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Good - but a little long
Good story development but it might have been better if it was separated in two stories or a warning that it's a long story that not quite over...
Picking a nit
Extremely good, if somewhat long for a single posting. I would point out a NIT, thought. Early on, Bobo lost his right hand, but late in the story, he is using his cutlass in his right hand and the left is the stump. This does NOT take away from a great yarn. Keep up the great work!
Nice story
A good basis for continuation in several directions but i have to say not very erotic.
Tish Tosh
Phineas, I enjoyed your installment as is.... please, encore! Though I do not believe I have read your work before - I thoroughly enjoyed the story (to date)it reminds me of the Belgariad series. Please continue your work
Great Story!!!
this is one of the best fantasy stories i've read in a long while! i'm a fantasy/adventure buff & i can say that this one is one of the best!!! more pls!!
Great
story!!! plzz continue it!
complex
Ilove the story even though it is so LONG. I think it could use a bit more sex appeal; this is supposed to be an adult site. Overall it was entertaining.
LitEROTICA
Lacks Eroticism. Beautiful story nonetheless.
Wow
very entertaining tale
Nicely done
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