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Thgere wil be a second chapter, one hopes.
We need a second chapter or more so we can find why he left and why he came back.
Nice little mystery.
Well written with a hanging ending. Will there be more?
Where's the people?
I think you need some personality in this story. There was nothing to draw the reader into the story. You could be a good writer if you worked at it. Bad effort. I need a connection to the characters, I could not find one when they are called the man and the woman. Don't be so LAZY on any future stories, and use Literocia's free Editors.
DRS
Huh?
I guess I missed the point. Not much else to add.
Okay?!?
I too seem to have missed a point here. Pretty well written, but where is it going?
should this be in another category?
If "he" is a masseuse, "he" is a woman.
unless we are talking about a cross dresser who goes both ways.
????
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