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like where this is going
I like Nic's smartass-y edge that he has and how you are now exposing Allie's vulnerabilities.
Yeah!
I can tell when these two finally get together, it's gonna be scorchin'! Great so far, T! :)
Hot!
Loved this chapter. Really enjoyed the chemistry between the two.
Great
Yet another romance story told in 100 parts of half a page length... daniellekitten should go to hell for propagating this trend.
Can y'all do me a favor
and spare me if you're going to slam me or my chapters for being brief. This was my first submission, and I was already writing chapter 7 by the time the site posted Chapter 1. I really didn't think it was gonna be that short when it posted.
Feel free to slam the content, my characters, or the plotline, but I'm tired of hearing about this already, and there's gonna be 3 more chapters on the shorter side. I realize it, it's my bad, can we move on please.
Or, if you need someone to blame, blame Literotica for accepting submissions as short as 750 words.
A very nice story
with very good character development. I like these people, and I'm looking forward to seeing them get together.
Nice continuation.
And I'm sorry that you've gotten slammed by someone who was pissed at me. Some people have no couth or imagination and I apologize for that. I like your characters also, they are interesting people. I can't wait to read more.
moving along nicely
I rather like the short chapters. That way I don't have to spend *ages* in front of the screen :) . The story is moving along nicely and the cut-off points are well-chosen, they don't feel forced. The characters are well-drawn and believable, and, equally important, I *want to know* what's going to happen to them. Good writing style, and it doesn't look like a first-time work. Keep up the good work!
Great at ANY length
New writers typically have a lot of problems to work through before they have their acts together (for most of us, writing is doggone hard work!). And a lot of the posters LOVE to find a nit to complain about. Yet the worst criticism anyone can dish out is that the chapters are short? Your characters seem like folks I would like to know. They talk like real people. They have realistic thoughts. You put these characters into an interesting situation. I plan to read the additional chapters as you post them, whether they are one page long or 40 pages long. Just keep up the great work!
EXCELLENT job for a first submission
actually for any submission. :) You're doing a great job, and I can't wait to get to the next chapter! Ignore the people who are complaining about short chapters. A little suspense is good for the soul; it builds character. *grin*
The flow of your story is very smooth, as is the cut off. Your timing is great; there are very few (if any) noticeable spelling or grammatical errors to distract from the story. Keep up the good work!
Loved it!
Can\\\'t wait to read the next chapter.
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