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I love this story!
GEnie sotries are my favourite, ever!!
Keep on going please!!
Great Genie Story
I can hardly wait for the next chapter, Thank You
Sheesh
Honestly, it's *way* too derivative of Joe Brolly's story. Many of the events, conversations, and background are thinly-veiled (at best) copes.
Great Story
Love your story. Dont listen to the nasty comments. The story is great and i cant wait for the next chapter.
agree
this story is AMAZING, it is really great it's vary touching and well written ill read what ever you write. please write on
Great!
It has similarities to the 'Genie' series, but is vastly different. Keep it up!
KEEP IT UP!
I agree with YoB1009, Dont lisen to anything Negative that anyone has to say, yes it is Similar to the Genie Chronicles but it is also diffrent in meany ways. This and Genie Chronicles are i have to say the two best stories/books i have even read. And i wish i had half the Talent that you do. Keep it up!
Trek
"Ok, make it so," he laughed, "Sorry, I always wanted to say that and have it actually mean something."
nice trk reference keep up the good work!
Good look into inner conflicts
Like the comment title said, it gives a good showing of what some inner conflicts people go through when they believe they are imperfect and undeserving of some things, even more so when it comes being uncomfortable with the way one looks and all the flaws that they see and some that they believe are there thanks to the belittling they recieve from others.
A nice chapter that goes through this process, shows that its more than just a regular story meant to masturbate to, though I hope I don't get to the end of this and find out it went the same way Joe Brolly's story that inspired this one.
@ YoB1009
I don't know what you're talking about. The original set up a good background and some rules. All the author did was take those and incorporate them into his story in because this is after all supposed to be an offshoot of the original storyline. The sex, characters, and storyline are all completely different with the possible exception of the supermarket scene in both stories.
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