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Beautiful, Strange, Touching!
Remarkable! Unusual in every way. It held my attention to the very end. BRAVO!!!
Very good story
Great story kept my attention all the way thru..
Keep up the great work of fine writing...
Great
We should all be so lucky to find a mentor and lover in one person.
Boyd
Nice Romance
Many subtle principles underneath this little gem of a story. Very nice!
Delightful
An engaging and wonderful story.
If only
I could put my thoughts into a meanyful story as well as you do. I've been reading all your stories, going alphabetical to here. I've enjoyed them all, so far, this one is no exception, but. As with this story, all your stories leaves me with the feeling like there should be more. Your endings just don't flow, I think it's that you don't want your stories to be long and drawen out. I'm a 57 year old, Construction/Mechanical Engineer, you had me looking for a tissue on this one. I don't need all the heavy breathing sex scenes to enjoy, anyway, you get my point, keep them coming.
A story well told
A story well told. It is easy to see why this story is rated so highly by others. I was disappointed by the title because I was looking for a formula for love or a mathematical trick or function of some type. I guess the title doesn't fit for me.
This story is similar to The Great Man's wife in that it's a story of unrequited love. It's easy to see Robin's growing love of Carenza and the clues she gave him of her love for him. Thank God for mom. Even though I knew how the plot would end, not the specifics, but the general principle I kept reading. The writing is colorful and clear and I couldn't wait until the conclusion. Again I was disappointed by the lack of a meaningful sex scene but I believe Moondrift unfortunately will never go that route.
I believe the opening paragraph that is repeated in Chapter three is true, and from my perspective would add to the story if that same feeling was illustrated in the sex act itself.
Maybe I'm jealous because I don't believe I've ever written a paragraph as good as that one.
WHAT A PRICK
he could not see beyond the end of his nose....what an arrogant prick he was......took a while for the penny to drop and get together with her......men can be such assholes at times.....
this was a good story until the end
when it was rushed ans finished way too quickly....and why turn him in to a bumbling idiot...not much hope for his success in his chosen career...the ending needed to be made longer
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