I like the story so far, but you definately need to finish this!!! This could be a really great story about a brother and sister in love and lust!!! Carry on with it babe!
Good writing!! Keep up the good work!
by
Anonymous06/02/07
OK
Ok ..so you're good at getting everyone's attention well , you have it . Now the tough part is can you keep our attention or do you lose it . So far ..so good .
by
06/10/07
Perfect Start
Love it so far - hope it stays that way or gets better.
English
What a tease!
Great story so far, but this had better have a sequel! Hope you can keep it realistic. Great interaction between the pair so far.
Roll on Part Deux!
wasted
It's well written but come on, atleast finish a page before you submit. This was a waste of time reading.
Damn good start !!!!
I like the story so far, but you definately need to finish this!!! This could be a really great story about a brother and sister in love and lust!!! Carry on with it babe!
Good writing!! Keep up the good work!
OK
Ok ..so you're good at getting everyone's attention well , you have it . Now the tough part is can you keep our attention or do you lose it . So far ..so good .
Perfect Start
Love it so far - hope it stays that way or gets better.
Glad I found your story . . .
. . . after the second chapter was already written. I don't think I could have waited otherwise. You really drew me into the story. Very nicely done!
Nice to see someone take the time to build the story instead of just writing a F___ story!
love tha plot lose the 2nd grade talk yo, who the hell adds thingy in a story
Keep it going mate
I think it's a good start. It reads well and has a good pace. The slight British tone is good too.
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