All Comments on 'Journeys end'

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champagne1982champagne1982almost 17 years ago
I was

Hoping for a sonnet. This is OK, but a pale substitute for the slightly more challenging formula of a sonnet. You have rhythm and rhyme mastered. Why not experiment with different metre and trickier rhyme types? Yes, there are other rhymes out there: near rhyme, sight rhyme, buried rhyme for instance. End rhymes when coupled with steady metre can be boring for the reader and it would be a smart move for you to consider maturing your voice into something more sophisticated.

Thanks for sharing.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
From the heart,

It whispers to my heart the grief and sorrow my life has become since I lost my true love-thank you

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