The original was a good story, and as you are just adding the final chapter to it all, I believe you did a bang-up job! congrats.
You stayed within the framework of the original author and made happen what we all believed should occur. A reconciliation. There is nothing wrong with it in this case, unlike what previous narrowminded commentors have suggested. The closing was a little long winded, and the gratuitous sex scene at the cabin wasn't necessary (if you were following the original author).
All in all, good work!
Unlike a lot of commentors I have no objection at all to a reconciliation story. I also don't feel like it was inappropriate in this case. I do have a problem with how everyone turned on him. Whether leaving Jenny was the right decision or not he most certainly did have reason and his friends and family went way beyond disagreeing with his decision they actively attacked him for it. And while it was not wrong or unfair for Jenny to say I am done apologizing her attacks on him and her disrespect for his feelings and position most certainly were.
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Anonymous06/24/14
I can see how
this could have played out like this in another situation, but not this one. Ted's pathology was way too ingrained for him to have dropped it so easily. Your story was doomed not so much by you as by the original which put so much effort into building this unshakable pathological personality.
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Anonymous07/04/14
Congrats you DID turn him into a wimp 1 star!
I wasn't surprised she fought back and threatened him after she started it all. Since you are a woman writer no surprise there. Facts are she did all of the things that people witnessed her doing in public and it was premeditated. She did those things it hurt her husband and his reputation and his businesses reputation. Most men would not trust her after all of that. I dont believe in the premise of your ending. He had seen enough. She did all of those things and she wasn't very sorry. He was a stud he could always get other women so I think he would have bailed. She burnt the bridge to the ground and he couldn't deal with it.
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Anonymous09/12/14
No question, wimp first-class.
Congratulations, Straw, you really gutted him. Truly a totally pathetic attempt by you!
Ted had some problems, but then so did Jenny. For middle aged, "educated" people they do not seem too smart or too wise. Their behavior was more like that of poor, uneducated, teenagers. Given Jenny's late age for getting married (38), and even later age for having children you might think she'd be a lot more cautious with her actions. It is also kind of weird that a driven woman would not have roped a man, if only for show by that point in her life. Ted on the other hand was emotionally stunted, but what do you expect from a workaholic who had never been married by the time he was in his late 30's -early 40's. These two people are emotional messes and the odds of them overcoming their problems are quite slim. Children only add another dimension of stress for sick people like these two.
I get the idea of happy endings, but you have to have the ingredients from the beginning to make that possible!
I find it hard to believe that Ted had never spoken about such a transformative period of his life. Maybe if Jenny knew about this chapter in his life she would have thought twice about trying to arouse jealousy in Ted!
I was going to suggest something that Ted brought up, to give her a second chance but no THIRD chance! That would ensure that he not be like his father.
I gave this story 2 stars because it was not very well written and not that much better than the original. For one thing, as I said about the other story, for him to let a man who worked for him, who he gave a job to and pulled him out of bad financial trouble, talk to him that way is not consistent with a strong man. Brother-in-law would have been back out on the street with his slut sister before he got back home. Then for the wife to get an attitude when he came to explain why he did what he did? Very inappropriate behavior. So, all told writer, you made the man more of a wimp than he was before.
Congratulations, you got 4 stars from me because the rating system glitched, but the story wasn't very good.
I think you played out the story to a logical and correct conclusion. The dialogue at the house was uneven with the arguments being somewhat uneven in strength for both. But their time in counseling and their insights of themselves made the argumentation realistic. Good deal of depth to the characters.
The key to your story was Ted's realization that he was not in control of a portion of his life, i.e., his fear of appearing to be a wimp. Ted was an alpha male, as Rob laid witness to in the meeting in the cabin. Part of the reason he became an alpha male was to not be like his father whom he perceived as weak. He claimed that power back when he decided to not let his stepmother control his actions. As he said; he was no longer going to be a victim.
Besides; I like happy endings. :o)
5 stars. I'll definately give some of your other stories a read.
