All Comments on 'Crossing the Veil'

...interesting, I always felt that the yin and yang was the most accurate way to perceive life... there is life and then there is death... "nothing" then the other day I was watching the science channel and they are exploring the highly possible idea that there are (well there are but speculation as to what they are) but they found parallel universes within our own world but are not sure what purpose they pose for life and they still argue the point of a traveling souls...anyway...interesting write, thanks for the read.

this is a gnostic subject that has much mystery to lend to a poem. While the subject is there for you to draw in the reader the overuse of your "crossing the veil" phase and long sentences that drop off without reason leave the reader wondering where is the mystery. Put this on the boards for review and edit and I think you will find the mystic flowing again to make the reader want to know more.

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