All Comments on 'Dorm Visit'

The action needed a little proofreading. Who is doing what to which opening changes from sentence to sentence. Otherwise, it's a fine stroke story.

What a great story, the wife may have got a shock at the extra 'meat' on offer but she certainly did you proud with it.

You need to settle down a bit when you write these stroke stories. You have a great imagination and it is easy to tell that you love writing about Tracey but you need some more plot development and to slow down the action a bit during the sex. You jump from position to position and from charactor to charactor rather recklessly. If you can get a handle on this you will be a great stroke story author.

As for the mutant who wrote the prvious comment, I hope you take his advice and delete his comment. He's an idiotic troll and deserves what he gets.

Mut have been written by an uptight person.