by Harddaysknight
HDK,
You are a twisted man I can tell, but I do like the way you think. This story was fun AND it had a bit of a moral. Good stuff...as usual.
Great presentation of the other side of coin. Thanks again for writing.
Definitely one of your best. <BR>
You seem to keep improving with 'age'!<BR>
Can't wait for your next one.
HDK:<p>You have truly become the master of the "short" short story. I applaud the dialog and relish the ending.
these one-liner stories are such a waste of time. these "stories" have as much impact in our psyche as a "smart, sophisticated" Jerry Seinfeld joke. No sooner as they enter one ear, the other ear's all winded...
You really do get better with every story. I can't offer criticism, but I can certainly offer praise and my sincere thanks for another great effort!!!
Sue tells Bill: "You can bet your ass that you won't be the man I choose, so just butt out!".
Why would she have to tell her brother that? Doesn't it go without saying that she wouldn't fuck her brother . . . unless of course, they are a kinky family.
Loved it- And at the end where she thanks her brother, That was perfect.
Once again you have re-invented the genre. I have read and enjoyed everything you have written.
Thank you.
CW
Here is this great story,lots of humor. And then we have a correspondent who can only comment on the one little glith in the story. HDK, your a bad boy!! Hey, keep sending your stories,I can deal with your horrendous mistakes. don
HDK,
One of the Loving Wives stories with that's different. Well written as I expected, and a rather neat ending. Thank You. Ronnie W.
your name on the piece my day suddenly got brighter (of course the sun coming up helped,,,,). Thanks for giving us another treat!
My, oh my! That was funny as hell. You continue to amaze with your wit, and that little twist in your thinking. Well, well done!
Tim C.
like most woman with nothing on their minds, she wanted to have and cake and eat it to. Suddenly someone came along who enlightened her, whats good for the goose is good for the gander. She would be a woman with children, with no real means of support, who is labeled a cheating slut and adultress out looking for a new provided so she can go out and play. And in the mean time, a real woman, could take her place almost immediately and provide her bushand with what she was failing to provide him, and even marry him if he wanted. The majority of women described in most of these stories, this one at least had an IQ high enough to understand when it was tattooed on her forehead, think what they have is so special that they can do anything they want and the husband has to accept it because they are special. Actually in most cases the husbands can do much better, especially if they have a job, and the women are showing that in addition to a very low IQ they have no self esteem, morals, or ethics. In other words, they are real sluts, just plain trash.
As always, for me it's a better day when I start it with an HDK story. I really liked the turn around - getting all the arguements out BEFORE the act.
Are stories where the only point is revealed in the last line called that in the US? They're intended to be funny. I skipped to the end of this piece quite soon and decided not to bother with the rest.
I often rate HDK high but not this one.
She announces her intentions, he tells her brother, friends and spouses get involved, she sees what's comming and chickens out. Prevention is a great thing, any proactive approch is better than what would happen otherwise. HDK is truly talented.
gone in your face.<p>
This is another good day as HDK makes me smile and then laugh out loud. Man you are a twisted man with a great sense of humor. Your outlook on life has got to be one of pure optimism and with a smile for the world to see.<p>Now wait for the people who take all this and make it into a serious piece to debate whether she was stupid and he a wimp and why they shouldn’t go ahead and swing together. I just enjoyed the great tongue-in-cheek and will read it again this evening.<p>Seriously, thank you for brightening my day and all the wonderful effort you take to give us these wonderful fantasies.<p>PT
Can anybody give me Jerry's phone number? I need to remodel my bathroom and build a deck...LMAO
Great little story! Reading HDK stories is one of my guilty pleasures and he always leaves me wanting more. Thanks, author.
That story sucked. You should write stories for Womans World or something. I come to this site to read a good fuck story. I read yours in hopes it would turn into that. Well it didn't. So please don't post any more of these silly ass stories. Maybe you should try writing a cook book, they have about the same amount of sex in them as your story.
