I love this story...glad you're updating more frequently.
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Anonymous05/09/07
hmm...
I've been reading this since the beginning and although I have enjoyed the slow build, I think that you've reached the point where you need to start speeding things up a bit. I still enjoy your characters and their relationships, but it's all starting to drag. Keep up the good work, though and I can't wait to see what you're gonna write next.
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Anonymous05/12/07
LOVE IT!!!!
Just read your story and I love it...more please!!!!! I love the build up pf the characters. Will her father ever find out what Jerry truly did? Great Job!
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Anonymous07/30/13
A waste of a story
Tose character act and talk like they are 12 years old and this is the 19th century: like what is all that stuff with Jo being a virgin, and them having to wait to be "ready" and them having to get married and all that shit. Also has she been raped or was this just a weird cryptic non story that appeared convenient at the time but is not anymore. So many stuff are inconsistent and don't make sense. They "think" most than they talk and it is getting annoying that most of the stuff are tought rather than said. Tey don't really talk to each other, nothing is happening, this is maddening!!!
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Yeah!
I love this story...glad you're updating more frequently.
hmm...
I've been reading this since the beginning and although I have enjoyed the slow build, I think that you've reached the point where you need to start speeding things up a bit. I still enjoy your characters and their relationships, but it's all starting to drag. Keep up the good work, though and I can't wait to see what you're gonna write next.
LOVE IT!!!!
Just read your story and I love it...more please!!!!! I love the build up pf the characters. Will her father ever find out what Jerry truly did? Great Job!
A waste of a story
Tose character act and talk like they are 12 years old and this is the 19th century: like what is all that stuff with Jo being a virgin, and them having to wait to be "ready" and them having to get married and all that shit. Also has she been raped or was this just a weird cryptic non story that appeared convenient at the time but is not anymore. So many stuff are inconsistent and don't make sense. They "think" most than they talk and it is getting annoying that most of the stuff are tought rather than said. Tey don't really talk to each other, nothing is happening, this is maddening!!!
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