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Author's Note
Hi,
This was supposed to have been posted as "El Paso City". As the note in the story says the original posting of this story was inadvertently deleted by a miscommunication between myself and the site managers when I submitted an edited version.
I hope you enjoy the story.
Regards, Jack
Thank You
Thank you for the "rest of " the story. As with all of your
stories, it was well done.
Hey Good Buddy!
Finally got to give you a ten. Five for the first posting of El Paso City and now five for the El Paso part 2.
It really was a great story. You keep proving that you are one of the best writers out there. Time after time you write great stories. You deserve all the kudos you get.
With the highest regards
DG Hear
GAnnE
Jake! Both parts are so well done...THANK YOU! A tale well told and wonderful vivid characters! I look forward to other
tales from a masterful storyteller.
Bravo!! The mystery behind the song comes 'clear'.
Jake! Both parts are so well done...THANK YOU! A tale well told and wonderful vivid characters! I look forward to other
tales from a masterful storyteller.
A tender and heart-warming tale!!
Like DG, I too finally got to give you a ten. Five for the first posting of El Paso City and now five for the El Paso part 2. This was a truly wonderful, tender and heart-warming tale that gave me so much enjoyment even at the second reading. Yes a great job showing what a great idea this was. You can all be very proud! Bravo, Pete.
Excellent!
An interesting account of Faleena's life and a really great account of the romance between Falina and Jack.. A very happy ending!! I was kinda wondering about how she felt about sex with Jack but it wasn't necessary.. I didn't think she would feel detached..
What the Hell
Jake, it was well worth a second read. In fact it was more enjoyable the second time because I could take the time to savor the richness of your writing. Thank You. Ronnie W.
A Beautiful Story
Jake
Just a beautiful story, in both parts. Really interesting seeing the similarities between the father and the son, and acknowledging that a strong and binding attraction two people can be established very quickly as I very well know from my own experience.
Bob T
Out Fucking Standing -
To start with a good - fun song lyric - and develop it into this -
Not one but two excellent complete stories - that develop from nothing into great romances that produce enduring loves - mature and full - just awesome -
Great creativity - great vision and superb execution - thank you sir -
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