It was okay, but the choice of words sometimes bothered me. Bosoms in particular isn't a very sexy word to me. Also, it felt a little forced. Maybe I'm just being overly critical though.
Great to see you back. Just logged in and there you were at the top of the list!!
This was good as a quick little vignette, but I like your more developed ones better. I'm off to read some of them now, maybe with your red short clip running in the background!
Don't be a stranger, we miss your flirting ways (At least I do)
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Anonymous06/24/07
Typical poor writing
When one lives in sex after the years you start existing in sex and that proves out in the writing which is just plain bad. Your sexmas and not Christmas story was awkward and this one was uninteresting.
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Anonymous06/25/07
Inane Word Usage
bosom? buttock? ample?
Guess what? zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz...
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Anonymous06/28/07
Too short
Much too short, no story development. Implausible plot - no such behavior happens on nude beaches. Meters?? Is this beach in Europe?
I love nude beaches. I've seen a lot of really sexy stuff in my years of exploring, but never anything like you described! That was incredibly hot. Great story!
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Anonymous08/31/07
Sexy Fun
Who cares whether the story is possible in the real world, it was sexy to read and thrill of losing ones self on a warm beach with a sexy person is more than mildly fun - and someone to join in too.
Hey write as you will - I found it nice and makes my pussy awake to needs of a womans' touch.
Enjoy...
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Anonymous07/23/08
this is GREAT.
why all the complaints?what's not to like?
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Anonymous08/15/12
Cumming hard!
He should have stuck an oiled finger up her ass while he was jerking off.
English
I don't know...
It was okay, but the choice of words sometimes bothered me. Bosoms in particular isn't a very sexy word to me. Also, it felt a little forced. Maybe I'm just being overly critical though.
Great to see you back
Great to see you back. Just logged in and there you were at the top of the list!!
This was good as a quick little vignette, but I like your more developed ones better. I'm off to read some of them now, maybe with your red short clip running in the background!
Don't be a stranger, we miss your flirting ways (At least I do)
Typical poor writing
When one lives in sex after the years you start existing in sex and that proves out in the writing which is just plain bad. Your sexmas and not Christmas story was awkward and this one was uninteresting.
Inane Word Usage
bosom? buttock? ample?
Guess what? zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz...
Too short
Much too short, no story development. Implausible plot - no such behavior happens on nude beaches. Meters?? Is this beach in Europe?
Bosoms!!
Geez talk about over sensitive!!
Boobs, bosoms, bazookas, tits, jugs, baps, knockers...who cares??????
Meters - not everyone is american u know!
Get over yourself......not everyone lives in the USA you know.
Totally Hot!
I love nude beaches. I've seen a lot of really sexy stuff in my years of exploring, but never anything like you described! That was incredibly hot. Great story!
Sexy Fun
Who cares whether the story is possible in the real world, it was sexy to read and thrill of losing ones self on a warm beach with a sexy person is more than mildly fun - and someone to join in too.
Hey write as you will - I found it nice and makes my pussy awake to needs of a womans' touch.
Enjoy...
this is GREAT.
why all the complaints?what's not to like?
Cumming hard!
He should have stuck an oiled finger up her ass while he was jerking off.
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