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Anonymous12/04/14
Reasonable ending
but not for this story. There was too much wrong with his psyche, the scarring too extensive and too deep for him to so quickly, almost casually, set it aside because his wife gave him a little attitude. People so deeply damaged don't ever get over it. With a lot of help over a long period of time they can get better, but they never completely heal.
glad that it was brought out that the most important thing in a marriage is talking and listening. if you don't tell how u feel and don't listen to how your spouse feels you don't know how it is. don't forget what assume really means in a relationship makes and ass out of you and me. you don't know how someone feels or thinks and they don't know how you do unless u talk
It's the counseling at the end that makes this work
Ted had an either/or decision to make about going forward with a divorce and trying to work on a reconciliation, and neither decision would have made him a wimp. But without the counseling, the chances one decision to stop the divorce would have been enough to overcome his lifelong emotional issues in the long run were probably nil. If there is anything in this story that makes Ted not a wimp, it's his willingness to lay bare his entire psyche in counseling.
He was such a incredible wimp for not getting rid of her; she wife was a pathetic excuse for a wife. He should have divorced her and started over. Her excuses were noting short of total disrespect for her husband. Come on and get serious: he was wrong for not telling her about a surprise. She destroyed trust and respect in the relationship and once that is gone the relationship is over.
It was very good. This was better, but the tags sucked.
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Anonymous09/09/15
Well that was bad!
He WAS a wimp. What kind of spineless fool runs off instead of talking to his wife? This guy didn't deserve to be married. Sorry but this was a bad ending.
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Anonymous09/15/15
A good ending 5*
Decisions made by 2 adults and not adolescent teenagers or bitter divorcees which most annons seem to be. Well done.
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Anonymous09/21/15
RAAC wins again, he still has no proof all she had was an emotional affair
this whole thing was designed to force them together rather than to force her to tell the truth
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Anonymous11/16/15
BTB Crowd is hilarious
Glad to see the BTB guys are still offended. I guess the can't stand a story where the wife isn't a slut
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Anonymous11/22/15
she was
She was leading a guy on whom she knew expected to end up in bed with her.
To bad Jack had to do the old blame reversal.
It wasn't started by him, the evidence was there. She was doing the same thing countless cheaters had done before her.
Still divorce would be an over reaction.
She was trying to make him think she was interested in another man and succeeded.
First of all, this was a great ending to the story. Thanks for that.
Frankly, what she did, regardless of the reason, was almost unforgiveable. Having lunch regularly with a coworker of the opposite sex is one thing, but this guy was no coworker. And then there was dinner and dancing as well. It was good that your story had her finally recognize the true depth of her perceived betrayal.
There was one issue that I felt was not addressed though. Jenny never told Ted about any of her rendezvous with Jerry, so how was it ever going to make Ted jealous?
Thanks for a great finish!
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Anonymous01/04/16
Not a surprise from cuck_straw.
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Anonymous01/04/16
Well!!! The asshole of LIt is up early this AM!!!!
gave it a 5 The asshole again bashes the writer and I'm sure gave a 1 vote,. So I'm just offsetting the old man's vote and comment.
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Anonymous01/16/16
1*
Yep, totally a wimp! And sooner or later a cuck, too!
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Anonymous02/09/16
Its in the wrong category
Should be under "Wimps and Pussymen in Middle School." Can I say bullshit?
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Anonymous04/01/16
well done
Good job.
In real life, what she did would be called starting to date someone else, while married.
Even if no sex occurred that would be cheating.
So she was a cheater.
Maybe a guy could get past that, but how would one ever know if no sex occurred and trust her again?
What I get from this story is that it is OK for Ted's wife Jenny to date other men, if she's mad at Ted.
Jenny wasn't repentant at all, and this whole thing was her fault. I don't mind a good reconciliation story, but in this case, I didn't feel Jenny was sincere.
"Why is this such a big issue? There is something going on here that doesn't add up, something you're not telling me. You're just being too irrational about all this."
They were dating! Why does this and the original find it so hard to say these words?
"The very night you left me, I made up my mind that I wasn't going to be resentful of your job any more. I decided that a little bit of you was better than a lot of anyone else."
This reveals her true intention. She was not just trying to make him jealous, she was weighing her options.
