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Good pacing
. . . that sets the mood. I like your description and with a little tightening up, this would be a even better poem.
I mentioned your poem in the Poetry Discussion and Feedback forum in my New Poem review: http://forum.literotica.com:81/showthread.php?p=23 285667#post23285667
I remember that night
If they only knew what happened after I walked through that door ;) I love you & you REALLY need to write more!!
breathless
Admittedly I only stumbled across your poem by accident and while I still picked myself up - I found myself being captured by words.
you have a talent.
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