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Good Start to a good plot line
Great first chapter. Interesting characters so far. Looking forward to see the story develop.
aww...
next chapter next chapter!! looking forward to it
I gotta stop reading ahead...
But I will read the next chapter again when it's posted here. I love the story so far and who couldn't fall head over heals for a hot, sexy cop? I just love a man in (and out of) uniform! :)
Not Bad but
Not a bad first chapter but you are like a lot of submitters who dont bother to proof read. A few of your sentances just dont make sence. Do a grammar check and it will pick up errors for you. Other than that it appears to be the beginning of a good story.
Great Beginning
Loved the first chapter. Can't wait to see more of your work. You really have a talent for writing.
Another Great Story
off to read the next chapter.
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