This has to be my favourite of your stories. You wrote their uncertainties, their fantasies, their frustrations so well. Each character was just as they should be, and their metamorphasis at the end was almost perfect.
Millie
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Anonymous05/31/15
Well written, great reality story line and damn if that kind of thing doesn't happen to folks!
This could go 1-2 more chapters easily, as well paced as the initial chapter was it'd not be a stretch and it'd be enjoyable to picture it while reading it. Gotta love some simple happiness with some hope of erotic sex thrown in!
BRAVO!!
English
I really liked it!
Great story!! You should continue it at least one more chapter! I love the romance aspect and the hot sex aspect! Great writing!
fantasy?
Was it just another fantasy for both??? or reality???
no more chapters, just leave us to wonder
it felt too clinical
not enough emotion, it was too clinical, too 3rd person "historical". for me the dialog was flat. it seemed like a ok story.
I loved this
This has to be my favourite of your stories. You wrote their uncertainties, their fantasies, their frustrations so well. Each character was just as they should be, and their metamorphasis at the end was almost perfect.
Millie
Well written, great reality story line and damn if that kind of thing doesn't happen to folks!
This could go 1-2 more chapters easily, as well paced as the initial chapter was it'd not be a stretch and it'd be enjoyable to picture it while reading it. Gotta love some simple happiness with some hope of erotic sex thrown in!
BRAVO!!
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