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the usual for this writer
excellent. i am again impressed with your ability to set up a situtation and find a reasomable way out of it for those involved. the ninth step was really a nice story. a loving couple will not have to fce the turmoil of a one time cheat and both will be better off. If you must confess, see a priest (unless you are stone cold caught
As I have discovered the hard way,
this story would have worked even better if you could have worked the wife's actions into the actual story. The epilogue was a different story, from a different point of view. The plot and the story telling were excellent and I am so glad to see new stories by thecelt!
Where's the honesty?
For all that this is a good story, there is a certain level of dishonest and deception in that relationship. The wife is operating on the basis of "what he doesn't know won't hurt him" - which is a lousy foundation for a relationship. IMHO a marriage is based more on trust than on love, so when that trust is violated the marriage is in trouble. Not insurmountable trouble, but the longer the wound is left to fester the greater the chances of it all ending in grief.
I can't bring myself to like the conclusion. The rest of it isn't bad, though it is a bit brief for any real exploration of the characters.
Different
I really liked the main story, nice concept and explanation. This kind of thing can happen easily. I don't like the dishonesty of the epilog. I understand it but it will always be a shadow in her eyes and a torment. It's your story and a damn good one! Thank You!
For your principles
This is a typical story frrom you. Well written w/a sucky ending. The hundred is for your consistency. Oh well, maybe one day you will write about real men and women.
The ususal for this writer.
A fucked over husband.
You say it don't matter because he don't know the truth. I know the truth and I grade the story.
Besides in real time, the husband would always have his doughts and that will diminish the their love, especially when some other little thing happens in the future.
I would predict that this marrage will slowly go downhill.
Because your story idea is so different than my idea, I give you a zero.
But thanks for trying.
To tell or not to tell
Good story telling and writing. Excellent.Story was intended to be about making amends and forgiveness but with the epilog it really seemed to be more about confessing and facing the consequences or holding back and living with a lie. Which is the better choice? Honesty at any cost or living the status quo.What could bring up a continuation of the story is the fact that the wife believes that no one knows what really happened that night except her. There is, however, at least one other person who knows, her lover. Five years from now, do to some set of circumstances, he could get pissed at her and decide to drop a dime on her. Or he could have let it slip to a coworker about their "meeting" and word gets back to the husband. Or maybe a neighbor saw the lover enter or leave the house and only now casually mentions something to the husband who puts 2 and 2 together. A confession at the time of the affair could maybe have been forgiven but after so long a length of time, could it?This scenario certainly has been addressed in other stories, but it could happen here. When the wife thinks she has everything under control and the incident is well in the past, the shit could hit the fan. It would be interesting to see how the theCelt would approach this situation.
great
no ..paul needs to have his one affair....then he can confess she can then confess and they can then go on with their lives....no matter what she did was still cheating ...and when a person cheats the one cheated on very much needs t oget even ...as the biblr=e says an eye for an eye ....i know it works my wife cheated on me with quite a few men ...well i have ben having fun for years cheating back on her .....she confesed tomaybe 20 men hundreds of times ...i have had my 20 women but im still working on the hundreds ...hell i even still fuck the wife when im not chasingother skirts ...and the wife she feels sorry for her self as she knows it was her that messed up her life ...she has forgiven me and wants me t o forgive her also ..i have its just the evening up the score thing...i have told her than once we are even we can have that kid she wants ...i figure i have maybe 5 more years then as long as she dont stray again we can start on a family.. you say how do i know shes not still cheating hey i still have pi's following her ...i still tap all her phones and i have the house wired and their is nothing she does that i dont know about ...why you ask it is because once i found out and was going t odivorce her ...she then didnt want that ...so in order to keep me she agreed to let me even the score ...the thing is she also knows i dont trust her ...this is her way of getting my trust back ....
Needed more
This story started so well - such an interesting concept which lost steam because the author rushed the story, tying it together with the epilog instead of building on the conflict and then resolution. It didn't work. The only thing I could think of was "omg, these people are stupid and now they are going to breed!" I couldn't like the hero because he was as dumb as his friend. And I couldn't like a heroine who had no respect for her husband. She cheated on him "but her punishment was to live with that knowledge." riiight...
Not Likely
The ninth step reads; Made direct amends to such people wherever possible,EXCEPT WHEN TO DO SO WOULD INJURE THEM OR OTHERS.Obviously the premise for this story goes against the principal of the step.