That's a brilliant story about all those who are planning to spice up thier lives after "so called careful thoughts". You do not need different violins to elicit different tunes, you need to know and enjoy the music. Great work, just keep it UP!
WOW was that fucking perfect... 100? no try like 150 or 200...
... don't write cook books. ;-) Give us more of your fancifull stories. Thanks from a german fan.
<p><b>Nucleus</p></b>
Coming from you, I'd read it. thanx for the shining star in what has become a blackhole on Literotica. LYG
This is how a man should act. I wish other authors on Literotica would take note.
I liked the twist at the end (which gives Bill legitimacy in his treatment of Sue). I think, though, IRL Sue would have already been too far down the road and would already have her affair in progress. Excellent characterization of the effects of infidelity upon either sex, though.
WE,the male readers can always count on HDN to stick up for the rights of the downtroden husband.This is very well written and does look at both sides,And unlike some other authors I could name,has an ending.
<p>This was one of your better stories guy</p>
<p>So what if it wasn't dripping sex. If that is your sole reason for giving it a bad rating and your outlet for sex is reading about it, you might want to find a new outlet for it (^_^)</p>
<p>But I laughed my butt off during the opening, and I was kinda curious why she listened as long as she did. Until the end that was. Fantastic. </p>
-Risq
Wow after seeing how many comments there were I was eager to read the story. All I can say is very well done. The twist at the end pretty much answered a question I had when reading the story.(How could the husband's friend be yelling at his wife.) Good job and I'll be checking into more of your stories.
I've read many of your stories and liked most, but thus far this one is at least one of your pinnacles (if not THE pinnacle'). I find I like many of the 'Loving Wife' stories, but have little use for the 'willing' cuckold stories or swinging stories. It was a pleasure to see this actually verbalized this way.....and the 'brother twist' was something I never saw coming (and I'm often able to see these twists in advance). BTW: are you considering getting past the Beatles?....may try the Stones...c'mon, think what you could do with "Satisfaction"!
This story is creative, imaginative yet realistic, funny yet very sobering, and, above all, well written. For years I've felt that Literotica has created a misconception just by calling this genre of story a "Loving Wives" tale. The women in most of these stories are anything but loving and definitely not representative of what a wife should be. In fact, Literotica is doing a disservice to good wives who truly love their husbands by creating this misconception. And, on the other hand, the men in most of the stories have no character, guts, balls or common sense. As often stated, they are nothing more than wimps waiting to be cuckolded and humiliated. "Loving Wives" should be called "Slut Wives," and they should create a whole new section for "Wimpy Ding-a-lings."
HDK, you dog you! You've done it again, I don't how, but you keep outdoing yourself. Great story, quick read, funny, yet serious, & the twist at the end. Altho, I sorta had a hunch that your main guy had some kind of relationship w/ Sue, to be talking to her that way at the outset, but the ending still got me. Thanks for a great read, & keep them coming.
Great story. Well written. Keep up the good work. I am, however, left to wonder whether I would be as forgiving as the husband...
Story just about covers it. All I wanted to say will sign of as anonymous like some other small dick wankers who put negative comments and have no balls
But that's what everyone expects from the master, isn't it? Kudos, HDK.
One guy complained about the brother - as if, especially on Lit, incest never happens! LOL<BR>
Bloody hell, it's the second most popular genre with almost 14,000 stories - a lot more than LW's 10,600<BR>
AND, I thought it made a lot more sense that it was her brother talking to her like that.<BR>
<B>AND, </B>another thing, with seven brothers, all younger than I, I can tell ya I've used similar words to that woman in my younger days when one of the dorks made 'unsavoury' comments about what I may do at a party or on a date! "If I do, it won't be YOU!!", passed my lips a few times in the 60s...
What's a brother for? I think he could have talked all month with Sue and never even put doubt in her mind BUT Karen, now, THAT thought of Karen fucking her husband's brains out made her attenae shoot sky high and her brain do a really fast 180.
Another great story!