And all this crap about perception? According to her she was trying to give her husband the perception that she was being courted, in order to make him jealous. So why is everyone so upset when he actually does get that perception?
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Anonymous08/27/16
wow
Just excellent writing.
I did get the feel from the story she was thinking about cheating for real?
After Rob confronted Ted in the original, Ted's stubbornness must have taken a major hit.
Well written. With style and dialog approximating the original. Kudus!
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Anonymous11/09/16
mike9698
Well the idiot Trump beat the corrupt aider, abetter and enabler. Just heard Tom Brokaw crying about his granddaughters being upset about things Trump said in distant past about females without mentioning his actions in treating females so well in his corporations.
Funny no one ever mentions how Bill Clinton uses females or how Hillary stands by him. She has even made numerous derogatory comments about females Bill has used.
Hillary seems to have always believed she was entitled to the presidency...like the American people owed her.
Now that her political career is over...hopefully..maybe she will grow some ovaries and divorce that serial philanderer
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Anonymous01/24/17
I Usually Don't Care For Reconciliation Stories
But Jenny was more of a stupid moron than she was a slutty whore. But what she failed to keep in mind..."There is no truth; There is only mass opinion." And people all around her, including her husband, brother and sister-in-law, believed her guilty of having a sexual affair with the criminal Jerry Craig. Only by being a wimp can Ted accept Jenny back into his marriage. Oh, and a side note...Never get involved with the F B I. They are notorious for dragging out investigations; and could care less if innocent people get hurt in the long drawn out process. The F B I serves no viable function. Ted should never have cooperated with the F B I. It almost cost him his business and his marriage.
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Anonymous02/03/17
R2d8805
Mike9698, keep your idiot political comments out of here. The story was well written and made no mention of Bill or Hillary or any other useless politician.
English
nice closing
The original was a good story, and as you are just adding the final chapter to it all, I believe you did a bang-up job! congrats.
You stayed within the framework of the original author and made happen what we all believed should occur. A reconciliation. There is nothing wrong with it in this case, unlike what previous narrowminded commentors have suggested. The closing was a little long winded, and the gratuitous sex scene at the cabin wasn't necessary (if you were following the original author).
All in all, good work!
Way overboard in my opinion.
Unlike a lot of commentors I have no objection at all to a reconciliation story. I also don't feel like it was inappropriate in this case. I do have a problem with how everyone turned on him. Whether leaving Jenny was the right decision or not he most certainly did have reason and his friends and family went way beyond disagreeing with his decision they actively attacked him for it. And while it was not wrong or unfair for Jenny to say I am done apologizing her attacks on him and her disrespect for his feelings and position most certainly were.
I can see how
this could have played out like this in another situation, but not this one. Ted's pathology was way too ingrained for him to have dropped it so easily. Your story was doomed not so much by you as by the original which put so much effort into building this unshakable pathological personality.
Congrats you DID turn him into a wimp 1 star!
I wasn't surprised she fought back and threatened him after she started it all. Since you are a woman writer no surprise there. Facts are she did all of the things that people witnessed her doing in public and it was premeditated. She did those things it hurt her husband and his reputation and his businesses reputation. Most men would not trust her after all of that. I dont believe in the premise of your ending. He had seen enough. She did all of those things and she wasn't very sorry. He was a stud he could always get other women so I think he would have bailed. She burnt the bridge to the ground and he couldn't deal with it.
No question, wimp first-class.
Congratulations, Straw, you really gutted him. Truly a totally pathetic attempt by you!
Hmmm
Ted had some problems, but then so did Jenny. For middle aged, "educated" people they do not seem too smart or too wise. Their behavior was more like that of poor, uneducated, teenagers. Given Jenny's late age for getting married (38), and even later age for having children you might think she'd be a lot more cautious with her actions. It is also kind of weird that a driven woman would not have roped a man, if only for show by that point in her life. Ted on the other hand was emotionally stunted, but what do you expect from a workaholic who had never been married by the time he was in his late 30's -early 40's. These two people are emotional messes and the odds of them overcoming their problems are quite slim. Children only add another dimension of stress for sick people like these two.
