Love Found Ch. 02

Cute!

I really like this story. The only thing is the intimate moments between them could be drawn out a bit longer. Also to make it feel a bit more real, I wouldn't have them call each other my love and my darling all the time...sometimes that's nice but not all the time. I know this was a fantasy, and sometimes you just need to get it out. But you have a lot of talent, and you could totally write a long story, with the same basic plot line, but draw it out longer. Anyways great writing!

Go for the Gold

I am considerably older than you, but your depth of feeling surprised and delighted me. Your writing is very good, but it could be great. You are so young, go for the gold! Take a look at the sentence structure of the Harry Potter series, and Hobbit, not for the story but the sentence construction. I hope to see you published and making a fortune someday! What you learn is forever

Great Story

Great story hope there will be a 3rd part and more. Keep up the good work.

Hi, read some of your work.It's pretty good.