All Comments on 'A Birthday Present'

get hard over the finale

Brother eats sister and fucks her in a limo and then serves up her worst enemy on an operating table. What fantasies are made of!!

Great writing. Nice style and mechanics. It'll be interesting to see where this one takes us.

... but this is so intrequing that I <i>have</i> to read the next chapter. Very good so far ... plot, mechanics, pacing, romance, and suspense. Hope the rest is as good or better!

You need to read your own story. Writing of the story is not consistent with the ending. Also do a grammar check.