Woman?'

As a reader of DG Hear's stories, I have to say that this was one of your best. I loved it. Thank you for the many hours I knew it took to write a story like this.

A avid fan.

I thought this was a good story, but personally, your style of writing throws me off. There's not a great deal of flow in it for me- I find myself slogging through, and especially in a story like this, where it is SO long, the monotone narrative voice is a bit much.

Picture Ben Stein reading you a bedtime story- even though it's a good bedtime story, with plot, characters, even a couple little twists and turns, it's BEN STEIN.

I can't and won't fault you on the technical aspect (as you well know, I am famous for a couple signature typos), other than to say that personally, I would have divided this story into two or three sections simply for ease of reading.

On the creative aspect- I never realy got a feel for te character telling the story. To be honest, my first thought was "Another damn double standard jackass" which doesn't put me in the best frame of mind.

The first page- Okay, we get that he has had lots of swapping and threesomes and sex in general. Really, telling us repeatedly just makes him soud like- and excuse me for saying so- one of those short, fat, bald men in cheap polyester suits who try to chat up girls in the bar, flashing their fake gold chains and talking about how much money and pussy they have.

AJ- I didn't really get a feel for her either. Personally, I would have liked to see her personality shine a little more, and draw better qualities from the narrator.

DG, you obviously have the technique down pat, and you draw a great audience. I just think that you and I have writing styles so wildly different that when we read adn comment on each other's work, it's a Martian and a Russian trying to make small talk over tea- messy, confusing, and often misunderstood.

Good luck and keep writing!

FtF

DG comes out with a wonderful story. Believable story with great characters. As usaual a winner! Thank You!

And no 'slog' at all for me, anyway.

Roger B

One of your best. Thanks

i usually dont read the romance stories, but i know djs stories are always good. Im a straight male in my 50s, but i loved this story, it had me almost in tears at the end. thank you for a beautiful story

Despite its length, this was a good tale and I love a good tale! You kept me interested till the end despite the rather predictable plot. Jerrod and, especially, A.J. were thoroughly likable heroes and the happy ending gave me such a warm feeling. I still think that Jerrod should have "cut off your Larry's balls and jammed them down Jenny's throat"! Great work DG! Well done! Pete.

Very, very good. I am a sucker sometimes for a good romance story and this hit the spot better than many I have read. Bravo and keep up the good work.

You did a great job of telling a very well done romance.<p> I wonder how many of the readers would have found fault with Janey if she was just an escort and stopped and went on with her life. Would she have been accepted without the rape being the thing that ended her working as an escort/whore? If she had been the one to be looking for someone special and Jerrod had been the one who was a pimp or user of women, who now regretted his former life in his youth, would it be alright? As humans with each having an individual moral code do we allow women the same rights in our minds as we do men? Men are very seldom raped in what society hears (though it happens more then most people want to hear about) as an acceptable story.<p>Without a real disease of the mind being present we can adjust to being what we want to be when we truly know what we have done and how we want to live. We can change those things that make us less by making the choice to not settle for less anymore. It is really that easy, but it takes a lot of effort which means work, faith and more work. Real friends can be the support if we let them in.<p><p>" 'Yes, it is,' he said. 'Life is all about choices. When you cut away all the junk, every situation is a choice. You choose how you react to situations. You choose how people affect your mood. You choose to be in a good mood or bad mood. The bottom line: It's your choice how you live your life.'<p><p>Thank you for a great story of life and the romantic outlook portrayed here and in so many of your stories<p>PT

You mentioned an editor assisted you. Fire this person and get a real editor ASAP. The wording is frequently awkward, and the grammatical errors must go. Brevity should also be applied in liberal doses.

One good story out of 30 not good odds. Thanks for saving the day with this one.

Hear,

This is one of your best stories: and one of the best to appear in the "Loving Wives" category. He was driving to the wedding in traffic, not able to find the church, and to late which immediately reminded me of the ending to the novel/movie "The Graduate" circa 1968. Though the circumstances are generally different in the two cases, in the 1968 novel, he followed his girfriend from Berkeley to the east bay, couldn't find the church, and arrived late.... But in the end all was well both in Hear's story and in the 1968 book by Webb. You are certianly an excellent writter. You do give a lot of detail in your writings, which I also enjoy though some object to. The song you mention and the words to it I remember fondly and brought tears to my eyes.

RAG

<p>For two reasons primarly</p>

<p><b>One:</b> for this line: <i>...growing up and making your own decisions. We don't always make the right one but we do have to live with the results of our actions.</i> I've always been a firm believer in that statement. I don't always make the right decision, I don't always have the right answer at the time, but I make the best choice I can given the information I have at hand. But if something goes wrong, or even totally south, then it's my fault and I blame myself, I don't look for someone to blame for not getting me out of it or for someone not giving me an easy out. The only exception I make to this statement for myself is if someone <i>with holds</i> information from me in an attempt to try and get me to make the decision their way. That I feel is wrong if I'm trying to deal honestly with them and they are trying to deceive me.</p>

<p>But I like that you had characters that knew and faced the results of their actions</p>