Well written story of a Loving Wife??
The ninth step “must do no harm to others” as it is that result that makes the forgiveness worthy. This is an extreme example of someone doing more harm then good. It is what a novice of real redemption would think. I liked your take to build a story but the fundamental premise is so wrong it should also be a TV show.Not telling a horrific action done to a partner is not always wrong but it will lead to anxiety for the holder of the truth and lessen them as a happy person. In this case the partner in the deceit is still out there and how do you reconcile that? Murder or death is one way and hope is the other. She got a way with it, but what does it means down the road for her and her outlook and respect for the husband.You are a very good writer and I look forward to seeing something by you. Thank you for the entertainment.PT
More Garbage from the Celt
How can anyone sympathize with this whore? She's pulled a fast one over on her poor smuck husband. I would rather he found out the truth and kicked the cheating slut out on her filthy ass. She has no respect for her husband and got away scott free. This is no loving wife, only a conniving whore.
Get a grip!
I wish that those who comment and rant about the actions of the characters in this and similar stories could get a bit of a grasp on reality. Condemning the author for writing such a story, as if he were responsible for some real life situation involving his characters boggles my mind. As many others have said previously: It's just a story. It's not real! By the way, I was entertained by reading this piece, and that's all I can ask of the writer. Harry
As always great writing...
But... Isn't Paul just the luckiest fucking guy on the planet to have such a loving wife? If she had confessed after her affair, maybe he could have forgiven her and moved on with an honest relationship instead of the deceitful one they have had for two or so years. He may never know that she cheated but her knowledge will forever taint their relationship. What a lucky guy to have this deceitful wife now give him a child... I hope my disdain for this woman shows through.
Thanks for a great read though Celt.
Charleybear
Great story again from Celt
This is an excellent tale with at least part of the outcome resulting from Paul's believing that chronic drinking (of ethanol)can result in loss of memory: this is actually true for chronic alcohol drinking as it is for many other additive drugs. Her part of the story, concealed from Paul, made for an interesting finale to the story. One thing though, Celt, I did not understand the closing remark she made, the Paul was to become a father? I assume that this has nothing to do with the sex that she had with her colleague while Paul was in Japan, as that, I assume, occurred long before the story itself took place(?)
RAG
Not up to you usual standard
Started well ending lacking,
?????? Huh ????
Celt,
I gave a 25 for the writing of the story, because it takes time, and a thick skin, to write in this catagory, but I can't honestly go higher than this because you covered some things I always have a pet peeve against and turned the ending into some kind of "happy ever after" while in the story the husband got screwed over by the wife because he named the wrong guy who she cheated on him with.
What I'm talking about is:
-One, when a cheater ends up being rewarded for cheating. The wife cheated on her husband, lied about it, and now somehow feels that because she has to live with what she did, this is punishment enough for her cheating, even though she knows her husband would divorce her in a heart beat for cheating on him. How is that not selfish? I mean when you do whatever it takes so that you will be happy, while convincing yourself that if it takes lying to someone else then your making them happy as well, so that in the end its a good lie if everyone in the end is happy? To me that is only escaping from the scene of the crime while screaming out "no harm no foul" as you run away. The husband was trying to better their life with that job that took him out of the country.
Maybe he could have done better at managing their life together or maybe once they agreed to him doing this she regreted it. Regardless you never explained that in detail in the story. But we do know from the story the wife was aware of what she did, because she choose a co-worker of theirs who was always trying to get her to sleep with him and she finially gave in (even though he clearly knew she was married), but now wants to pretend it never happened and since she will never speak of it, it never has, but what really she's done is get away with murder because her husband doesn't know all the facts. I've always hated that when a character cheats on a mate and gets away with it while the story alludes to the fact that they will remain happier if the husband never knows she cheated on him. I'm sure every cheater in the word rationalizes like that so they don't feel guilty about cheating on the "people" who trust them.
-Two, because the wife is pregnant it makes the cheating she did (or if the story calls for it the husband) meaningless. I'm the father of 3 kids and I'm here say, children aren't some magic bullet that fixes any and all problems between husbands and wives. Especially if one of them is cheating on the other. If anything when you have any fundamental flaws and/or a loss of respect that lead you to cheat, trying to use kids to keep you together makes it worse. And worse even if you divorce.
