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Wonderful !
It is really great to read a story that has you believing every word written .It didn't go overboard with wild descriptions or language and that is talent . Well done .
Wanting more...
This story was sweet, to the point, and a great read... however it left me filled, but not satisfied. 4/5 stars for that!
Missing that extra spice
This story was sweet and too the point. It filled me up, but didn't make me satisfied. I couldn't help but think it was missing something...
woderful
It turned me on......
Nice postcard
when there's a category for shortest short story of the year, u have my vote
so-so
no real background and no end equals a waste of time. delete and rewrite adding background about them growing up and why he was out there in the first place. then add a proper ending telling us how they keep getting together and if the parents find out. half a story (and this was less than half ) is worse than no story at all.
Crap
Total load of rubbish a monkey could do better
It Got Me Hard.....
Those who say it's crap or not good enough are full of shit!!!!! It's a good read and very hot....like someone else said.....you believe every word.....as if it has really happened.
It's very natural.......10 out of 10 for me.
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