Jackson Hewitt heh. The story was a little too short for my liking, but pretty darn good.
Great story, original and and very well written. It gave me a good laugh. I agree with the previous comment, it was a little short. I would have liked the character of the loans officer 'fleshed' out a bit. However, well done, it was still worth top marks.
I liked this a lot, well written and a tale with a difference. I agree with the others that there is room for some more here, I want to know about Jackson and the blonde girl!!
I liked the story...but the names Revy and Rebecca seem to remind of a particular awesome sexy character from Black Lagoon named Revy (Rebecca her true name).
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