But I hate it when I feels like in a story that some how the wife being pregnant makes the cheating that happened all better. That somehow because she allowed herself to become pregnant with the child the husband always wanted, that made up for her cheating on him a few times. But see, that doesn't work because you can't make something up to someone if the other person doesn't know, or for that matter has no idea, what your making up for. Primarly because not only do they not know what you did wrong, now they don't even know what you attempted to do to make it right. You've gained nothing and lost nothing. Again to me it's a way in a story for someone to justify cheating by making secret restitution or finding a quick way to ease their own conscious, without the other persons knowledge or concent, either before, during, and even after they finish what they did. Some price they are willing to pay that benifits them as well. I still see that as selfish, specially if your hiding what you've done so you never get caught.
-Three, because she (or if it is the husband) only cheated a few times that this somehow makes it "less" of a big deal. When you get married you discuss what is acceptable and what is not. If your mate says "cheating regardles of how many times is not acceptable to me" you don't get to change the rules and decide for yourself "well if I do it a few times, but not with someone I love, and quit before it gets serious no harm no foul" and then act like its no big deal. The wife in this story knew that her husband wouldn't put up with her cheating so she lied. A lie by omision is still a lie, and she cheated on her husband with a fellow co-worker of theirs, so she made it even worse. Then when he found out she cheated, but not with who she bluffed him out of being mad because he didn't know enough of the facts to know the whole story, but some how it supposed to be a happy ending because she got away with it?
I thought it was written well, and I clearly understood what you were writing, but wow the wife snow's him over and now she's pregnant and so the husband gets to continue living in ignorance because she was a better lier? I've always said that people should be allowed to make up their own minds instead of having others make it up for them. The wife in this story made up his mind for him by lying to him him. I can't say I like to read stories that end like that
-Risq
e'scus' me?
I just errr red' the darn s'htory and I had no clue as to why it was even posted,,,, 'mind you, I'm a bit dd'drunk, but this s'htory ish real' stupid.. but you's forgiven, dear wrider...
Bullshit
SOS! Same old shit from a fucked up mind. Started out good. Ended up to be the same piss-poor tripe I've come to expect from this writer. He/she is not an author.
you just can't get by that wimp shit
you just a wimp writer with no balls.who the baby daddy?you've been fucking up good stories with bad plots for years.
Good Story
As always, the writing was excellent and the story elements were well developed and it was a good read. With one exception that is, The husband still winds up with a cheating wife and he thinks she's wonderful. How crappy is that? I always find it hard to be sympathetic to cheaters that never get caught...
Need to reasonably like the wife
It was a great story until the last couple of paragraphs which seemed to sideline the main point of your story-line. And is now the focal point of most of the comments. I tried to think what I did not like about the final couple of paragraphs and I found that I did not like the wife, so I slightly rewrote the paragraphs. Placing the sex with Brian before Jerry arrives and having the wife realize her mistake much sooner. She still has her secret but she seems more palatable.
I apologize if I offend you by including the rewritten paragraphs in my post, but it is the easiest way to express what I mean in a constructive way. Please delete this post if I have offended you. Again my apologies.
Once Jerry was in bed, (Brian wanted to take a quick shower and continue with more love making. We had been making love for two hours prior to Jerry showing up. The sex had been pretty good and I had missed Paul so I had been horny as hell. But, as I listened to Brian in the shower,) I began to think of what could have happened if it had been Paul rather than Jerry and what I was risking. I decided then and there that I didn't ever want to have to face that so I told Brian that we were through. I told him even though Paul had moved out for a time it made no difference. We were still married and I wanted our marriage to continue. It wasn't going to continue if I was going to cheat on Paul. I decided that night to fight for what I had and what I realized that I could lose. Brian heard me out and accepted my decision. (He wanted to stay the night and continue making more love, but I had made up my mind. I wanted him to leave and he agreed and left.)
(I then went downstairs and slept on the couch waiting for Jerry to wake up.) When he did come down and in his confusion believed we had slept together, I let him think we had and convinced him that Paul must never know. I cried and pleaded with him and Jerry bought it and that was the last I heard from him until now. So, even though this was almost a disaster, it worked out well. (Paul is still happy and I'm still happy all due to Jerry showing up that night. How about that?).