I get the idea of happy endings, but you have to have the ingredients from the beginning to make that possible!
forget the latest Anons
Really good tale. Realistic.
Random Thoughts
I find it hard to believe that Ted had never spoken about such a transformative period of his life. Maybe if Jenny knew about this chapter in his life she would have thought twice about trying to arouse jealousy in Ted!
I was going to suggest something that Ted brought up, to give her a second chance but no THIRD chance! That would ensure that he not be like his father.
Good ending...
A good ending.., Good story...Both had their reasons but talking is always a good way to solve things...
rating system
I gave this story 2 stars because it was not very well written and not that much better than the original. For one thing, as I said about the other story, for him to let a man who worked for him, who he gave a job to and pulled him out of bad financial trouble, talk to him that way is not consistent with a strong man. Brother-in-law would have been back out on the street with his slut sister before he got back home. Then for the wife to get an attitude when he came to explain why he did what he did? Very inappropriate behavior. So, all told writer, you made the man more of a wimp than he was before.
Congratulations, you got 4 stars from me because the rating system glitched, but the story wasn't very good.
I don't know,,,,,,,,
it shure seemed like you demasculated the poor guy,,, one star.
Excellent story - best of the sequels
I think you played out the story to a logical and correct conclusion. The dialogue at the house was uneven with the arguments being somewhat uneven in strength for both. But their time in counseling and their insights of themselves made the argumentation realistic. Good deal of depth to the characters.
The key to your story was Ted's realization that he was not in control of a portion of his life, i.e., his fear of appearing to be a wimp. Ted was an alpha male, as Rob laid witness to in the meeting in the cabin. Part of the reason he became an alpha male was to not be like his father whom he perceived as weak. He claimed that power back when he decided to not let his stepmother control his actions. As he said; he was no longer going to be a victim.
Besides; I like happy endings. :o)
5 stars. I'll definately give some of your other stories a read.
Reasonable ending
but not for this story. There was too much wrong with his psyche, the scarring too extensive and too deep for him to so quickly, almost casually, set it aside because his wife gave him a little attitude. People so deeply damaged don't ever get over it. With a lot of help over a long period of time they can get better, but they never completely heal.
good ending
glad that it was brought out that the most important thing in a marriage is talking and listening. if you don't tell how u feel and don't listen to how your spouse feels you don't know how it is. don't forget what assume really means in a relationship makes and ass out of you and me. you don't know how someone feels or thinks and they don't know how you do unless u talk
It's the counseling at the end that makes this work
Ted had an either/or decision to make about going forward with a divorce and trying to work on a reconciliation, and neither decision would have made him a wimp. But without the counseling, the chances one decision to stop the divorce would have been enough to overcome his lifelong emotional issues in the long run were probably nil. If there is anything in this story that makes Ted not a wimp, it's his willingness to lay bare his entire psyche in counseling.
LOL
TO all the RACC's just how much of other peoples cum do you drink out of your partner every day
Well, yes, he IS a wimp.
Just a typical glorification of a cheating wife.
a serious wimp
He was such a incredible wimp for not getting rid of her; she wife was a pathetic excuse for a wife. He should have divorced her and started over. Her excuses were noting short of total disrespect for her husband. Come on and get serious: he was wrong for not telling her about a surprise. She destroyed trust and respect in the relationship and once that is gone the relationship is over.
I read the other sequel first.
It was very good. This was better, but the tags sucked.
Well that was bad!
He WAS a wimp. What kind of spineless fool runs off instead of talking to his wife? This guy didn't deserve to be married. Sorry but this was a bad ending.
A good ending 5*
Decisions made by 2 adults and not adolescent teenagers or bitter divorcees which most annons seem to be. Well done.
RAAC wins again, he still has no proof all she had was an emotional affair
this whole thing was designed to force them together rather than to force her to tell the truth
BTB Crowd is hilarious
Glad to see the BTB guys are still offended. I guess the can't stand a story where the wife isn't a slut
she was
She was leading a guy on whom she knew expected to end up in bed with her.
To bad Jack had to do the old blame reversal.
