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I Caught The Two

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by Anonymous05/31/07

Wishful thinking

The English language has withstood a lot. However, you may have given it an early death. Editors are available to help you with the construction of a sentence, spelling (absolutely awful), syntax and in general to make a story readable. Go back and seek help.

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by Anonymous06/01/07

Hastily written

As said elsewhere, your use of English and lack of editing leave much to be desired. It sounds like you wrote it in an hour. The stories could have been stretched and separated, the first 3sum and the second. You fail to accurately describe the actions or even mention who "Mario" is.

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by Anonymous04/23/11

Please

There are hundreds of proof readers and editor who would gladly help you polish your stories here on the site, Please make use of them.

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