That was what really happened that night and it was just that (one time and only time). I never cheated on Paul again nor did I ever even want to. And even though I lied to him, I never had second thoughts. Paul loved me and I loved him and I wanted nothing more than our marriage and our life together. I've protected my secret and I am going to take it with me to the grave. (I know what you must think of me but I don't care, because I do not want to hurt Paul. I made an unfortunate and unforgivable mistake and I have to live with it and regret it for the rest of my life, but that's no reason for me to give up the man I love. My punishment is knowing and living with what I did. I have to live with that!)
And by the way, when Paul comes down from his shower, I have something to tell him. He's going to be a father.
In support of Jerry
The transition to Janet’s voice in the epilogue was awkward. I’m not even sure that the epilogue qualified as such; it was more reminiscent of Paul Harvey’s The Rest of The Story.
Even so, this tale worked on a number of levels. By the end, the most sympathetic character is Jerry, the admitted drunk. Jerry pays for a crime he merely thought he had committed. Supposedly, he is the dumbest character and Paul’s inferior, at least according to Paul.
I could not determine whether Paul was angrier that Janet had cheated him or that dumb Jerry had been her lover. This wasn’t so much about a best friend cheating, as it was about a dumb friend cheating. Not that I wasn’t sympathetic to Paul’s plight, I was.
Paul is the perfect foil. He states that Jerry had married a slut when he remains married to one himself. He finally admits that Jerry is a drunk, yet he turns immediately to drink upon hearing of Janet’s infidelity. Paul and Jerry are friends because they share more than Paul will admit. As for Janet, she reflects the reality that brains and morals have no correlation.
Janet is the smartest character in this tale. She is remarkably quick on her feet. Imagine being interrupted with your lover when a drunk appears at your door. Instead of turning him away, you let him in to collapse drunk, resume your tryst, then when finished with your lover you wake the drunk, lie to him and enlist him in perpetuating a lie that shields your infidelity. Brilliant! My kudos to Janet (and thecelt).
This is one devious woman, a villainess worthy of being given her say in this sad tale. We should have heard much more from her. She is undoubtedly the smartest of the group…and the most dangerous.
Should there be a follow-up? Should we read about Janet getting her comeuppance? I vote no. She has already been unmasked.
It's getting very difficult to come up with a new
twist in LW but count on thecelt to do it! I enjoyed it and although I suspected she had been unfaithful I didn't see how you were going to let the reader know. I always enjoy your stories and I'm looking forward to many more.
Nice twist
I enjoyed your story and the ending surprised me. Not that she actually had an affair, but that it was with someone other than his friend.
You must have a thick skin to wright in this category. I am amazed at the number of people who can only say a story is good if thet characters act as thay would.
Decent Story
thecelt has taken one small slice of a marriage and showed the readers a possible outcome of a one-time infidelity. Although I have no statistics for it I have to believe that there are a number of marriages today where a husband or wife has betrayed their vows of fidelity and has not confessed the betrayal to their spouse. Many of these marriages continue on their merry way without a ripple on the surface of the union. Thus I have no problem with this particular story and the wife's cover-up. The story is thecelt's take on what is, not on what marriage should be. Or to put it in a slightly different way, there are few husbands and wives who can look into their personal closet without noting a skeleton or two hanging within.*****
One thing I didn't like was the last paragraph concerning the pregnancy. It was as if it was Janet's 'get out of jail' card which she could wave in front of Paul to show how perfect everything was after the little bump in the road they had just encountered. To me it meant that her life was going to continue without any remorse since she had buried the infidelity problem, got rid of the Jerry problem and now they were going to have a family so everything was OK. The paragraph was unnecessary and too glib an ending. Additionally, she had successfully destroyed a lifetime friendship between Paul and Jerry. I think that can be inferred since Paul still has a nagging doubt about the infidelity even after Janet's explanation of the Jerry incident. Janet seems to gloat in the epilogue concerning her dexterous handling of the entire mess and the results she obtained. To say the least, she is not an ideal wife but truely is a Loving Wife.
Interesting read; well-told story
Yes, this set of characters are flawed people. Wifey got away with cheating. However, I liked reading this interesting story, though.
more angst was needed
I agree with Orion that the wife appeared to be gloating. More angst would have made her more sympathic to this reader.
At the rate our writers and their heroes are...
we won't be surprised at all, if/when there's an accident --- when the kid's about 16, oh, yeah, we've to wait that long!! --- and blood is needed and both wife and husband are tested, our Einstein-level Paul's drunken eyes' gonna pop out.