<p><b>Two:</b> That both of them knew what they were getting into <i>from the start</i> of their marriage and there were no surprises later on. A.J. knew about Jarrod. She checked him out, knew all about his past, and what he was like before she became intrested in him. Even though A.J. kept trying to tell Jerrod about her past, he had to face two facts, one) she was always trying to tell him so if he heard it from someone else it was his fault because she tried to make sure he knew up front and two) he made the decision to be with her and any baggage she brought into the relationship because he knew all of her good and bad actions in life. The decision wasn't made for him and one day he finds out that he would have to live by something that might bother him, but the decision to pursue her was made by him after some serious soul searching</p>

<p>I like that, no, I loved that in your story. Too often I read in a story where someone hides something from their past from someone they want to marry and when it comes up later they want <i>amnesty</i> from their actions because it wasn't discovered until "after" they are now married, but if it was something that serious they should have discussed this with their potential mate and made sure they could live with it "before" they got married as to not cause them both grief later on in the marriage.</p>

<p>If you think about that, if you married a man and 5 years later found he was convicted of rape of a small preschool child and murder if the childs parents would that bother you? How about if you were dating and found it out? How about you find out that your now wife had killed her last boyfriend before you because she thought he was cheating on her and served a part of him to you on your first date? How about if you found out she killed him on your second date?</p>

<p>To me dating is how you elimiate who you want to spend time with and/or marry and spend the rest of your life with, but if they with hold facts that could influence your decision so you'll marry them, and expect you to be alright with them once you find out, to me that has always been the more selfish decision than if you find you can't handle it after the marriage. That was/is an option that you should have had during the dating process, where you have access to everything about them good or bad, that you were robbed of. </p>

<p>That's why I loved this story. No one was robbed of anything and they ended up together because they both wanted to be and it made for one heck of a good story.</p>

<p>Kudos on one fantastically good story</p>

-Risq

My stories have become longer and longer. As readers, do you prefer the whole story posted at once or do you prefer it broke down into chapters of one or two Lit pages. I seem to get feedback both ways. Some say the stories are too long but when I posted them over a three day period the comments asked for full story posting.

So, on stories of 5 lit pages or less, What is your preference?

Thank you for all the nice comments. I do appreciater them.

DG Hear

<p>For me I've always drawn the line at either the number of pages or time between chapters.</P>

<p>If the chapters are within 1-2 days I can hold out and read them as they come. But once the time between chapters grows to greater than 4 days or more, I start to either lose intrest in the story, or (if its a really engaging story) I have to go back and re-read the previous chapter(s) because I've more than likely forgotten who did what or what I was thinking/feeling when I read the story. I like to re-read stories, but I hate the feeling that I'm lost when I read a story.</p>

<p>If you go with single storys, if it's over 10 pages I often have to read so much and come back. Often I read it at lunch time and if it goes too long I have to wait till later at home to finish it.</p>

<p>So for me it depends on length of the pages or time between when chapters are posted. If both are moderate then I don't have a perferrence which way. If its going to be a long time between chapters I'd rather have the whole story all at once so I can read it when I get a chance.</p>

-Risq

Please keep posting as you have been. Your stories are one of the best.

Good story - to your question of chapters - If the story is 4 or 5 pages I prefer 1 posting otherwise split it into submissions.

But then, I find any day I get to read a new DG Hear story usually turns out to be a great day.

the older i get and i forget about what comes next on this site.please do it all at one time.montana something,bean counter,and ohio got a story a year old.good stories,but you forget about who whar is going on.good writers i know they have other lives,but get the whole story out as soon as possible.what is worst is when they write a great story,they want to write another story before they finish the first story.hell give a old man a break,i be gone on before they finish.

Thank you for a fantastic story I loved reading it and enjoyed it immensley to keep up your great work:)

Excellent read. I just love your writing.

To answer your question. 5 or 6 pages would still be one story for my preference. When days pass i tend to forget and have to read part one again.

Hi,

This had a little of everything. I did like the length - this story needed a lot of development to work out right ... and it did work out.

The ending was nicely complicated and sweet. It's great when a plan comes together.

Another home run, DG!

Regards, Jack

Not worthy of the name. Overrated because of the name. Fuck you if you don't like my opinion.

You have done it again DG, once more I have enjoyed a story with all the characters being truly involved in one way or another.

Hope you keep up the good work.

From U.K. fan.

A really well told story of love. It is "Love is where you find it". The happy ending is great! You're one of my favorites DG.

Risq said it exactly as I would have responded. I also don’t like a long delay but I do look forward with a fun expectation each day having a good story to read. Thank you for your indulgence of your reader’s thoughts and preferences.<p>PT

I popped the question to the "Love of My Life". A 20[no exageration] on a scale of 1-10. She ran back to her abusive ex-boyfriend, she'd played me to get him back. It's been 26 month's and i'll never forget her.

I suppose that bullshit with his (gotta be a He)macho attitude could write better, but he must spend his time doing nothing more than posting abusive comments. Guess you can't please them all.

Great story anyway DG. Keep it up!

(am anonymous coz' I'm not yet a member of this site)

I always enjoy your story and they way they tackle life's problems. I have also dealt with those orange barrels in Akron driving a 18 wheeler. Thanks.