It wasn't started by him, the evidence was there. She was doing the same thing countless cheaters had done before her.
Still divorce would be an over reaction.
She was trying to make him think she was interested in another man and succeeded.
Great Finish
First of all, this was a great ending to the story. Thanks for that.
Frankly, what she did, regardless of the reason, was almost unforgiveable. Having lunch regularly with a coworker of the opposite sex is one thing, but this guy was no coworker. And then there was dinner and dancing as well. It was good that your story had her finally recognize the true depth of her perceived betrayal.
There was one issue that I felt was not addressed though. Jenny never told Ted about any of her rendezvous with Jerry, so how was it ever going to make Ted jealous?
Thanks for a great finish!
Not a surprise from cuck_straw.
Well!!! The asshole of LIt is up early this AM!!!!
gave it a 5 The asshole again bashes the writer and I'm sure gave a 1 vote,. So I'm just offsetting the old man's vote and comment.
1*
Yep, totally a wimp! And sooner or later a cuck, too!
Its in the wrong category
Should be under "Wimps and Pussymen in Middle School." Can I say bullshit?
well done
Good job.
In real life, what she did would be called starting to date someone else, while married.
Even if no sex occurred that would be cheating.
So she was a cheater.
Maybe a guy could get past that, but how would one ever know if no sex occurred and trust her again?
Pathetic sissy wimp crap
Snuff said!
The moral of the story
What I get from this story is that it is OK for Ted's wife Jenny to date other men, if she's mad at Ted.
Jenny wasn't repentant at all, and this whole thing was her fault. I don't mind a good reconciliation story, but in this case, I didn't feel Jenny was sincere.
Does anybody get it?
"Why is this such a big issue? There is something going on here that doesn't add up, something you're not telling me. You're just being too irrational about all this."
They were dating! Why does this and the original find it so hard to say these words?
"The very night you left me, I made up my mind that I wasn't going to be resentful of your job any more. I decided that a little bit of you was better than a lot of anyone else."
This reveals her true intention. She was not just trying to make him jealous, she was weighing her options.
And all this crap about perception? According to her she was trying to give her husband the perception that she was being courted, in order to make him jealous. So why is everyone so upset when he actually does get that perception?
wow
Just excellent writing.
I did get the feel from the story she was thinking about cheating for real?
Still a good ending. Love a happy ending.
4*
Would have been 5 if he spanked her stupid ass first.
At least she finally pulled her brain out of her asshole and figured out that she betrayed her husband! Duh!
Good reading!
A great sequel
After Rob confronted Ted in the original, Ted's stubbornness must have taken a major hit.
Well written. With style and dialog approximating the original. Kudus!
mike9698
Well the idiot Trump beat the corrupt aider, abetter and enabler. Just heard Tom Brokaw crying about his granddaughters being upset about things Trump said in distant past about females without mentioning his actions in treating females so well in his corporations.
Funny no one ever mentions how Bill Clinton uses females or how Hillary stands by him. She has even made numerous derogatory comments about females Bill has used.
Hillary seems to have always believed she was entitled to the presidency...like the American people owed her.
Now that her political career is over...hopefully..maybe she will grow some ovaries and divorce that serial philanderer
I Usually Don't Care For Reconciliation Stories
But Jenny was more of a stupid moron than she was a slutty whore. But what she failed to keep in mind..."There is no truth; There is only mass opinion." And people all around her, including her husband, brother and sister-in-law, believed her guilty of having a sexual affair with the criminal Jerry Craig. Only by being a wimp can Ted accept Jenny back into his marriage. Oh, and a side note...Never get involved with the F B I. They are notorious for dragging out investigations; and could care less if innocent people get hurt in the long drawn out process. The F B I serves no viable function. Ted should never have cooperated with the F B I. It almost cost him his business and his marriage.
R2d8805
Mike9698, keep your idiot political comments out of here. The story was well written and made no mention of Bill or Hillary or any other useless politician.
Should not have tried.
The rotten start could not be fixed.
Yes, Ted you are a wimp.
He's a wimp.
Yep, he's a wimp. Take it to the bank.
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