"How could this be, Janet? His blood type is OO; yours is OX and mine's ZZ+! You sure you didn't cheat? I had Jerry tested, too, and his blood type is XX-; so there's NO WAY in hell neither him nor me could be the OTHER partner who helped you created our son, Paul Jr. here!"
Of course, being the highly "dexterous" (to borrow one of the other commentators) person who Janet is, she smiles and says...
"Oh, you lovable dummy Paul! You haven't heard of Craig Venter's shot-gun genomic sequencing 25 years ago, did you? Well, guess what, the latest and most advance, most complete, genetic maping says that, YES --- contrary to ALL PREVIOUS MEDICAL UNDERSTANDING --- beloved, ANY two randomly blood types CAN combine to give rise to ANY other blood type, like our son here! Yes, mine's OX and yours ZZ+; but through bio-transmutated-galactic permutational extrapolative means, we CAN, WE HAVE, created our son, with a OO blood type, even with OX and ZZ+!"
Smiling as she walks away from a confused, 5-year-old-like Paul, Janet says, "You gonna get lucky tonight, lover!"
"And I have another BIG announcement, dear!"
Paul's eyes pop completely out of their formerly stable working eye sockets... Thus, our heroine escapes calamity again!
The next scene, we see old, lanky, shakin' and stuttering Jerry and Paul drinking at "Swooshy Bars"... "This is the 3rd straight month I am completely sober the last 4 months, Paul, buddy....."
"Let's just fucking forgit about these AA meetings this week, buddy Jerry! I'll go with you next week, but tonight, let's just be happy!, especially now that Janet told me there's another BIG SURPRISE to be announced tonight! I can't quite shake this nagging thing in the back of my head...
"I know she EXPLAINED how OX and ZZ+ could have given rise to OX blood type; but I'm still not sure if she's lying to me or not, y'know, Jerry? I mean I love her with all my heart and want to believe her, but she's always able to come up with some brilliant explanation for every suspicions I have had over the last 20 years!"
Jerry and Paul stopped talking momentarily when the waitress, a beautiful girl who could have worked at Hooters brought in 2 half-gallon size glasses full of beer, smiling all the way to their table...
Excellent
Excellent quality - as always. The author knows how to write a good story that is believable. Considering the amount of infidelity, there should always be a pre-nuptial agreement that includes a heavy penalty for someone who cheats. I would also suggest mandatory DNA testing of any kids. Lastly, I would suggest that if there is any question of wrong doing, as in this story, BOTH parties take a lie detector test. If someone fails they may take the test again, but 2 failures in 3 tries means they cheated.
Interesting Evidence of What Life Can Deal
However, the ending inclines that not only no consequence but his reward for a successful cucking is to be named daddy at long last. Hardly fair to him but such is life huh?
Well not really because as Paul Harvey says "now for the rest of the story" A successful cucking affects both parties in different ways. The cuckor feels - wow that wasn't so bad - I fooled the dimwit again but must be more careful on the next [which will surely come as her disrespect for him as a poor bastard will grow until she feels bulletproof again].
He will always regret what he did to his friend when each felt their responses were appropriate but now he knows differently. That will gnaw at him until he puts it to bed with an apology to his friend who then will say "well in the dawns early light it was apparent that somebody sure stained that bed with cum so if it wasn't me who then?
Can you spell sequel - Chapter too upcoming by the author or someone else who believes in "what goes around eventually comes around" which is life and reality.
The baby comment must be the authors set up for what will come eventually as it pointedly incited most readers feelings of unreasonable unfairness on her part.
Now to a prior comment by another writer who said "jeez its just a story - give it up with the emotions". Well aren't you something of a seer - but by whose appointment besides your own? When you become accomplished enough to evoke strong reasonable reader emotion as this story did then you will better understand your purpose and the nonsensicalness of that comment forevermore.
Author - you are appreciated for your imagination, talent and the time you spend for us [& you] as an entertainer - a story teller of some consequence [but not here - at least so far or consequentially].
With Very High Regard "in anticipation"
Poor Wimp!
Poor Wimp! Married to a cheating whore. Kinda makes one wonder who the father really is? I'll bet she'll have him eating cream pie before he wakes up to the smell.
Sad Ending but Realistic!
