- Loving Wives
- Abed Ch. 02
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All Comments on 'Abed Ch. 02'
by MungoParkIII
- 35 Comments
Anonymousalmost 17 years agothat would be a nice story.
ohioalmost 17 years agothat your readers can't even figure out the point of this story! Please, read more carefully, people! ohio
Bardichealmost 17 years agoMore funny than dissapointing to me :) It is the same as chapter 1. Some people just don't read the story. They can't. If they did they would see the point of it.
BlBonesalmost 17 years agoWhat a sense of humor. I admit that I was missing the point at first. But there is nothing better than a good wimpy bed story to remind us we are reading fiction. I'm sorry you have to endure the stupid comments from people who should be reading Reader's Digest (if they are capable), not Literotica.
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoditch digging as a profession. It sure ain't writing. You try to write flowery worda like you think you are an artist. You know where I come from , artist, is just another word for faggot.
coaster2almost 17 years agoThanks for throwing a little creativity into the mix. God bless the trolls, mouth-breathers and assorted other knuckle-draggers that inhabit this site.
Cheers!
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoBedbugs? King Size? not a wimp? i got a more appropriate word for you. Delusional. tell me, what good is a 'King Size' dick if you cant use it? or when you use is only when SHE wants to use it? what a STUPID WIMP!
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoany worse.......It did.
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoThe story-teller is the BED, morons. She is a single woman. The LW category was just a provocation, although the bed does feel married to her, as the first story explains.
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoread the story, but it was not until the last word that I realised what the story was really about.
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoNow, this is not a laugh matter, but a matter to be revealed for the inhumanity of the story
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoJust what we need,another ass hole who thinks they can write.
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoSome people just don't get the joke...ah well. This is damn funny satire...which is why most people don't understand why it's in Loving Wives....good story anyway mate....keep it up
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoThere's literally NOTHING to recommend about this story.
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoWhy was this written, and what is supposed to be learned from it. All I get is that the author has to much time on his hands.
Anonymousalmost 17 years agoThe first time "abed" was clever, but this time it was just plain boring.
KOLKOREalmost 17 years agoI was ready to be a bit more critical when I saw all the rage but no explanations to go with it; I figured you must hit on something deeper which I have not noticed so far (not a first and at this point it’s pretty clear it won’t be the last). What is it? The switch from a human narrator to an object? Jeez, where cars and boats are voluntarily treated like women or lovers can’t a bed where you actually do make love on become such transitional object? But I have just added to the quandary not answering it. <P>
If anything, this part turned into quite a benign (all the possible allusions of cheating or humiliated partner have been removed by now) and humorous piece of gotchu -a play on readers expectations and somewhat of a good hearted lesson to the reader to pay better attention to all potential cues. Now what is so enraging in that? <P>
The nomenclature charge is just an excuse of course. All it does is serve a convenience purpose; reaching the type of story you like best. But any author is always free to manipulate any reader on any level as long as it serves the greater good of the literary purpose. How the heck he might have been able to achieve that otherwise? By putting it right from the start in the Humor section (and destroying the surprise)? Or perhaps by posting a ‘warning’ label: “BEWARE READERS!!! This is actually not a dark angry betrayal story but a fun humorous piece”? <P>
<P>As it happens the bed (or should I say Mr. Bed) turns out quite the moral eh... bed, with the sentiments which should have put even the the angriest of commenters at total ease, but no such justice from the readers. Mr. bed proves his moral standing by seting his almost invisible predators on his slightly promiscuous owner and her partners, making it THE MOST ORIGINAL REVENGE OUT COME in recent memory. Top that if you can!
Anonymousover 16 years agoJust a pair of mentally impaired people living in a codependency existence. She lives a life of anything but safe, sane, and consensual, and oontinously places them both at risk of physical abuse as well as medical risk. One could argue his lack of saying no implies consent so perhaps she is correct in that regard. But their is no way either of their actions and behaviors may be considered safe or sane. Sorry I just didnt expect a story of mentally ill sex within the loving wives category. Writers write for one of two reasons. One is ego, to make themselves feel good in one way or aother. The other is to be read by their audience. At this point the writers opinions become less important and the readers evaluations become more important. Perhaps your great literary skills need to really take to heart the critiques and scores given by your real judges, not other writers, but the readers who have the final say.
Tearsofsorrow2over 15 years agoThis story and it's commentators illustrate something I have been feeling for a long time. A great many readers, read the story but they do not comprehend the story. Is the bed a wimp and a cuckhold? Yes. But it is still a bed. And the revenge of Bedbugs is both humorous and appropriate to the story. Now had this been an actually human male I would understand and agree with some of the comments. But in the end it is a bed.
Anonymousabout 13 years agoThis is ridiculous,if it was not so sad.
Absolutely worthless writer,this !
huedoggover 12 years agono man can give her what you do, another pussy whipped cuckold, in a few years you'll be able to lick her lovers balls. Enjoy the creampies cucky.
Youamiover 1 year agoWTF?!!! Bedbugs? Mmmmmmm...there's a perfect way to extract revenge NOT!!! Are you out of your mind writing this rubbish. Language-wise it reads as if you are trying (and failing) to raise this tale to a cerebral/arthouse level. You failed on all counts.This isn't arthouse, just shithouse.
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