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by champagne198205/26/07

I was

Hoping for a sonnet. This is OK, but a pale substitute for the slightly more challenging formula of a sonnet. You have rhythm and rhyme mastered. Why not experiment with different metre and trickier rhyme types? Yes, there are other rhymes out there: near rhyme, sight rhyme, buried rhyme for instance. End rhymes when coupled with steady metre can be boring for the reader and it would be a smart move for you to consider maturing your voice into something more sophisticated.

Thanks for sharing.

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by Anonymous05/31/07

From the heart,

It whispers to my heart the grief and sorrow my life has become since I lost my true love-thank you

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