The only real problem with the story was the fact that if Paul was such good friends with Jerry he has to wonder after the drama dies down what is the truth. If Jerry showed up so drunk why didn't she ever tell Paul about his visit? She hated Jerry so why not give Paul another reason to stay away from him? If Jerry had woken up in strange beds before surely given his track record with women why would he think that he had scored with his wife? Also, Jerry's account about dining and getting to know her does not jive with Janet's account. What happens when Brian tell others about their fuck and rumors get back to Paul?
Bottom Line: If 2 weeks absence cause her to stray in her marriage she will cheat again. Janet has so little respect for Paul now it will only get worse as time go on. She has gotten away with it once so no doubt she will try again.
Despite the ending it does portray real life!
SleeplessinMD
Good story as usual, but...
I hate epilogues. They are sloppy storytelling. You tell the whole story from one POV, then switch at the end to tell another.
A better approach would have been to include something that made us wonder just as Paul is wondering. "Hey, wait a minute. Did she cheat or not?"
Whatever, it doesn't change the fact that you are one of the better storytellers here and generally have interesting 3D characters to act them out.
Ok....
It just seems to be a recent trend to let the husband think there is an affair and then get convinced there is not, only for the reader to find out there was.
It was well written, but not very creative. The characters were wooden and the ending was hard to buy. She seemed like the marriage might have been important, but not her husband. Just did not work.
Janet’s smugness!
As usual, I enjoyed your story, a valiant attempt to sow fresh seeds on somewhat well trodden ground.
I did feel a little contemptuous of the wife since on that, fateful, night Jerry had provided her with an alibi that would not only cover her tracks, that evening, but would also stand the test of time. It seemed as though she gloated when given the opportunity to finally test its validity.
My best regards
Almost missed this one
I missed this story when it was first posted but I am glad that I found it. I always enjoy stories by thecelt.
Disagreeing with the actions of the characters in this story doesn't take away from the fact that I enjoyed reading it. Jerry did violate the intent of step nine with his confession to Paul but we have to remember that Jerry wasn't very bright and may even have been slightly retarded. The wife's affair with Brian was an act of infidelity but it did occured at a time when Paul and his wife were separated. Things like that do happen in real life.
The author has no responsibility to make his characters behave the way we might want them to. IMO the authors job is to make the reader think and to generate some emotions from the readers. Looking at the comments below I would say that thecelt was successful in accomplishing that.
Good Story and Well Written. A few bones
to pick, however. You would think an up-and-coming professional (makes trips to Japan for future advancement) would be a bit smarter than this guy. And why does nearly every male character in these stories get drunk when faced with bad news or adversity? There are many of us out there who don't drink, or who don't drink much and would never do this (getting stoned drunk and dysfunctional to avoid facing one's problems). Instead, there's Literotica for escape! Seriously, though, I don't think there is a problem with paternity of the child, assuming only the one affair, since it clearly states that the affair was 2 years prior to the current sequence of events. I believe only elephant gestation lasts 24 months or thereabouts! Pretty good story.
K.K. has it right ...
even about the point of missing this story.
The only additional thing I probably would have put in in LW instead of Non-Erotic. No two people agree on what Loving Wives is supposed to be so it doesn't make any difference.
For what you were trying to do I thought it was quite well done. Interesting story line and refreshingly different.
Regards, Jack
nice
Good story. Perhaps sometime in the near future we will see a "Consequences - Janet" story from you. I love all of your "Consequences" stories and this Janet sure deserves one. Thanks for the story.
little0ne
Non-erotic vs. Loving Wives
Readers should know that the powers at Literotica will place a story in a category other than what the writer requests. When a Loving Wife story is shifted to Non-erotic, the views drop by thousands and the writer's work gets less notice. I don't know if thecelt submitted it for LW but it does deserve to be there. Having a story switched to Non-erotic is placing it in a writer's limbo.
A good story
I somehow guessed.. Very good, enjoyable read.. Very sad!
Interesting Story
The wife lucked out in this case. But life has a funny way of biting you on the ass when you least expect it.
Boyd
You made the wife a Bitch
Why? She was the Alpha character of the story. If when Hubby offered her a shopping spree, she'd turned it down, and said something along the line of "Honey, a night of dinner and dancing w/you is more than apology enough. I love you so much", then the story would have been thisclose to perfect. As it is, only you and "60 year old George" can like her.