IT had it all, suspense, drama, sex...it moved me. Seriously, good to see a story where the woman see their mistakes BEFORE they make it. Good to see a guy stand up and say enough of this shit! Hit the marker on all counts.
Did you write all these "great story!" comments yourself?
I thought it was crap!
There are two types of worrying comments: the first is the common, which contain the usual plethora of fowl language; borderline psychotic-paranoid mess gages, the latest novelty of which is: HDK somehow creates all the feedback himself; and so on and so forth. I am not worried about those readers. What worrying me is the eroding effect of such verbal pollution over time. For that matter the aficionados of the best in lit should steady our efforts at providing the antidotes to the above mentioned mental Flu. <P>
The second worry is of the opposite nature, less severe and much more rare. When an author reaches a certain level of achievement, he/she can periodically get the equivalent of the horn of plenty of well deserved compliments keep it on wishes and you’ve over done yourself again marks. The latter in particular worries me a bit. I can imagine how it turn into a stressful trend. (I can imagine many authors wishing on themselves that kind of stress). All I am saying, HDK take those well earned responses in, then take a deep breath and…forget them. Just write what feels right to you – not what you might imagine that is becoming a popular trend with the readers. <P>
Not that you seem to be of much need of any advice. I just thought it might be a good idea to take the wisdom of the brother and engage in some preemptive prevention intervention. OK, and here the comparison ends. <P>
I don’t think I have mentioned that the story was great. It was great. Thank you.
The talent and subject matter are most certainly a large plus but it is the edge and humor which really drive your appreciation.<P>
I for one am about to write a few more songs for the Beatles to sing to help push you along.<P>
This is surely one of your best if not the best. You make your points in a pointed but clear way usually without offending 99.9% of the semi-normal readership. Respect is appealing and a necessary part of life for humans - well most of us.<P>
You deliver and amuse and provoke and entertain and brighten this site for me and most. How much more can a writer want in Pa.? Lakes - Mountains - Rivers - Elephants - Great Neighbors - and most of all an appreciative audience. [OH - A ? please. Why was Kolkore talking about chickens, ducks and flying foul fowl things?] <P>
With Very High Regard
Your words of wisdom charmed me until I arrived at your last comment question/ comment which seemed to be related to my comment! I made the mental equivalent of a summersault, and relocated back to view my comment to find those lively allusions to any live stock which might have landed into my comment unbeknown to me! But could find none… I was wondering, was the reader alluding to the ‘horn of plenty’? Was the reader finding any fault with this fine expression, or perhaps he/she is not familiar with it?
maybe that is what our astute commentator was alluding to?
I suppose you meant to write foul, perchance?
Of course you are right! Now look who is astute and who is all fouled. Thank you for removing a feather from my eyes.
best friend/brother gave good advice and was not interested in having sex with his sister/best friend's wife? And the wife finally came to her senses and decided not to betray her husbands love? Have I somehow gone to another site? Where infidelity isn't erotic or happy or any of that other bullshit that lesser authors think it is?
Of course not, I have just read another great story by one of the best authors on this site.
I really think that the wife about lost everything because she had everything right in front of her.
I loved it , i didnt see the brother/sister conection coming but that just made it better.
...she'll start to feel that itch and not mentioned that it needs scratched. It would make a great follow up story.Great twist on the sibling connection!
Did the commentator from the great white north read the same story I just read? No wonder Canada's still America's unwanted province!Eh?Or no?Pistolpackinpete
She should have cuckolded poor Jerry and found out she is nothing but a slut. After she spends the weekend getting her ass screwed off she comes home and shows Jerry her stretched out pussy and belittles Jerry for not being enough man to keep her home.She tells him that she is going back to her new lover for a whole week next time.
what a great story! Sounds like Jerry would have been better off with Karen though.
Anon in USa is so typical of an ugly American. Such an arrogant attitude. I have many American friends but he is doing nothing to help their cause. Sorry to get political on this site but that comment really pissed me ( and probably every other Canadian) off. Story was really good. Great ending. Jim in Alberta. ps Since when did the USA have provinces?
