I also find myself waiting for a continuation. A very nice Hot story.
by
Anonymous05/17/07
give us more of the witches
that was erotic at its' best.
by
Anonymous05/17/07
Haloes???
A well-written tale, leaving the reader wondering what the three-fold payback will be. Will we be told?
Just one point: an aureole is a halo; the pigmented area around the nipple is an areola (pl. areolae).
Although your piece works, it stereotypes real witches and Goth culture.
Pagan is an umbrella term for many traditions. Wicca is just one of them.
For those who don't know, your disclaimer at the beginning is not enough to discontinue the stereotype of the sexual witch.
You also had several inconsistencies:
First these are girls who failed a course twice,yet you mention that most Goth girls are smarter than the average student.
So your premise for them being in class doesn't hold.
Second, not all Goths are witches or followers of any Pagan tradition.
That being said, I found the story to be a good one, but with some serious flaws.
And yes, I am a witch, female and no, we don't cast spells in the way you describe in this story. Sex magick is quite complicated and involves consent, not seduction or coercion - which makes it all the more delightful. ;-)
by
Anonymous05/19/07
Fantastic & Outstanding!
A great story with various unique twists. You definitely need to do a Sequel to this story.
by
Anonymous05/21/07
Wow!
This story was amazing! I can't wait for the sequel!
I liked this story, but yes it's painful to see these steriotypes encoraged as I'm Pagan myself. If you plan to write a second chapter or a similar story, and you'd like a little more information on sex magick or non-holliwood witchcraft, feel free to look me up on the forums and I'll do my best to answer any questions you might have.
It's great to see some erotic fiction involving witches!
Take care,
FaeryFire
Just because you are a sick little twisted JACKASS that knows nothing about nothing, DOES NOT MEAN that the author doesn't know what he is talking about... Go back under the rock you born under and bother us not...
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Anonymous06/25/12
Intense
Good story, the use of witches and pagans vs just goth was actually quite interesting. Most modern religions actually see physical love as evil, or at least at moderately shameful while the perception of pagans and wiccans as more sensual and more physical continues. By further modifying it and making it clear that these were intelligent 18 year old women rather then hippygoths made it a bit more realistic.
Keep going, and keep writing love your work and have commented on it on several pages.
A brilliant story of pupil power and just what some young nubile women (older teenagers) could get up to.
It's a pity that assholes who write obnoxsious comments are too frightened or embarrased to do so under their own names but write under "anonamous".
by
Anonymous02/11/14
Hot, funny and fun!
it's easy to see why so many people liked your story. I know I did!
by
Anonymous08/10/16
oh my god
this was incredible when oh when are you if at all gonna finish this great piece
English
so good
this was really good, i hope that there is a second part coming and soon.
A most erotic story
I also find myself waiting for a continuation. A very nice Hot story.
give us more of the witches
that was erotic at its' best.
Haloes???
A well-written tale, leaving the reader wondering what the three-fold payback will be. Will we be told?
Just one point: an aureole is a halo; the pigmented area around the nipple is an areola (pl. areolae).
HOT
That was one of the hottest stories I read in a while.
fantastic!
That was great, can't wait for a part 2 please!
Yowza!
Great story. Superb detail and pacing. Please at least give us the celebration party. (Of course they passed)
Great
Some of the best I have read!
Wow
Mmmmm, fantastic
thanks
Great Stuff
Excellent stuff - really would appreciate a follow on
Very erotic
Smokin' hot. Loved the witches idea.
Great Job
Very original, sexy and well written!
Incrediblye hot
I can't wait to see his reward!
Great story
Love the story can't wait for the next part
Well written
This is an example of a well written story
Perpetrating stereotypes? yes. Well-written? Maybe
Although your piece works, it stereotypes real witches and Goth culture.
Pagan is an umbrella term for many traditions. Wicca is just one of them.
For those who don't know, your disclaimer at the beginning is not enough to discontinue the stereotype of the sexual witch.
You also had several inconsistencies:
First these are girls who failed a course twice,yet you mention that most Goth girls are smarter than the average student.
So your premise for them being in class doesn't hold.
Second, not all Goths are witches or followers of any Pagan tradition.
That being said, I found the story to be a good one, but with some serious flaws.
And yes, I am a witch, female and no, we don't cast spells in the way you describe in this story. Sex magick is quite complicated and involves consent, not seduction or coercion - which makes it all the more delightful. ;-)
Fantastic & Outstanding!
A great story with various unique twists. You definitely need to do a Sequel to this story.
Wow!
This story was amazing! I can't wait for the sequel!
outstanding
Outstanding .... Can't wait for the sequel
Good story, more research couldnt hurt.
I liked this story, but yes it's painful to see these steriotypes encoraged as I'm Pagan myself. If you plan to write a second chapter or a similar story, and you'd like a little more information on sex magick or non-holliwood witchcraft, feel free to look me up on the forums and I'll do my best to answer any questions you might have.
It's great to see some erotic fiction involving witches!
Take care,
FaeryFire
There were several comments
Ahabscribe, about various aspects of witchdom. Don't care. The story was well written and HOT! Looking forward to chapter two. Thank You. Ronnie W.
Well, that got me pretty wet!
Dripping wet, actually. I don't think I'll ever be able to walk past a goth girl again without my pussy getting wet!
Hot
Awesome. And don't worry about stereotypes.
A witch for all Seasoning
Bewitching wenches should be more common. A little more magic in the schools might keep the intelligent teachers cumming back..
Sick vile perversion at its worst.
Just read two sentences and nearly puked. This writer is NOT sane. Should be behind the bars. (probably was)
To the jackass that wrote on 4/12...
Just because you are a sick little twisted JACKASS that knows nothing about nothing, DOES NOT MEAN that the author doesn't know what he is talking about... Go back under the rock you born under and bother us not...
Intense
Good story, the use of witches and pagans vs just goth was actually quite interesting. Most modern religions actually see physical love as evil, or at least at moderately shameful while the perception of pagans and wiccans as more sensual and more physical continues. By further modifying it and making it clear that these were intelligent 18 year old women rather then hippygoths made it a bit more realistic.
Keep going, and keep writing love your work and have commented on it on several pages.
ABSOLUTELY AWSOME.
A brilliant story of pupil power and just what some young nubile women (older teenagers) could get up to.
It's a pity that assholes who write obnoxsious comments are too frightened or embarrased to do so under their own names but write under "anonamous".
Hot, funny and fun!
it's easy to see why so many people liked your story. I know I did!
oh my god
this was incredible when oh when are you if at all gonna finish this great piece
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