All Comments on 'A Busy Week Ch. 01'

actually tried to go into this story with ho hum atitude,as just dont feel right getting too worked up in front of a computer,her self description was so good i could see her in my minds eye and almost painful how much i physically wanted to be with her!my original ho hums was from the story being with guys as i thought i wouldve preferred a lesbion and putting myself in herplace,but things were described so well my skirt was up my panties down and was if i joined in on the action.a great erotic writer. anna

This is a great story! Well told, very vivid and extermly arousing! Wonderful job!

Seeing it was in the exhibitionist section, I wasn't expecting you to go all the way .. a pleasant suprise, and why not on a hot day in Sydney. Looking foward to hear of more escapades.

incredible.... you should publish.. and I should spend more time at the beach! JJ

A good start and a slow build to what looks like a promising story.

Your buildup of the sexual tension was good. The teasing, exhibitionism, public excitement, vibrations from the moped, etc.

When it comes to the sex I'd like more vocalizations, descriptions of sensations, and things telling me how the characters are losing control - doing things they couldn't imagine normally doing, and losing control of their bodies and senses to passion.

What a delightful way to end a day at the beach! A well told story, and fun to the nth degree! I'll be reading more!

Thanks