The reality isn't always evident until pointed out no holds barred, by a third person.
One of the best stories I have read.
I guess if there were no Bill, there would have been a divorce.
We all need friends like Bill!
Well written. Often, a story gets criticized because it's not realistic. Well, this one isn't, but it doesn't matter. It is tongue in cheek and humorous. It points out why immature people have affairs, and why they shouldn't. A husband or wife of 15 years will never match the excitement of someone new. Of course after 3 months the spouse will find out that the someone new has become old hat, and can't match the depth of the old relationship. The old relationship, however, will be gone.
Laughed 'til I cried. Great! Kept waiting for the other shoe to drop, and was NOT disappointed. O. Henry is proud of you.
Great story and a fun read.. Keep them coming! You don't happen to have Karen's phone number, do you?
I don't what perfect is yet so I can't say that but DAMN NICE!!!
You handled her in a most effective and controlled fashion and then the girls laid her out flat, one two punch classic.
Creative to a fault - I too cackled til' it hurt then had to get control to finish -
Nice story. The message was sent in a very unconventional (and highly fantastical) manner, but it had a profound affect on all parties.
This story should be printed in women's magazines all over the western world! Sort of a strong warning about brain farts.
I'm thinking of sending it to the wives of the guys on my bowling team and the women my wife works with at the bank.
Thanks!
A serious point made in a fun way. The brother/sister surprise at the end was enjoyable as well.
Jerry should just let her do whatever with whomever, and he gets the better deal with Karen. Have a bj and how many other things, with no concern for any thoughts of Sue's actions, real or imagined. And he can be the captain of the team, too! Sue can, well who cares.
I'm still playing catch up with many of the stories on Literotica, and this is one story I'm glad I read. The twist, and I love a good twist (the dance, too), was nicely done. Overall, it was a great read, both humorous and thoughtful.
An well-written story with a neat twist at the end. Contains a lot of food for thought about the consequences of cuckolding/cheating.
and it is still one of my favorites "Hey Sue, is the cuck there?" - totally frickin hilarious
Hey.... another of your stories I have thoroughly enjoyed. Every couple should be made to read this before they get married. My wife cheated with her wealthy boss and I stupidly took her back for the sake of the kids......that was a mistake. Too late now for me.
Thankyou
Very well done. You expressed my thoughts as well as the thoughts of any REAL man. At least in my view.
Thanks again.
HAHAHAHA - made my day.
What you said and did to your sister was humorous and funny - without all the usual nastiness - loved it.
Write some more stories like that - terrific - still laughing here...
It is pitty that is not like that in rial life....
... should have been 2 people don't talk like that.
of course the cuckolds gave it 3, but who gives a shit, they are cuckolds!
Cpete has an excellent comment at SS06's excellent story the "Hindsite". A part of it: A decade ago some university/goverment stat study found females age 35+ in North America had a higher chance of being on a hijacked airplane then finding a male mate in a relationship that would last a decade.
This tale reminded me of the old joke of the lady who spent her life looking for the "perfect" man. She did find the "Perfect man".....however he was looking for the "Perfect" lady.
Another Dr. Seuss offering?
A new title could be "Reason not to cheat on your husband."
I hate cheating wives and in the end there were none. Yay.
to get someones attention to the facts. TK U MLJ LV NV
Really didn't even think this one needed a last twist, so I didn't see it coming. Great twist for a great phone-based story!
On lit that I've read more than once. Occasionally I'll read one twice. This is the third time for this story, I love it.
Thanks.
Just had to comment and lead off your second hundred..
I am, however, still pissed at Bill. I was so, so close to fucking Sue. Dumb cunt, telling her husband before. Glad she didn't give me up--I'd be dead. Just kidding.
Thanks again, tom anon
Women think all men think with their small head. This story proves women aren't all the little angels they claim to be. Sue and any woman like her are dumb bitches!
I found this story very clever and amusing!
Great job! 5 stats from me!