Clever clever Celt
This is a relatively straight forward story except that Celt can be so clever and it sure shows here. So even though I have a comparatively low impression of people in the advertising business like the husband, I loved the story. RAG
agree with Shango
I don't mind being criticized by readers who don't like my comments , but in this case , I had not made any comments about this story, so I'm a little confused by Shango's criticism. As a matter of fact, now that I have read the story, I tend to agree with Shango. That's life, I guess.
60 year old George
“Sucker Paul”…butd even bigger sucker Janet
I have not read the previous feedbacks or the follow up story (yet), so my apologies if I replicate others comments… The first part though, I doubt that I would be replicating though; you’ll see why. Here’s a true personal story. I was drinking at Starbucks, talking to a relative when suddenly out of the blue I mentioned the unmentionable… Many years ago a close family member (sorry for the vagueness) had a child by another woman (yep, he is married), and many years ago, in my stupidity, I agreed to hear a personal confession by that person if I promised to keep it to myself (not knowing or suspecting the magnitude of the secret). The relative in front of me almost spilled the hot drink with a huge double take: “Say what?” I felt numb and dumb, but mostly I felt upset at the person who tricked me to that confession and at myself for being so stupid to begin with… So the secret was out even though I had no intention of ever mentioning it. I believe that the analogy is clear. People make plans and God or fate but mostly HUMAN NATURE laughs at them. Lies and reality don’t work well together in the long run, not because of ethical or religious assumptions, but because the way we are as human beings: in one respect just limited machines. We are hard wired and structured with conscious sub conscious parts over the latter we have only limited control and with the former we have growing memory problems as time passes by. We could never contradict ourselves or face incriminating evidence even if we tried if we “limited ourselves to telling the truth… On top of that we are never immune from the occasional slip pf tongue (see my story) and at times we even say something when we are excited or when we sleep. What else? We could be overheard – I could go on…like I said: limited machines in the form of human beings.
Not realizing any of the above, points to the wife’s immaturity. She could have had a chance with a one time confession, like she did with the readers. Again, not so much because of ethical reasons (although it should feel great not to walk around worrying if you are going to say something wrong any time in the future, or simply knowing that you don’t need anymore to lie by omission to your spouse). The real reason she should have confessed was simply practical. While there is no guarantee that the husband would have forgiven her one time cheating, without her voluntarily putting this episode on the marriage table, so to speak, the chances for its survival are pretty slim in my estimate. Here is why.
Either the cheating would be exposed by the increasing weight and cumulative chances of making a mistake only ONCE (that’s all it should take), or, and that is another fascinating fact, even when “succeeding” in hiding the cheating, it’s never a full success. Our bodies can’t lie. We broadcast our true feelings through body language and facial expressions. Married couples who know each others’ body and facial expressions all too well suspect hat something is wrong even if they don’t understand why. They may or may not realize that they get those non verbal body messages from the lying spouse. So, at best, there is this build up of awkward feelings of the ‘elephant in the bedroom’ type hanging like a cloud all the time: the unspoken secret for the cheater; the unspoken suspicions for the other spouse. Soon, out of the blue the questions and the depression settle in for the cheated spouse and the paradoxical contempt (the cheater would have wanted on one level to be caught and ‘get it over with’ plus the idea of being married to a trusting spouse is a constant irritant for a guilt ridden cheater. It is normally much easier to start projecting your self anger on your innocent spouse by finding endless new faults (“totally unrelated of course”). Here the cheater finishes circling him/herself. Now he /she has to lie to him’her self convincingly that in fact he/she is NOT blaming the wronged spouse for nothing simply so that he/she could have temporary respite from their own torturing guilt. Unsurprisingly, mostly, those marriages collapse from within.
My only quibble with the implied author of the story is that it seems like there is no ironic voice or any suggestion that the wife’s logic might be missing anything. So much so that I had to ask myself does the author buy into this character’s charade?
Revenge
Time for revenge on the biatch..
Another misuse of the 12 steps
I am usually a very big fan. However, I am disppointed
you didn't do your homework re: making amends.
The 9th step teaches to make the amend EXCEPT when
to do so would injure them or others. For shame
who's the father of the child?
She says she didn't cheat again, but who knows. Who's the father of the child? It always seems the grass is greener on the other side of the fence, until you get there. Always love your stories.
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