I wish that other authors would write more romance stories when they want the couple to stay together rather than loving wives stories where first the partner cheats and the author use every trick in the book to get the couple back together again. Anyway, thanks for an outstanding story.___

SleeplessinMD

I enjoyed it. Thanks.

All I can say is you are an excellent writer and have me hooked already. I can't stop reading your stories. I must SLEEP or I will be reading all night(so hard to tear myself away)... I am eager to read more. Loved it thx for the great read.

I loved the story but i wished he would kick the shit out of Larry for what he did to A.J.

Another glorious story by DG Hear. Once I started reader this story I could not stop until finishing. While I was reading the final chapter of the story, I had the radio on and was listening to Robert Schumann's Symphony #2 on the Sunday afternoon classical music radio station. What I wonderful combination of Hear's story's finale and the last movement of Schumann's 2 symphony. RAG

I love when true love wins in the end. Very warm story!

Got away with rape. I don't care if it was in the past, or done to a prostitute... if I found out a guy I knew, and his wife, raped the woman I was going to marry they would have to pay. I don't know anyone who could let that go.

... again!!

H.

D.G. has done it once again. I don't think I have ever found a better story on this site! Five Stars are just not enough for this one!

And if I do I will slap you so hard, seriously loved this story keep it up DemiGod.

It is an excellent story to help people understand how life can be lived "actively" - make your choices - intentionally and deliberately. You may not make all the best choices but you will always know you are in charge of your life to the greatest degree possible.

When you have a history (who does not) you need to keep both yours and the history of others in perspective -

Live well and think before you act - I like it -

I'm a few years behind in reading this story. I think DG did a pretty credible job considering how basically unsympathetic his characters are. Gosh, poor rich boy, suffering the angst of onepercenter entitlement. All his egotism centered on his cock.

Skipping blithely through life, no diseases, unplanned pregnancies, aggrieved boyfriends or vindictive husbands or rebellious stockholders. No under the table payouts for blackmail or abortions. So this story is a Modern Urban Fairytale without moral or ethical consequences for Jerrod?

Ahem, I wish to make a pronouncement. Quoting the tediously repetitious LW commentaries by the spelunking BTB lynchmob trolls: "Once a cheater, always a cheater! Burn baby burn!" Excuse me while I wash my hands of quoting those vermin.

That the lack of character by the character Jerrod, predicts utter doom for his marriage with AJ and all the others that will follow. There is no way that guy, with the personality as described by the author, is ever going to permanently change his predation of women.

God, I HATE the fucking disappearence/misunderstanding trope!

So they're are doing business together every day and then she suddenly disappear from the face of earth? Come on!

Thank you for your offering. Few of us have nothing in our past that we're not ashamed of, and most of us don't have even a half way reason or excuse for doing it as she did. Well done.

This is close to the greatest story i have ever read. The only story that tops this story is My sister's wedding. Which you wrote.so yes I can't fault a beautiful love story . Please may i have some more? Love you all! Remember that you can't stop who you fall in love with! Bye

I'd have liked to see revenge on the ass Larry and his cheating wife.

And this is a lovely one. Easy five stars.

This was one good story. I don't get the cheating comments. I don't think they were cheaters, neither cheated on the other once they met. He didn't cheat on his friends and even though she was an escort, she never cheated...as far as we know from the story. Maybe he finally grew up and she definitely grew up when she left Vegas. I was glad for both of them. Thank you for a very happy story.

and sticking to them.

no double standards. no angst. no issues with questionable unknowns.

well done

told you you loved redheads

How long does it take to install a computer system.?.The alone AJ set up must be in the running for the longest ever and how did AJs mother know who he was?.

You're just going to let the rapists get away? After everything they did? That's sick.

Was this story written in 1970?

"You raped her!"

"Don't worry, we won't say anything!"

"You better not! The important thing here is nobody must know I'm marrying a sullied bride! I wouldn't even be angry at you for raping a whore if it wasn't my future wife."

"Of course. By the way, she saw me, her rapist, talking to you, and saw her future crumbling down before her eyes. She ran away and she's not answering her phone. Also, she's sullied. What are you going to do?"

"How could she wrong me that much! I don't know if I want to take her back at all. I need advice from my father."

Bla bla bla. I fucked married women at swinger parties and fell in love, she was treated badly and we got married.

In other words, Obvious. 2 stars for being telegraphed

I don't know why but I didn't like Jerrod's character at all.

A sweet and loving story with a number of weaknesses. For one, Jerrod is NOT a very lovable character. He is just shy of despicable, especially if you consider his early college years. He is sort of also oscillating close to double standards: his own life vs AJ's life. But the motivations for both are quite different!!!

This story needs to close some loose ends: for instance, did AJ ever tell Jerrod her side of the story about her old life style? Did Larry and Jenny ever get their much deserved punishment? Probably not because the kids might then be orphans (the ultimate victims).

A reluctant 5*

BJ

Mostly good, but I didn't like that Larry got away with drugging and raping AJ

The author needs to revisit the the time scales in this story.